Path: newsfeed.direct.ca!news1.io.org!babe.lglobal.com!news2.insinc.net!news.sprintlink.net!news-pen-14.sprintlink.net!www.nntp.primenet.com!nntp.primenet.com!cs.utexas.edu!howland.erols.net!newsfeed.internetmci.com!in3.uu.net!newstf01.news.aol.com!audrey01.news.aol.com!not-for-mail From: celeste801@aol.com Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories Subject: Celestial Reviews 132 - Nov 6 (1/2) Date: 6 Nov 1996 18:43:18 GMT Organization: America Online, Inc. (1-800-827-6364) (1.10) Lines: 393 Sender: news@aol.com Message-ID: <19961106184600.NAA22807@ladder01.news.aol.com> NNTP-Posting-Host: ladder01.news-fddi.aol.com Status: N Celestial Reviews 132 - Nov 6, 1996 (1/2) Note: A correspondent has notified me that he has posted my Celestial Grammar and Advanced Celestial Grammar at the following web sites: http://www.u36.com/files/Authors/jord/wwwan/grammar_bas.html http://www.u36.com/files/Authors/jord/wwwan/grammar_adv.html These are genuinely useful grammar guidelines that have actually proven useful to college students as well as to authors on this newsgroup. They have the advantage of employing examples that are likely to be interesting and perhaps more memorable than those found in more traditional grammar books. Second Note: A reader has suggested that I review a series of stories entitled "Johnny's Closet." I would like to do this; but try as I might, I cannot find parts 6, 9, 11, and 12. If someone sends me those parts, I'll try to review that story as soon as possible. - Celeste "Inger" by Friar Dave (romance & emerging adolescence) 10, 10, 10 "Into the Woods" by With Sue (outdoor celebrity sex) 10, 10, 10 "Jinx-13" by MC Woodsmoke (mind control) 8, 5, 2 "Perfect Love" by Uther Pendragon (futuristic romance) 10, 9, 10 "One Moment in Time" by D.B. (romantic fling) 9, 10, 10 "A Leopard's Spots" by J. Boswell (fallen woman) 10, 10, 10 "Elevator Rape" by Dark Dreamer (rape in an elevator) 2, 1, 1 "Friends and Lovers" by MGR (sitcom parody) 1, 1, 1 "Tedi" by Drifter (miscellaneous orgies) 8, 7, 6 "The Inspiration" by David Cramer (visual arts & sex) 10, 10, 10 * "Date" by Deirdre (deja vu) 10, 9.5, 9.5 * "Daughter" by Deirdre (anal sex) 10, 9, 8 * "Daydream" by Deirdre (voyeurism & fantasy) 10, 8, 8 * "Deal" by Deirdre (voyeurism & anal sex) 10, 10, 10 * "Debt" by Deirdre (wild sex) 10, 10, 10 * "Denial" by Deirdre (anal sex) 10, 9.5, 9.5 * "Dip" by Deirdre (voyeurism and hot ff sex) 10, 10, 10 * "Dive" by Deirdre (voyeurism) 10, 9, 9 * "Door" by Deirdre (spanking) 10, 8, 5 * "Doctor" by Deirdre (bondage & doctors) 10, 8, 7 * "Drawer" by Deirdre (female dominance & slavery) 10, 9, 9 * Repost of a previous review (because the story has recently been reposted). "Inger" by Friar Dave (friar.dave@teamhbbs.com). Roger is a single Father who is raising a 12-year-old son. He hires Inger, an intelligent, dependable, but apparently unattractive college girl to do the housework, to help with homework, and to generally keep an eye on his son while he is at work. Bill discovers long before Roger does that Inger can really be a fox when she wants to be one. Meanwhile, Roger begins dating Bill's English teacher. Well, while Roger goes out with Bernice the English teacher, Inger notices that Bill has been running off to the bathroom to masturbate; and she asks him if it's because he's thinking about the English teacher who is with his father. Bill replies with something like, "No. I'm thinking about you, Inger. Look, I have another boner right now!" Since they have to study algebra, she helps him relax his erection before study time; and eventually she integrates their mutual physical attraction into part of an incentive system to get him to study hard. {Ooops! "Study hard" can have more than one meaning in this instance, I guess.} And so the plot thickens. I might add that giving a kid a hand job when he displays a hard-on that you have caused is not a good way to eliminate or minimize future erections. A more successful strategy would be to hit him in the groin with a baseball bat. There, that should settle you down for a while. As I said, Inger's method would not have been successful had it been her goal to minimize arousal in order to facilitate the study of algebra, which would have been a worthy goal. However, it turns out that she has needs too. And so she and Bill form a sort of Reciprocal Needs Alliance. She will scratch his back if he scratches hers - only it's not their backs that they will be scratching. This is a very good story. We get to see Roger develop his relationship with Bernice and Bill develop his with Inger, who has developed a tutoring system that manages to get the 12-year-old through calculus in just about three months! The sex is very hot. Pop quiz for Celeste: (1) Q. Should a man develop a sexual relationship with his son's English teacher? A. Sure, why not? (2) Q. Should a responsible parent hire a sexy college student