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Celestial Reviews 111 - August 24, 1996 (1/2)

Note: Several people have recently asked me how to submit stories to me
and to the newsgroup. Once your stories are in satisfactory shape to
submit, here's how I post on a.s.s. through AOL: (1) I copy my review
(story) from my word processor onto my clipboard; (2) I log into the
a.s.s. newsgroup;  (3) I select the "Send New Message" option, and (4) I
paste my review into the space that appears on the screen for that
purpose.  This process may be slightly different with other services.

My e-mail address (Celeste801) appears automatically with the message when
it appears in the postings.  Since I prefer to be known as simply Celeste,
I put that name somewhere in my message.

I myself achieve a satisfactory degree of anonymity by simply using the
e-mail address Celeste801 and the nom de plume Celeste.  It is my
impression that AOL will protect my anonymity, unless I start breaking
laws that are far more serious than telling dirty stories to adults.  I'm
pretty sure my daughter Chelsea and my friend Tipper don't even know that
I am really Celeste, although I'm pretty sure they both read my reviews
faithfully.  

If you need further anonymity, you can use the "anon" service that goes
through Finland.  Simply follow the directions at the end of one of the
stories that use this service to obtain the guidelines for submitting
stories through that service.  It is my understanding that that service is
supported by a person who is best described as a "free speech fanatic." 
However, I understand even that service is subjected to some censorship;
but so far this has occurred only when really bad people have tried to use
the service for improper purposes (e.g., terrorists using it to send
threats via e-mail).

You should avoid using in your story any keyboard conventions that will
not come across to ordinary readers receiving ASCII files from the
newsgroup.  For example, italics and boldface do not work, nor do smart
single quotation marks, etc.  Either these conventions will be omitted in
the files people receive or they will be replaced by weird symbols that
will bother your future readers.  Simply avoid using these, if you know
about them and can select another way to communicate your ideas.

If you would prefer to receive additional feedback from a proofreader
before you post your story, send a request (not the actual story) to me,
and I'll assign a free proofreader.  This is a loosely organized service
of volunteers, but it really does seem to work pretty well.  It will be up
to you and the proofreader to decide how to share and improve your work. 
There is a huge value in having someone else look at your story before you
post it.

Finally, if you would like to be certain that I will review your story in
Celestial Reviews, send a copy by e-mail to me (celeste801@aol.com).  Send
it a few days before you post the story or at least at the same time you
post the story.  That way I can try to post my review around the same time
it appears in the postings.  I cannot promise to read and review ALL the
stories I receive, but I try.

- Celeste

      "Neighbors" by Michael K. Smith (romance & emerging
            adolescence) 10, 10, 10
      "Catherine" by Laura Leigh (transgender magic) 9, 1, 1
      "Creative Interlude" by Ann Douglas (sex fantasies of a 
            smut writer) 10, 9, 9
      "A Gentle Massage for Diana" by Tom Bombadil (sensuous
            massage) 10, 10, 10
       "Trinity Trilogy Novel 7/14" by Tom Trinity 
            (miscellaneous orgies) 10, 9.5, 10
      "Doogie Howser, M.D.: The Final Fuck" by Uncle Mike
            (sitcom parody) 10, 10, 10
      "Burgular" by Unknown Author (sex with intruder)
            5, 5, 5
      "Beach Balls" by Richard Lovel (masturbation) 9, 5, 5
      "The Origin of a Superheroine" by Star Girl (superhero rape)
            9.5, 9, 9
      "Twice the Fun" by Unknown Author (See Discussion Below)
     *"Double Trouble" by Randu (sci-fi sex) 10, 10, 10

* =  Repost of a previous review (to compare it to a recently
      posted story).

"Neighbors" by Michael K. Smith (mksmith@metronet.com).  Mike lusts after
Carol from afar - from the house next door, that is.  He's divorced, and
she has recently thrown her husband out; and he's beginning to notice more
and more how attractive she is.  One day he finds an excuse to give her a
foot rub.  {Now, you have to understand that for some of us foot rubs are
a form of either masturbation or foreplay.}  He behaves like a perfect
gentleman.  Mike and Carol kiss and neck passionately sans enfuckment and
are having a good ole time - when Carol's 15-year-old daughter comes home
early and walks in on them unexpectedly.

