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Celestial Reviews 99 - July 13, 1996 (1/2)

Note:  More good news!  We have arranged to repost the Trinity Trilogy
stories.  I'll review three stories (a trilogy) every week, and the
stories should appear in the postings at about the same time.  The best
thing I can say about these stories is that they remind me of the work of
Mark Aster, who constantly receives high praise in my reviews.  The
Trilogy stories are creatively written.  While they almost invariably
involve hot sex, they also develop the personalities of the characters.
You may want to keep your eyes open for these stories.

Second Note:  A reader named Axel who described himself as a pedantic
European taking a shower asked, "How come this highly educated person
{c'est moi} is throwing a Roman goddess (Venus) together with a Greek
goddess (Athena)? Wouldn't *Aphrodite* be a more appropriate companion for
Athena" in the rating system?  {Interesting Freudian note:  Do you know
what my spellcheck thinks I'm trying to spell when I type *Aphrodite* with
the asterisks (wildcards) before and after? Hermaphrodite.  Makes sense,
doesn't it?}

Axel is quite right to note that there is an inconsistency in the
nationality of the goddesses whose names are used in my system. However,
please note that Celeste is neither a Greek nor a Roman goddess - just a
name that sounds nice.

I might ask why Axel suggests that it is Venus whose name is incorrect. 
In fact, I originally intended to choose two Roman goddesses, but I liked
the name Athena better than Minerva.  Can you imagine someone being
concerned about his/her Minerva rating?  What were the Romans thinking?

However, I have to congratulate Axel.  I have been posting for a year now,
and he's the first person to call this to my attention.  It's nice to know
that there are educated readers out there, even if they are taking showers
in Europe.

Third Note:  People are constantly asking me where to find the stories I
review.  I do not have time to reply to these requests individually.  The
answer is that all the stories are in the alt.sex.stories postings.  If
you can find me reviews, chances are good that you can also find the
stories.  If they're not in your postings, then something is wrong with
your service.  I supply additional advice in my FAQ, which I post
occasionally.

- Celeste

      "A Lovely Girl" by Michael K. Smith (rape) 10, 10, 10
      "When Morning Comes" by Joe Parsons (dream lover)
            10, 9.5, 9.5
      "Trinity Trilogy Novel 1/14" by Tom Trinity 
            (relationships) 10, 10, 10
      "Bobbi Sue's Adventure 1" by Bobbi Sue (sex on the run)
            10, 10, 10
      "Young Love and a Forty-Five" by Jared M. (adolescent
            sex) 6, 5, 5
      "Baby Sitting" by The Englishman (incest) 10, 10, 10
      "Mary Tyler Moore" by Uncle Mike (sitcom parody) 
            10, 9. 9
      "The Waltons" by Uncle Mike (sitcom parody)
            10, 9, 7
      "The Party" by WouldBeBad (orgy) 9, 10, 7.
      "Brief Visitor" by Sunrain (sci fi) 7, 6, 6
      "Liar, Liar, Pants on Fire" by SueNH (revenge) 10, 9, 9

"A Lovely Girl" by Michael K. Smith (mksmith@taproot.win.net).  This is a
vivid story about a homicidal maniac who rapes a thirteen-year-old girl. 
The horror continues to build throughout the story until it reaches its
full impact at the very end.  What I truly appreciated about this story is
that the author did not pretend that the little girl enjoyed any part of
the experience.

Rating the story was difficult.  Its use of language was excellent; no
problem there - 10.  The plot was exceptionally well developed; again, no
problem - another 10.  But did I like it?  Actually, I was repulsed by it.
 I definitely did not get turned on; and I hated the protagonist.  My
fervent hope is that nothing like the events depicted in this story should
ever happen to anyone I love.  So I didn't like it; but I did ADMIRE it. 
It conveyed to me an accurate description of the mind of a pervert; and I
think I'm a better person because of the experience.  And so, for appeal
to reviewer - another 10.

Ratings for "A Lovely Girl"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10

"When Morning Comes" by Joe Parsons (jmp@cyber-mall.com).  Ellen has a
kind and gentle lover who does everything he can to meet her needs; but
she longs for someone who will dominate her.  She wakens from a dream and
finds a stranger in her bedroom, who does to her all that she had dreamed
of and more.  Was it a dream or reality?  You read it and decide for
yourself.