and let her have sex with his 12-year-old son? A. No. A parent should screen and supervise his baby-sitter more carefully than this. If you'll pardon the expression, Roger just got lucky. Inger would be guilty of statutory rape in most jurisdictions. The judge would probably also be rough on the father for dereliction of parental responsibility. Note, however, that it's also extremely unlikely that a 12-year-old would within three months go from remedial algebra to advanced calculus - no matter what reward system the tutor employed. If a tutor could actually do this, the judge would probably give her a suspended sentence and require her to do community service - consisting of applying the same system to the judge's children or possibly to the judge himself. However, readers are advised to ignore this information and read this story as a very good fantasy. Ratings for "Inger" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Into the Woods" by With Sue (suenh@kear.tdsnet.com). Try this pickup line the next time you encounter a really attractive blonde: "Are you the Sue who writes erotic stories on the Internet?" If she says yes, then you should proceed to have pleasantly ecstatic sex with her. If she says no, then say, "Do you come here often?" or "What's a nice girl like you doing in a place like this?" or "Either smile or slap me if you'd like to have sex with me." In the present story a guy named Dave meets the real Sue in the woods and he tells her that her stories are by far the best on alt.sex.stories - better than all the drivel that's usually posted there. Such exaggeration is understandable, since by this time Dave was interested in getting into Sue's pants or helping her resolve a plot; but Sue's stories are not really quite that good. They're better than 95% of what's posted here and competitive with the very best; but this story is based on Dave's pickup line, and so we'll let his hyperbole stand. So anyway, Dave tells Sue that "Louvre Love" is his favorite among all her stories. This is blatantly silly! Aside from "Life's a Beach," "Louvre Love" is probably Sue's WORST story! Dave's statement is really an insidiously complicated pickup line. He expects Sue to respond with something like, "Louvre Love my Lovely Ass! Let me re-enact a scene from Craftsmanship with you!" By starting with Louvre Love, Dave can eventually get Sue to work through all of her plots that are better than that one, including "Slippery When Wet," "Lab Partners", and "Red Hot". Good Grief! That's right - there's also "Good Grief", "To Serve and Protect" and even "Adventureland", to say nothing of "Coffee Table", "Fun with Dick and Jane", "Film at Eleven", "Lucy in the Sky" or the great withSue stories like "Across the Catty Corner" and "Weekend on the Island." I was right - or at least close! In the middle of the story, Dave and Sue decide to work out the plot for a new story called "Into the Woods," which - surprisingly enough - is this very story that I am now reviewing! Imagine that! Well, actually they act out the basic details, and then I suppose Dave or Sue wrote the full story back at the computer. Ratings for "Into the Woods" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Jinx-13" by MC Woodsmoke (woodsmok@gte.net). This story is apparently a follow-up to something I am supposed to know about. I don't know whether it is a television show, an arcade game, a comic book, another story on this newsgroup, or what. Maybe if I could have figured this out I would have enjoyed the story more. As it was, I tried very hard to get into the story and then just gave up. The plot comes across as some sort of inside story written by one high school sophomore for another. The story begins with a villain (I think) named Vance (actually Hypknot) taking control of the mind and/or body of Moxy Spaulder (AKA Free4all), an insipid perfect 5'6" beauty with a 35B-23-35 body that is tight and muscular without any bulk and who talks like a really stupid, stereotypical valley girl. They have sex, but maybe they don't; I could never figure out what was purely in Moxy's mind (assuming she has one) or what was happening in the real world around her, nor could I ascertain anyone's motivation for doing anything. The sexual activities are verbally explicit but incredibly uninteresting. As I said earlier, I tried but gave up. If an author of a 6-part story cannot get my interest by the end of the second part, I think I have a right to look elsewhere for my entertainment. It is possible that readers who think more like bright 12-year-olds will enjoy this story a lot more than I did. For my own part, if I'm going to think hard while I read a recreational story, I expect to be rewarded, as was the case with "Perfect Love," which I'll review next. Ratings for "Jinx-13" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot & character): 5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 