I mention this anecdote with the daughter because it demonstrates the
level of sophistication of the story.  It may be fun to fantasize about
humping the slutty next door neighbor or gang-banging the bus driver or
inviting the daughter to join in for a little incestuous menage a trois;
but real life sometimes diverges from fantasy.  Adults - and especially
parents - have to be responsible as well as sexy.  In this instance, Carol
leaves Mike on the couch, goes to her daughter's room to discuss the
matter with her, and then rejoins Mike for some more romance.  Some
readers may find this dull; but I find this kind of stuff to be very hot -
because it more closely resembles things that I might do in what I would
like to think is my own, mature, responsible life.

Well, actually Carol lets Stephanie watch her making out with Mike.  That
would go beyond my own limits; but I have to admit that I found it to be
extremely erotic.  This is another very good story.  I enjoyed it
immensely.

Last week I criticized an author for the improper balance of details - too
much irrelevant and too little relevant detail.  Smith does an excellent
job of supplying the right blend of details.  At times he seems to be off
the subject; but he's really setting up the mood for what he wants us to
notice next.  This story offers a good example of what I am talking about.

Ratings for "Neighbors"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10

"Catherine" by Laura Leigh.  This is a story about a crossdressing man who
wishes he were a real woman.  Poof!  Bobby gets his wish and becomes his
best friend Catherine, who then rejoins her old friend Wyatt, marries him,
and lives happily ever after.  I got lost somewhere in the middle of the
story.  There are too many loose ends.  If Bobby turned into Catherine
while making love to Brick Foster, what happened to Catherine who was down
in the washeteria?  Shouldn't there be two Catherines now?  Or did the
other Catherine turn into Bobby and then just disappear?  Furthermore, if
Bobby's brain and personality had been taken over by Catherine's, why did
Bobby still remember things from Bobby - wouldn't the same brain cells be
used for contradictory purposes?  The story was just too simplistic.  I
didn't like it at all.

Ratings for "Catherine"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 1
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 1

"Creative Interlude" by Ann Douglas (AnnD55@Pipeline.Com).  We start in
the middle of a hot story.  Then we discover that the real story is about
Sondra, who is writing a story for a.s.s.  While she writes, her fantasies
bring her into the lives of the people she is writing about.  This is an
interesting story.  As a reader, you can fantasize that you are a writer
fantasizing about the people you are writing about for readers like
yourself!

Ratings for "Creative Interlude"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9

 "A Gentle Massage for Diana" by Tom Bombadil (jmmeloy@IslandNet.com). 
Diana is a successful businesswoman who has a glint of lust in her eye for
the young man who works for her as an office assistant.  She fantasizes a
little about him, but then she sets aside the fantasies as she looks
forward to the wonderful evening she will have with her husband that
evening.  On the way home she stops for her weekly massage, and we
discover that she gets a very special treatment from the hunk who services
her as a masseur.  The massage is extremely erotic and goes well beyond
what my friend the masseuse says happens in a reputable massage
establishment.

This is a very good story and gets very high ratings.  However, a problem
with the story is that it doesn't quite fulfill its potential with regard
to maintaining the tension between the woman's love for her husband and
her enjoyment of the massage.  As I read the story, I initially said to
myself that this was a woman much like myself - attracted by what is
sensuous in the rest of the world, but reserving her passion for her "true
love."  Then I saw her getting way too high way too easily with the
masseur; and I said to myself that this was not at all like me - in fact,
it was not at all like the character described earlier in the story.  

I don't want to give away details that make the story interesting, but I
think the author could have achieved an even better impact by making the
woman not only sexy and passionate but also more obviously consistent with
her own persona throughout the story.  Let me clarify that.  The
characterization IS in fact consistent; and that becomes clear at the end
of the story.  The problem is that while reading the sexiest parts of the
story the reader is not likely to perceive the character as being
consistent with the author's initial and final portrayal of her.  The
story would have a better impact (what I might call a double whammy) if
the author would have carried this off more perfectly.  That is, the
author should have maintained the tension between the woman's personality
and what happened to her.  That tension IS brought into focus at the end
of the story; but my reaction was an abrupt, "Oh! I get it!" rather than a
more full enjoyment that could have been accomplished, I think, through a
different approach in the middle of the story.  Read the story yourself
and see if you agree with me.  As I said, it's a very good story.