Ratings for "When Morning Comes"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9.5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5

"The Trinity Trilogy Novel 1/14" by  Tom Trinity (shelbyb@iglou.com). 
This is the first of fourteen segments of Trinity Trilogy Series.  The
author wishes to remain anonymous and private; the address is that of the
editor, Shelby Bush, who has posted the stories in the past and who
remains in contact with the author; and so mail sent to that address will
reach the author.  Shelby will wait until I post a review and then
immediately post another one of the fourteen segments.  It is my
understanding that all 99 stories are also archived at the Backdrop, and
I'll try to give you more particulars in a subsequent issue of CR.

The stories remind me of Mark Aster's "My Friends the Allens" series. 
Both sets of stories are extremely well written.  In addition both are
much like a weekly TV sitcom to the extent that each episode stands alone,
but there is an element of continuity that runs through the entire series.
 I suppose we could call them sitcums.  They differ from what I'll call
serialized stories, which try to focus on a single plot across several
chapters contained in successive postings. Finally, both sets of stories
are clever and well-rounded.  By that I mean that the stories are about
people with realistic personalities and contain insights and events that
go beyond direct genital contact.

In the first story we learn that Tom, Judy, and Candy are three people who
enjoy going to science fiction conventions together.  They have been
together often without expressing sexual interest in one another -
although the ladies seem to have trouble talking about topics other than
sex.  Returning to Tom's apartment one night, they watch the movie "Deep
Throat" together, and Judy and Tom gather later that night for some really
pleasant sex.  The seed has been planted for many happy episodes.

In "The Devil in Miss Candy" Tom, Judy, and Candy gather at Tom's
apartment to watch "The Devil and Miss Jones."  This is an interesting
coincidence, because the first two porn movies I myself ever saw were the
two this trio shared: "Deep Throat" and "The Devil and Miss Jones."  I
recall asking my husband the same question that one of the girls asked
about "Deep Throat": "If her clit's in her throat, how come she keeps
rubbing her pussy?"  I suppose maybe the coincidence in choice of movies
isn't all that remarkable; maybe there weren't many porn movies fifteen or
so years ago.  We saw the movies as a double feature when my husband was
accompanying me to a convention in New York.  {Teachers can only engage in
public depravity when we're someplace where our students or their parents
are not likely to see us.}  What I remember most about that evening is my
husband returning to his seat and telling me that he would never again go
to the bathroom in a porn theater. It seems that dirty old men are really
preoccupied with their dirty old things in those establishments.  My
husband's decision was fine with me, because I had become more than a
little anxious in his absence.  I recalled being told in a health class
that one cannot catch venereal diseases except by direct contact.  After
that visit I believed what that teacher had said; if it were possible to
catch VD by breathing the air, I would have developed several varieties
from that trip to the theater.  Were it not for the rise of the video
rental store, I might never have seen another porn flick.

Anyway, after our three friends watch "Miss Jones," Candy announces that
it is about time she loses her virginity, and Tom has been elected to do
the honors.  Judy serves as a sort of choreographer or mistress of
ceremonies, making sure that Candy gets her money's worth from this first
experience.  It's a very erotic sequence.  

The relationship among the three friends develops rapidly. Pretty soon Tom
has to guess each evening which of the two girls would come by the
apartment to spend the night; there did not seem to be a pattern, and it
was often a tossup.  The descriptions of sexual activity are consistently
hot.  I don't know how an author can keep this up for 13 more segments.

In addition to the other nice things I've said about this series, I should
mention one more strength: the people are normal - they are ordinary
people doing extraordinary things.  In this story, for example, we learn
that Candy is overweight but sexy.  Imagine that.  Which reminds me...