2 "Perfect Love" by Uther Pendragon (nobody@REPLAY.COM). And now for something completely different. This is a story about love and sex in America at the end of the 22nd century. If a similar account were written by an anthropologist in, say, the 25th century (or if the present story were written by a current anthropologist about similar events and customs during the 11th century), the author would probably start with definitions of key concepts that would enable the reader to relate the time being studied to events and customs in the reader's own life. For example, in the present case, it might be useful to say that the dangers of sexual diseases and pregnancy had been brought under control by the end of the 22nd century, that sexual activity was accepted by society as a natural part of growing up and that young people were actively assisted in their sexual development by more mature partners who played an important but temporary role in the life of the adolescent, and that what we now call marriage had been subdivided into a period of time referred to as pairing followed by a more permanent relationship referred to as partnering. There's more to sexual life in this futuristic society than what I described in the preceding paragraph. I have mentioned this much simply to state that the author does not take the systematic approach of an anthropologist, but rather uses more of a chain-of-thought approach to introduce us to Jared, Dawn, Tai and the others in this story. This more casual, sometimes poetic approach is designed to make the story less technical and more enjoyable than the anthropological approach. Unfortunately, it also makes the story somewhat confusing. My advice would be to express the ideas more directly through action instead of intellectual discourse and to focus on a single point more cohesively. I would also suggest doing something about the names. The atmosphere of the story was already strange, and on top of that I had to deal with weird, hyphenated names. It was like dealing with a Russian novel or the British aristocracy! I reacted by ignoring most of the names that I considered to be unimportant, and this probably added to the confusion that I experienced. I hasten to add that in spite of my comments in the previous paragraph I think this is already a very good story. However, this is an author who revises and improves his work even after he has posted it; and my guess is that someday this author will revise this story to make it really excellent. In addition to describing a futuristic society, the author describes the love life of a young man who departs from the traditional style of that society. He appears to be a romantic in a scientific, pragmatic, structured civilization. What the author is asking us to do is to imagine a world that is quite different from our own and then to imagine a person whose lifestyle is interesting because it departs from the strictures of that society. This is hard to do - we're being asked to imagine hypothetical variations about a hypothetical society to which we have barely been introduced. Although I found the effort to be at times frustrating, overall I found it to be interesting and worthwhile. There's not much I can really say about the story itself. You have to read it to believe it. The plot begins with the sex education of an emerging adolescent boy at the end of the 22nd century. The society refers to this process as maturing the libido, and it is essentially a sort of apprenticeship during which the young man matches up with an older woman who teaches him the necessary skills and attitudes. The young man decides to enter a state of suspended animation in order to let a younger woman become closer to his own age, so that their union will be more acceptable to their culture. But as the 20th-century song by the Stattler Brothers says, "Life gets complicated when you enter suspended animation." As I said, read the story and enjoy it for yourself. I'd like to make two final comments about this story. First, the other story with which I most closely associate this one is "Tales of the Seeding" by Wollstonecraft. The level of civilization in the two stories make them almost opposites; but in both cases the reader's enjoyment arises from trying to figure out what in the world the protagonists are doing as they work out their sexual feelings and from comparing the activities and emotions of the protagonists to their own. I encourage you to read both stories. Elf Sternberg has also written several similar stories about sexual relationships in a futuristic society. Second, I find it interesting that this story can be written by the same author who wrote the recent series of stories about Bob and Jeanette Brennan. Those stories (all beginning with "For...") focused on the developing, romantic relationship of a couple who seemed so realistic that I felt I knew them personally. The present