Ratings for "A Gentle Massage for Diana"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10

"Trinity Trilogy Novel 7/14" by Tom Trinity (stbush@iglou.com). For those
of you who joined us late - "The Trinity Trilogy" was a series of 99
stories about a threesome (trilogy) of enthusiastic hedonists published
over a period of several years.  Shelby Bush maintains contact with the
author, who is no longer in a position to write more stories or to repost
those already written; and Shelby has agreed to repost all the stories as
the "Trinity Trilogy Novel" in 14 segments over a period of 14 weeks.  We
are now in week 7, and I have detected a pattern in the stories: the
members of the Happy Trio seem to be interested in finding new types of
orgies every time they go to a science fiction convention.

This week Our Gang starts out in Louisville, and the Orgy du Jour consists
of seven women in a hotel room with Tom.  All the women have been screened
for appropriate contraception.  They spin a bottle of Irish whiskey, and
the lady to whom the bottle points gets three minutes (via egg timer) to
use Tom in any friendly way she wishes.  After each lady has had a turn,
they drink the whisky and use Tom as a target in a free-play activity. 
When the bottle is empty, Tom uses it as a selection device to determine
which lady will be the recipient of his initial deposit.  This is followed
by more free play.  I'm not familiar with Emily Post, but this sounds like
a good way to organize an orgy or wedding shower.

The next chapter describes another orgy.  The only specific, scientific
information is that the number of participants is a multiple of three -
two females and one male in each fuckgroup.  Sounds reasonable.  Other
than that, it's free play. 

I shouldn't give the impression that this series is about nothing but
orgies.  In fact, two chapters are devoted to a mid-week trip to Atlanta,
during which Our Hero meets a Special Friend (whom he had met, to be sure,
at an orgy) - and they frolic monogamously and gloriously for two days,
while she delivers several million dollars worth of securities to a
customer of her bank.  They even eat occasional meals at ordinary
restaurants, without copulating either on or under the furniture.  These
people are just decent human beings with strong libidos.

The most unusual event in this segment is that a fourth person joins the
Trinity Trilogy.  There is no word for this new menage; but I suppose if
the Big Ten can have eleven football teams, then a Trinity or Trilogy can
have four sex maniacs.  Janie joins because she is enamored of Tom, but
she gets along pretty well with Candy and Judy too.

This segment includes a wide variety of sexual activities - one on one and
many on one; sex in motel rooms, at home, and outside in the rain; sex
during a poker game; and tag-team sex 
a-la-wrestling-match.  You name it; they've got it!

Ratings for "Trinity Trilogy Novel 7/14"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10

"Doogie Howser, M.D.: The Final Fuck" by Uncle Mike
(fr582@cleveland.Freenet.Edu).  Doogie Howser is a young adolescent - I
assume maybe 15 or 16 years old.  A boy genius, he has already completed
medical school and is an excellent doctor.  Each week's episode consists
of poignant and humorous situations that might occur to such a person
working in a hospital.  In addition to numerous human-interest anecdotes,
each episode has a common theme running through it - usually having
something to do with the contrast between Doogie's chronological youth and
the maturity demanded by his medical work.  To emphasize this contrast,
Doogie's faithful sidekick Vinnie generally hangs around and acts like a
normal adolescent.

In this week's episode, Doogie has decided to unload his virginity.  There
are a couple of humorous or poignant false starts, but then he makes it
with a corpse down in the morgue.  That's right.  Uncle Mike has stooped
to necrophilia.  Adolescent geniuses sometimes have emotional troubles:
"God help me, I even thought about shoving it in her asshole as well --
but the sphincter muscles tend to relax after death, and I didn't want to
stick my cock into a load of shit."  Vinnie and Doogie conclude that
Doogie is now a non-virgin, even though the partner was "unconscious."

