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Celestial Reviews 153 - January 29, 1997

Note:  Good news!  Mark Aster is back.  He says he has a new backlog and
should post a story a week for a month or so.  In addition, he is reposting
some of his best stories. 

In addition, I have discovered that there are some stories by Mary Anne
Mohanraj that I have not yet reviewed.  I'll review one or two each week, and
she'll repost them when my reviews appear.

And finally, it looks like Mat Twassel has gone on a bit of a writing binge.
 He also is reposting some of his old stories.

What all three of these authors have in common is that while their stories
are often extremely erotic, they are also just plain good stories in their
own right.  I hope you enjoy both the reviews and the stories.

- Celeste

      "Heather Investigates" by Unknown Author (sex for science)
            9, 9, 10
      "Out in the Woods" by William Bloom (outdoor sex) 8, 7, 8
      "Sailor Moon - Anniversary" by nomad (Japanese cartoon
            pastiche) 9, 8, 4
      "The Coaches Wife" by Taylor Norton (boy fucks woman)
            4, 5, 5
      "The Conquest" by Mystery Girl (late-night rendezvous)
            9.5, 10, 10
      "Clean White Linen" by Mark Aster (exotic romance) 10, 9, 9
      "The Devouring Night" by Mary Anne A. Mohanraj (exotic
            romance) 10, 10, 10
      "Wineskin" by Mat Twassel (surrealistic sex) 10, 10, 9
      "Snowed In" by Dulcinea (really cool sex) 10, 10, 10
      "Hazy Shade of Winter" by Hawkeye (youthful romance)
            10, 10, 10
      "One Lucky Girl" by Ed Richards (romance) 9, 8, 8

"Heather Investigates" by Unknown Author (MCG@bartra.demon.co.uk). Heather is
very attractive, so attractive that she has always been getting more than her
share of attention from men, ever since she was 15 years old. She is now 29,
and the years have only added to her physical splendor. She'd rather buy
shoes, she has told herself many times, than get laid.  But not today.  Today
she is taking part in an experiment - actually a study, but she calls it an
experiment.  It's a study to determine the intensity and duration of female
orgasms. The study is not that bad a deal, unless a girl objects to being
blindfolded and gently bound while hungry hands, mouths, and cocks stimulate
her to sexual rapture. Eventually our blindfolded beauty has a cock in her
pussy, another in her anus, and the head researcher <g> in her mouth, while
she jerks off two young lab assistants. And then Mary goes to work on her
breasts.  Anything for science!

"Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeehhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!" says Heather, as she
registers an 11-minute orgasm. Two more minutes and she would have set the
record.  Better luck tomorrow!

Ratings for "Heather Investigates"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
 
"Out in the Woods" by William Bloom (Red Dragon Repost).  On senior ditch
day, the kids head for the park.  Billy's ex-girlfriend Alice asks him to
follow along behind her friend Ellen to make sure nothing happens to her.  He
watches, and eventually Ellen takes a swim and then sunbathes in the nude.
 Then "something" happens to her, and April joins in the fun with Billy and
Ellen.

One of the mistakes this author makes is convoluted verb tense.  For example,
at the very beginning of the story the narrator says, " I think it was
because she (April) has this prudish hang-up about only having sex in the
missionary position."  At the time he's telling the story - after the orgy in
the woods - he knows that April has no such hangup.  He should have said, " I
THOUGHT it was because she had this prudish hang-up about only having sex in
the missionary position."  Problems like this are annoying, but it's still a
sexy story.

Ratings for "Out in the Woods"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 7
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
 
"Sailor Moon - Anniversary" by nomad (cdavies@gpu.srv.ualberta.ca).  My
understanding is that the "Sailor Moon" stories are based on the Japanese
cartoon Sailor Moon.  I am not familiar with the cartoon series, but I was
told that there is enough information about the series within the text to
make it intelligible to a reader who is unfamiliar with the series.  Despite
the fact that the show is concerned with the adventures of fourteen year old
girls, the present story takes place several years later, after the
characters have matured sexually.

As I understand it, the Sailor Scouts possess mystical powers that enable
them to exercise unusual control over their bodies.  I assume there are other
stories in which Sailor Moon and her friends engage in ordinary, non-sexual
activities. Therefore, Sailor Moon fans will perhaps find this pastiche to be
interesting because it applies the familiar characteristics of these girls to
sexual settings.  

As an outsider, however, I found the story to be vaguely interesting but
generally boring.  Little aspects of magic that I didn't care about kept
popping up.  For a fan these aspects might make the story really interesting,
but they simply drove me to distraction - largely because I could not decide
whether each episode was supposed to be funny or romantic or whatever.

Ratings for "Sailor Moon - Anniversary"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 4
 
"The Coaches Wife" by Taylor Norton (jocon@tiac.net).  Bill has been the hero
in the Big Game; but instead of celebrating with the guys by gang-banging
Tina the cheerleader, he has a rendezvous with the coach's wife.  It seems
that Bill's parents are moving out of the district, and the coach has asked
his wife to keep the kid happy so that he'll be willing to move in with them
and stay in the district, so that they'll have another good basketball
season.

I become suspicious when an author misspells the title of a story, and in
this case my misgivings were verified.  The grammar is extremely confusing.
 In this case, the incoherence of the grammar really does detract from the
overall quality of the story.  I reviewed another story ("A Night Out") by
this author, and that one was far, far better than this one.  I hope this
author gets back on track.