story, on the other hand, focuses on people who by definition cannot exist at all. I am impressed that one person can write so effectively on both these levels. Ratings for "Perfect Love" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "A Leopard's Spots" by J. Boswell. This story is presented in a format that appears to be an interview with either a psychiatrist or a newspaper reporter. The lovely but lithe and luscious lady had left her dysfunctional family in Maine to become a lewd and lascivious whore in Baltimore, where she eventually fell in love with a wholesome middle-class man whose family rejected her. The main action of the story takes place at the bachelor party of her husband's brother, where we discover that one can't change a leopard's spots. I'm sure people who get turned on by slutty wife stories will enjoy this story for reasons different than mine - I thought it was a well-written, poignant story. Ratings for "A Leopard's Spots" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "One Moment in Time" by D.B. This story was originally posted by Michael K. Smith "for a friend" who had written it but could not post it herself, because she is a teacher in a public school and could therefore not engage in public impropriety. How quaint! The present reposting is by a person named Clayton, who has reposted quite a few really good stories recently. I have no idea whether this author has posted any additional stories, or (if so) what name she now uses. If anyone knows the answers to these questions, I'd like to hear the information, since this is a potentially excellent author. This story describes the passionate attraction that develops when a married man falls in love with a married woman at first sight and decides to take the chance to act on that attraction. I've felt these attractions myself, and so has my husband. I'm pretty sure that in real life acting on these attractions is more likely to lead to an ending like that in the movie "Fatal Attraction" or at least screw up one's family life pretty badly; but it sure is fun to read about one of these fantasies working out so well. This is really hot stuff! Ratings for "One Moment in Time" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Elevator Rape" by Dark Dreamer. I love stories that have "interracial" in their title lines. They so often speak of love among my brothers and my sisters all over this land. In his disclaimer to this story, however, the author warns us with several exclamation points that this is a story about a white woman being raped on an elevator by a large, powerfully built black man, who - needless to say - has a monster cock. If you don't like this kind of story, then the author suggests that you not read it. I concur with the author's advice. A black man riding an elevator decides for no apparent reason other than that he is an asshole to rape the white woman with whom he shares the elevator. Oddly enough, she doesn't enjoy the sexual pleasure he bestows upon her, even when he throws her into the trunk of his car afterwards. Then we come upon these words: "It would be a long night, a night of unspeakabd began to lick him. He moaned and rubbed his cock on her hot little tongue. The camera zoomed out a bit, and caught the woman in the chair sliding her fingers up and down the little 5 year olds pussy, stroking the little clit." I have no idea where these or the ensuing words came from. But after all, who am I to complain; the author himself told me not to read this story, which degenerates into completely incoherent nonsense. Ratings for "Elevator Rape" Athena (technical quality): 2 Venus (plot & character): 1 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 1 "Friends and Lovers" by MGR (MR1996@gnn.com). I enjoy the sitcom entitled "Friends" and was looking forward to reading this parody. I only mention it to warn you not to bother. Maybe there was something wrong with the mechanism by which the author posted this story, but it consists of completely inane drivel. If you want a parody of "Friends," read the one by Erin8667 that I reviewed in CR 113. It wasn't great; but it was a lot better than this one. Better yet, pray that Uncle Mike's executor finds the Lost Manuscript containing that author's rendition of this sitcom. Ratings for "Friends and Lovers" Athena (technical quality): 1 Venus (plot & character): 1 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 1 "Tedi" by Drifter (an176606@anon.penet.fi). Tedi was deeply devoted to Tom. The first time Tom ate her, Tedi came and came and came; and things only got better after that. They made it through college and got married and lived happily ever after; and that's only the end of part 1 of 7! Until the middle of Part 2 Tom is the only guy Tedi has fucked; but they lay plans by fantasizing about an orgy while engaging in phone sex. As soon as she hangs up, she heads for the apartment of Carol