If you're looking for a realistic, erotic sex story, this is not it.  On
the other hand, if you want to read a good parody, this is an excellent
story.  The author does a great job of inserting bizarre events into the
"Doogie Howser" standard format.

Ratings for "Doogie Howser, M.D."
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10

"Burgular" by Unknown Author.  What should you do if you're asleep in your
bed with your husband and you hear a noise in the kitchen in the middle of
the night?  Why, you should leave your husband asleep and sneak naked down
the stairs to investigate.  And what should you do if you find a
"burgular" there?  Why, you should tell him to stop immediately or you'll
call the police!  And what should you do if the "burgular" turns out to be
a young woman rather than a man?  Why, you should fuck her brains out in
the kitchen and then bring her upstairs as a special surprise for your
husband - but you should be careful not to awaken the kids!

As you may suspect from the title, the author has not proofread this EBS
repost very carefully.  In addition, the notion that a burglar is likely
to become a really hot and friendly sex partner is fairly improbable- to
say the least; but this is a persistent fantasy for some people.  If you
enjoy the fantasy and are willing to wade through the spelling and grammar
mistakes, you may enjoy this story.  Otherwise, look elsewhere.

Ratings for "Burgular
Athena (technical quality): 5
Venus (plot & character): 5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5

"Beach Balls" by Richard Lovel (malory@neosoft.com). "The Peter Files"
purport to be a longitudinal case study of masturbatory addiction in an
adult male, conducted at the Institute for Correction of Sexual
Misbehavior. The author says that the series is made available in order to
increase the public awareness and understanding of the problem of
masturbation dependency in males, and especially as a resource to those
persons in a co-dependent relationship with a habitual masturbator.
Actually, the stories are fiction, and I doubt that they have any unusual
medicinal value.

In this one a dirty ole man goes to a nude beach, where he gets turned on
by all the tits that surround him.  He goes to a private place to jerk
off, but a naked lady with big breasts spots him there.  He jacks off and
they both enjoy the experience.  This is not really hot stuff; but maybe
this story will increase the public awareness and understanding of the
problem of masturbation dependency in males - or at least let us laugh at
weirdoes who act this way.

Ratings for "Beach Balls
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5

"The Origin of a Superheroine" by Star Girl (an529256@anon.penet.fi).  An
athletic young woman comes upon Wonder Woman in the forest, where that
heroine is under attack by the minions of the evil Dr. Malus <get it,
Malice!>.  Both the woman and Wonder Woman are captured.  The villain's
goal is to transfer some of the powers of Wonder Woman to his new captive
and to other women.  Then by controlling these new wonder women, he will
be able to rule the world or the universe or get all the pussy he wants or
something like that.  Fortunately for humankind, his plans are foiled; and
after some incidental gang rapes the new Dynamic Duo go forth to thwart
evil everywhere.

A major strength of this story is that the author has created a
theoretical and imaginative framework for intelligent science fiction. 
What I DISliked about the story was that the ONLY sexual focus dealt with
what happened to the unnamed heroine and to Wonder Woman while they were
being raped on several occasions.   A recurring theme is something like
this:  "Every muscle in my body contracted, as I twisted and bucked, held
up high by my hands.  I cried out each time I felt the throbbing waves of
orgasm pulse through me, moaning and sobbing uncontrollably."  This kind
of action takes place within a reasonable context (for example, we learn
that amazons magically lose their superior strength when their hands are
bound by a man and that they are rendered happy but docile by the
penetration of their vaginas).  Nevertheless, as this author continues to
develop the story of this unnamed heroine, I hope we read about something
besides the neat ways in which she can be raped and how she responds to
torture.

Ratings for "The Origin of a Superheroine"
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9

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Subject: Celestial Reviews 111 - Aug 24 (2/2)
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Celestial Reviews 111 - August 24, 1996 (2/2)
(Continued from 1/2)

"Twice the Fun" by Unknown Author.
*"Double Trouble" by Randu (randu@netcom.com).

A reader suggested by e-mail that I might like to review a recently
reposted story entitled "Twice the Fun."  When I looked at the story, I
thought I recognized it; and when I checked my database I discovered that
it was really a rip-off of "Double Trouble," which I reviewed about a year
ago.  I am confident that "Double Trouble" by Randu came first; and "DT"
was a good story that I rated in my Top 100 of 1995.  I am not blaming the
reposter, who I think was possibly acting in good faith - having obtained
the story from another source.