Ratings for "The Coaches Wife"
Athena (technical quality): 4
Venus (plot & character): 5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5
 
"The Conquest" by Mystery Girl (mystery@sentex.net).  One of the joys of
reviewing these stories is finding a new author who writes exceptionally
well.  This story is marred by some minor grammatical errors, but overall it
is an extremely well-written story.

Alexis is one of those 16-year-olds whom nobody notices. Her personality and
lifestyle seem so unremarkable that not even her family members wonder what
is going on behind those greenish-hazel eyes of hers.  In Part 1 we discover
that she is very much in touch with her own sexuality, and in Part 2 we
discover that she often takes part in sexual adventures that nobody else
knows about.  The description of her rendezvous with her cyberlover is a real
turn-on.

This is one of those fantasies that might be really stupid in real life
(especially for a 16-year-old), but exploitation and abuse can be absent in
the imaginary world of this newsgroup.  I certainly hope this author has more
stories to offer!

Ratings for "The Conquest"
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
 
"Clean White Linen" by Mark Aster (MyFrThAl@aol.com).  This story, set at a
home or hotel on an African coast, describes part of a romance between a
beautiful young woman and a much older man.  The story is both erotic and
exotic, but I needed a few more clues to give me a clear picture of what was
happening.  It's good to see this author posting again, and I look forward to
seeing more of his stories.

Ratings for "Clean White Linen"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
 
"The Devouring Night" by Mary Anne A. Mohanraj (mohanraj@mills.edu). Princess
Sharmila is to be married to Gamilah, twelfth prince of that  name, lord of
the richest province in all of the country of Ranek, which seems to be
located in the area of the Indian subcontinent.  She's not excited about the
prospect, but she will do what is in the best interest of her country.  In
fact, she feels a stronger attraction to the poet who sings her praises at
the banquet on her wedding night than to the prince to whom she is betrothed.

This story certainly is about sex, but it is not exactly wet-dream or
masturbation material. Telling you any more of this story would ruin it for
you, and so I will summarize no further.  I'll simply say that this story is
both simple and shocking.

Ratings for "The Devouring Night"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
 
"Wineskin" by Mat Twassel (mmtwassel@aol.com).  The narrator and her husband
are invited for an evening at the house of his new boss and his much younger
wife.  The wife invites the narrator to go shopping with her, and either the
wife has a kinky approach to sex or the narrator has a bizarre imagination -
or perhaps both.  Reality blends so closely with fantasy in this story that
it's difficult to tell what is really happening; but the author intended it
that way.  This is a confusing but interesting story.

Ratings for "Wineskin"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
 
"Snowed In" by Dulcinea (ImDulcinea@aol.com).  "The sun that brief December
day/ Rose cheerless over hills of gray...." Had John Greenleaf Whittier
simply co-authored his poem with Dulcinea, it would certainly be a lot easier
to get teenagers to read "Snow-Bound."  I don't see the problem: fuck rhymes
with duck, cunt with hunt, and precum with become.  Whittier goes on for 759
lines; the folks that populate his poem spend over a week cooped up in a
house, and the raunchiest thing they do is read a novel that they have to
"hide from younger eyes."

Like many of Dulcinea's stories, this one celebrates the simple joys of two
people sharing their love and their bodies.  In real life, you have perhaps
noticed that teachers often marry other teachers.  That's because they can
share their snow days together.  Would I kid you about a thing like that?

Q.  What's the definition of a "coolie"?
A.  A quickie in the snow.

Ratings for "Snowed In"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
 
"Hazy Shade of Winter" by Hawkeye.  This story must have been around for a
while; it's a repost from the THC archive and has a 1993 copyright, but I
have never seen any stories by this author before.  This story read like a
short version of a Dirty Dawg story.  I mean that as a very real compliment.

Sam was attracted to Lisa when she flipped into his life; that is, he thought
she was beautiful because of the cute way she flipped her hair out of her
eyes.  They became close friends as they worked together, mopping rancid beer
and sharing other intimacies.  However, since she was already committed to
another boyfriend, he loved her from afar.  Well, you can guess where this is
going, and you'll probably be right; but you should read this excellent story
anyway.

Ratings for "Hazy Shade of Winter"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
 
"One Lucky Girl" by Ed Richards (gnbc@alpha.wcoil.com).  Pat has led an
uneventful life, reading alt.sex.stories and posting erotic drawings on a
binaries newsgroup.  Chuck has led a similarly uneventful but more affluent
life.  They meet on an Internet chat group, and he invites her to accompany
him in his motorhome to the Montana area.  To Pat's surprise, their hormones
click; and they copulate enthusiastically as they travel across the country.

This is a romantic story with good sexual scenes.  If the author wants to
improve it, he should stop being quite so concerned about telling a "true"
story and improve the focus on interesting details.  Often, the author seems
to be summarizing details rather than telling an interesting story.  Authors
often swear that a story is true, and they think that's important; but most
readers enjoy realistic stories more than true stories.  Specifically, I
would suggest that this author check out some of the great stories by SueNH
or Ann Douglas and see what he can learn from their styles.  On the other
hand, this is already a pretty good story.

Ratings for "One Lucky Girl"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
 
[A note to those confused by Celestial Reviews coming from a new 
direction: I have offered to repost these reviews as long as AOL keeps 
messing up.  Uther Pendragon.]

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