and Carl, about whom they were fantasizing, and joins them in bed, where the trio are joined by the couple's son Case, who has just returned from having sex with Casey. This is actually somewhat confusing. I suspect this plot is a little easier for people who don't mind dealing with people with almost identical names who are sharing their spouses and children as sexual partners at the drop of a hat. As Sharon (not mentioned in the previous sentence) says, "Far out!" Fortunately, both Tom and Tedi became equally suddenly and equally insatiably interested in swinging; and so this common interest brings them together and supplies the basis for solid matrimonial bliss. In order for Tom to achieve a promotion, Tedi has to have sex with Don and Bud and Bill, which is no problem, because they have great penises and Tom can watch and enjoy it and even join in or fuck someone else while doing so. She does it in the limo; she does it in the house; she does it on all fours (with Thor the dog, of course); she does it with green eggs and ham! As a reward, Tom becomes a vice-president of the Company; and Tedi gets to have sex with even more people She even gets to have sex with Leroy, a black gentleman who is a professional football quarterback, who loves the opera, and who has a monster cock. There's more; but it's strangely similar to what I described in the previous paragraph. My problem with this story is that the plot is very forced. I guess the sex is moderately sexy; but the story line just seems to be designed to force together a whole bunch of sexual escapades for people who think it would be great to have orgies that hurt nobody, to swallow a monster cock from a stereotypical black stud, or to pop a 14-year-old's cherry. I guess my problem is that I have read too many good stories this week to want to recommend this one very highly. Ratings for "Tedi" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot & character): 7 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6 (Continued in 2/2) Path: newsfeed.direct.ca!news.insinc.net!news2.insinc.net!news.sprintlink.net!news-pen-14.sprintlink.net!www.nntp.primenet.com!nntp.primenet.com!news.bbnplanet.com!cpk-news-hub1.bbnplanet.com!newsfeed.internetmci.com!in1.uu.net!newstf01.news.aol.com!audrey01.news.aol.com!not-for-mail From: celeste801@aol.com Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories Subject: Celestial Reviews 132 - Nov 6 (2/2) Date: 6 Nov 1996 18:46:21 GMT Organization: America Online, Inc. (1-800-827-6364) (1.10) Lines: 256 Sender: news@aol.com Message-ID: <19961106184900.NAA22827@ladder01.news.aol.com> NNTP-Posting-Host: ladder01.news-fddi.aol.com Status: N Celestial Reviews 132 - Nov 6, 1996 (2/2) (Continued from 1/2) "The Inspiration" by David Cramer (david@law.uoregon.edu). This and the previous story ("Tedi") are similar in the respect that both of them are written from a perspective that differs from my own. I am neither an extreme hedonist nor a talented sculptor. The previous story I rated somewhat negatively, because I felt that it did not allow me as an outsider to see the thrill of what was happening in that story; it just came across as a ritualistic listing of titillating events chained together because the formula called for events like those to fill that kind of story. The present story, on the other hand, DOES enable me as an outsider to feel the thrill of artistic creation. I think the contrast between these two stories offers a good example of the difference between a mediocre and an excellent erotic story. I won't try to describe the present story in detail, except to say that Thomas is a sculptor who becomes almost intoxicated with the need to sculpt a beautiful woman. He eventually makes love to her, and this enables him to bring his artistic effort to fruition. I enjoy art; but as I have said, I am not a visual artist. I cannot even draw those bonus.jpg pictures that occasionally show up on this newsgroup. However, I have a friend who is an excellent artist. She has drawn a great picture of two lesbians making love. She is not a lesbian herself, nor am I; but her painting makes me believe that the emotions it displays are real. I once asked her how she did this. Did she have to make love to another woman to express the emotions shown in her picture? She said no, and she added that as far as she knew the models were not lesbians either; but she said she did have to walk around inside the heads of the people she was painting. I mention the information in the preceding paragraph to make the point that I don't even buy this author's apparent premise that it would be important for an artist to make love to a woman in order to sculpt her perfectly; but he conveys his story to me in such a way that I can say to myself, "Yes! That makes sense!" This author has an insight that is different from my own and from my friend's; but unlike the author of the previous