"Twice the Fun" is a "good story" only in the sense that this mutilated,
bastardized, plagiarized version retains some of the remnants of a
previously posted good story.  An ignoramus has taken a good story about a
man and two little boys and simply changed all the references to little
girls instead of little boys.  I don't know what motivated this misguided
behavior - perhaps we have on our hands a crusader who thinks that having
sex with little boys is bad but exploiting little girls is fine; perhaps
we have a person who simply likes little girls better than little boys; or
perhaps we have an egoist who thinks he can take credit for a story simply
by changing the names of the characters.  What I want to stress here is
that I think people posting on this newsgroup should be above plagiarism. 
Randu worked hard on that original story, and he received no payment for
his work.  He has a right to his story; and what this other person did was
just plain wrong.  I encourage you to read the original story and to give
proper credit to Randu rather than to give credibility to this literary
theft.

If you examine "Twice the Fun" closely (and I don't recommend that you
bother doing this), you will discover that it contains ludicrous phrases
like "the girl's little dickie."  (The penis belonged to a little boy in
the original story.)  In other words, it's not even a good rip-off.

Here's a repost of my review of the original story.  Perhaps the author
will repost it.  If not, the story is available, along with all the other
Top 100 stories of 1995 at http://proffa.cc.tut.fi/~k113973/

"Double Trouble" by Randu.  To understand and enjoy this story, it is
important to realize that it is science fiction.  If readers don't
understand the rules of this imaginary world, the story comes across as
sheer nonsense or as advice to do things that are threatening to children.
 As part of the author's literary style, the rules of this imaginary world
are not stated up front; rather they become obvious as the story unfolds..
However, I don't think I am ruining the story by telling you these rules. 
Here they are.  The main characters in this story live in a world where
the following changes are made in the laws governing human nature: (1) One
twin is able to communicate through mental telepathy, even across great
distances.  He can tune into other people's brain waves pretty much at
will; and they can communicate reciprocally with him, if he wants this to
happen.  (2)  The other twin has extraordinary powers of empathy.  He can
understand the emotions of other people better than those persons can
themselves - but only if he is in their immediate presence.  (3)  At least
one adult authority figure (the narrator of the story) can engage in
sexual intimacies with 9-year-old children without any negative side
effects whatsoever.  In all other respects, their world closely resembles
that of Western civilization around the end of the 20th century. 
Reputable scientists would deny the validity of all three of these
premises; but once we assume that they are true in this imaginary world,
we have a pretty interesting story.

The story is well written.  The author writes with an obvious admiration
for and understanding of many of the joys of childhood - not just sex with
children.  The narrator comes across as a mixture of an adult who is still
a child and a dysfunctional man who cannot relate to little boys without
focusing on the beauty of their tight little asses and longing to have sex
with them.  In normal society this person would perhaps be dangerous, but
in this imaginary world he provides the basis for interesting
complications that go well beyond ordinary pedophile stories.  These
complexities build around the question of how an adult who is attracted to
them would interact with a pair of children whose psychic powers have
enabled them to achieve an unusual combination of sexual maturity and
innocence.

I'm sure there are flaws in the logic of this story, just like there are
flaws in most good science fiction involving children, including Peter
Pan, E.T, and the various time travel movies.; but these flaws occur
largely because of the complexity imposed by the three rule changes.  It's
just plain hard to imagine a world like this - largely because most
reasonable people have see legitimate dangers in ordinary pedophile
behavior.  The third rule requires that we temporarily cancel in our minds
one of the main taboos of our society - a taboo that nearly all social
scientists would say has a great deal of validity behind it.  In other
words, to enjoy this story, it is necessary to suspend reality enough to
believe this all could really happen and to read the story without
automatically asserting that this is the way that children "should" or
"should not" grow up in the real world.  If you do this, you'll find a
good story.  If you read it as a "really great tale about how this old guy
screwed a couple of children," it's a pretty weak story.

Ratings for "Double Trouble"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10