story, he conveys his insight to me in such a way that I am at least temporarily able to set aside my own perspective and accept his. That is the mark of an excellent writer. I don't want to over-analyze this story, but one of the ways the author accomplishes his goal is by being so accurate and vivid in the aspects where his character's thoughts and actions do overlap with my own experiences. For example, although I am not an artist, I myself have had the experience of being suddenly and constantly aware of a person whose existence I had not previously noticed. This author describes a similar experience in the first lines of the story. He seizes that and other details and integrates them into a plot that enables me to blend my own experience with that of a person who is not at all like me. I really enjoyed this story. This is a talented author, and I hope we can see more of his writing. Ratings for "Inspiration" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "First" by Mark Aster (MyFrThAl@aol.com). This story reports the first sexual experience of Our Hero - at least I assume this is the same guy who subsequently does such fine work with Pat, Julie, and their assorted friends and relatives. The First Time came under rather sordid circumstances with a much older woman when he was 17 years old and they were working together on a political campaign. The second time came about ten minutes later and was much less sordid. As I read this well-written story, I couldn't help thinking that Pat and Julie Allen were good for Our Hero. Fatherhood will be good for him too. Ratings for "First" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Date" by Deirdre. Breaking up is hard to do. Someone should write a song about that theme. In this case, the girl has broken up with her boyfriend in an awkward manner - she left him the Dear John message on his answering machine while he was out of town. But when the guy came back from his trip, he came to see her without listening to her message. Now he's in her arms, being a really wonderful guy. Deja vu! I've seen this on Dick Van Dyke - only it was a script that would offend the boss. Deja vu! I saw this on Days of Our Life last week - only it was a letter that was written but was supposed to be destroyed but that somebody wanted back before somebody else could read it and destroy all hope of happiness. Deja vu! This is one of the most common story lines in history. What will Deirdre do with it? Deja vu! I'm not going to tell you. You'll have to read the story and find out for yourself. Ratings for "Date" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9.5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5 * "Daughter" by Deirdre. The daughter asks her mother if it would be OK to have anal sex with her fiance. The mother is shocked and says that no decent woman would do that. Does that mean that there is no anal sex in this story? Yeah, right! How does the mother become convinced to change her mind? Read the story and find out. Ratings for "Daughter" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 * "Daydream" by Deirdre. A middle-aged woman watches a college guy paint her neighbor's house. She daydreams about what it would be like to be his little college girlfriend. There's no real sex in this story; but the fantasy is pretty hot. Ratings for "Daydream" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 * "Deal" by Deirdre. The disconsolate man has been forced to watch his wife try on some clothes. The saleslady walks up to him and says quietly, "Do you mind if I make a try for her? Please? I'll make it worth your while." The man assures the saleslady that his wife is not interested in sex with women, but he agrees to let her try. Will she succeed? Of course, she will; otherwise there would be no story. And how will the saleslady make it worthwhile for all of us? Ratings for "Deal" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Debt" by Deirdre. I usually read one of Deirdre's stories, pause thoughtfully, and then write my review. This time I thought I'd try writing it while I read the story. Here goes. The doorbell rings and the guy answers the door. One of the two women whom he meets says, "We're here because Claire lost a bet and has to pay up." As soon as she says that, the other girl drops to her knees in front of the man, unzips his fly, and begins sucking his cock. This is an example of what the old literature texts used to call in medias res - starting the story with a plunge directly into the action. Anyway, after the blowjob the guy listens at his door and hears the two women going to the next apartment, which is inhabited by the fair Diane. Further eavesdropping reveals a major gambling problem: Claire also appears to be eating Diane out to pay a debt. Next our hero and Diane get invited to dinner with Claire and Shannon. Shortly after dessert is served, the other two women dive under the table; and one starts sucking the guy's cock, while the other is invisibly doing a job on Diane, who is seated at the opposite end of the table. At this point it is not clear whether the problem is compulsive gambling, an eating disorder, or simple nymphomania. As the story reaches its denouement, we discover that the other two women have made it their personal project (apparently as a result of an unspecified bet) to get the guy and Diane into the sack together and to become their servants, with the goal of enhancing the sexual happiness of the new couple. The guy seems to like all this but can't quite figure out what's going on - which is pretty much my own reaction to the story. Another weird but excellent tale from Deirdre! Ratings for "Debt" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Denial" by Deirdre. Two high school boys are out back showing their hardware to each other. A passerby - a girl whom they like - sees them. The embarrassed boys run inside the house. No big deal; she won't deal anybody. Knock, knock! It's the girl. No big deal, she says; but she'd like to see how gay guys do it! But they're not gay guys, and they tell her so. She doesn't believe them; after all, she saw them. If they'll just show her how gay guys do it, she won't tell anybody; but if they stick with this crap about not being gay, she'll tell the whole world. If this was ever on Dick Van Dyke, I missed the episode. Somebody should write a song about this. I learned a long time ago how to deal with blackmail. Simply call the blackmailer's bluff. Either that or kill the blackmailer and chop the body up into small pieces. Anyway, the guys do it for the girl; and then the story starts taking surprising twists. Ratings for "Denial" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9.5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5 * "Dip" by Deirdre. Deirdre has the ability to catch my interest at the very beginning of a story and to hold my attention right up to the abrupt ending. This story exemplifies that magical power. A woman finds herself physically attracted to her sister-in-law and goes shopping with her. Soon she finds herself swimming in the nude with her and then in a stranger's apartment making love to the sister-in-law and the other woman. Ratings for "Dip" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Dive" by Deirdre. The author dedicates this story to all women who have been asked by their men if they would do it with another woman. In brief, two couples are fooling around by a swimming pool and start taking pictures of various pairs in positions of feigned intimacy. Emotions get hot, and the couples retire to private spots for sex. Even though the actual sex is not very explicit, the anticipation is quite hot. Ratings for "Dive" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 * "Door" by Deirdre. This story is stylistically well written, but I didn't enjoy it. I'm not into the spanking scene; but I'm usually not interested in actually doing what happens in *most* of Deirdre's stories. Nonetheless I usually do find the stories interesting. She has the ability to make even very weird things sound interesting. But this one missed the mark with me. It's about a girl who goes out with a friend, who gets spanked for her birthday; then they masturbate. That's it. Maybe spanking enthusiasts will enjoy it more than I did. Ratings for "Door" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5 * "Doctor" by Deirdre. If you've always suspected that doctors and nurses were really sex perverts, this story will confirm your suspicions. The woman in this story is bound and manipulated in various ways to satisfy her own lust and that of the medical personnel whom she encounters. This is another one of Deirdre's "Twilight Zone" stories. Ratings for "Doctor" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7 * "Drawer" by Deirdre. People who are into domination and submission with the woman doing the dominating will enjoy this story. From what I've learned in recent months, this story seems to be a short version of how to whip the guys into line. Although in my real life I enjoy reciprocally flirting with and seducing my husband on a regular basis, a story like this has a certain earie appeal. Why not just keep the guys around sixty-nining one another until we women need someone to pamper us - and then we just pull one off the rack or head over to the sanctuary to pick up some sex. Maybe it would be even easier to have someone else control the men for us. Yeah, that's it! Maybe we can find a sport and a beverage, and the guys could sit around on couches or stools and just stare mindlessly at the sport on television while they guzzle the beverage; and whenever we need them to service us, we could snap our fingers or turn off the TV and they'd come running. Ratings for "Drawer" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9