Three women died and went to the Pearly Gates, where St. Peter interviewed
them.  He asked the first woman for her name.  She replied that it was
Penny. St. Peter checked his list, found her name, and said, "It is proper
that you have that name.  You were greedy and avaricious during your life.
 You are condemned to hell.  Be gone, evil woman."  He asked the next
woman her name, and she replied that it was Sherry.  He checked the book
and said, "Tis well that you are named Sherry, for wine and liquor were
your undoing.  Go to eternal damnation, you lousy drunk."  He turned to
the third woman, who was already walking away.  "Where do you think you're
going?" asked St. Peter.  "I can take a hint," she replied.  "My name is
Fanny." {End of digression.  Back to The Trinity Trilogy.}

As much as I have begun to enjoy this set of stories, I have no interest
in living my personal life the way the Trinity characters do.  I have a
personal religious and philosophical orientation that leads me to expect
that sexual fulfillment is more likely to occur in the context of a
dedicated, monogamous relationship than in the relatively hedonistic, open
relationship described in this story.  I say this not as part of a moral
lecture.  I may be entirely wrong; but so far my approach is working
pretty well for me and my husband.  I think stories like this describe an
idealized hedonistic relationship and ignore the problems (e.g., jealousy,
insecurity, rivalries, incomplete commitments, etc.) that are likely to
disrupt non-monogamous relationships.  I'm not trying to talk anyone out
of their happy pluralistic relationships; and I am also aware that I
probably idealize my own relationship with my husband.  My point is that
even as a person with an entirely different perspective on ideal sexual
relationships, I find this kind of story to be refreshing and enjoyable. 
Not only can I enjoy a good story, but I can also expand my horizons by
understanding a different viewpoint a little better.

Having said what I said in the previous paragraph, let me now say the
opposite.  I watch "Days of Our Lives."  I record it each day while I'm
teaching and watch it every night before I go to bed - unless something
disrupts my orderly life.  I discuss DOOL each day with some of my friends
in the teachers' lounge.  This may sound complicated, but Bo had been in
love with Hope, who died.  Then Bo fell in love with Billie.  But Hope
hadn't died after all.  So Bo had to decide between Billie and Hope. 
{Actually, it's even more complicated, because Hope lost her memory and
got kidnapped by Jude Sinclair, and Billie really liked Hope.} Bo chose
Hope, because she was the mother of his child; and so Billie got dumped,
but I hear she's coming back.  I shocked all my colleagues one day when I
simply stated, "What's the problem? He should keep them both."  In the
unlikely event that my husband thinks I am dead and falls deeply in love
with or even marries another woman and then I return, I'll simply slip him
a copy of the Trinity Trilogy and tell him, "It's OK.  Keep us both. I can
learn to like her."

The term Trilogy refers to the fact that the stories were originally
posted in twelve sets of three.  Shelby is reposting them in fourteen
segments, the first one containing six stories.  I cannot possibly review
each individual story and still have time do justice to the many other
stories I'd like to review.  So what I intend to do is read and enjoy each
segment and then write about some of the major ideas in each of my
reviews.  I hope you enjoy both my reviews and these excellent stories.

Ratings for "Trinity Trilogy Novel 1/14"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10

"Bobbi Sue's Adventure 1" by Bobbi Sue.  This is an autobiographical
account of what happened to a 30-year old woman when she discovered this
newsgroup.  Actually, her husband introduced this newsgroup to her as an
example of how perverted some areas of the Internet were.  He's only 26,
sexually effective, a bit of a prude, and knows nothing about Bobbi Sue's
new adventures.

Bobbi Sue slipped gradually into depravity.  First she read the stories
and jumped her husband when he got home; then she began to masturbate
after reading the stories; and soon she found herself selecting carrots
and cucumbers at the market based on how she thought they would fill her
pussy.  Such are the trials of the everyday housewife who gave up the good
life for Tom.  

Alas, one day Bobbi decides to go nearly au naturel during her noontime
run. She can feel the breeze on her exposed ass, and the brief that she
had pulled up between her cheeks is working its way between her wet pussy
lips.  {You can get a bad rash if you do this too often.}  Shortly after
she discards her top, she almost collides with a guy on a mountain bike. 
She just passes him, but she imagines him watching her cute little ass as
she trots the half mile to her turnaround point.  When she turns, he's
gone; but when she rounds the corner, there he is jacking himself off with
the top she had discarded.  She asks for the top back, but he isn't done
with it yet. He says that he will give it back pretty soon, if she will be
kind enough to turn around and let him see her ass again.  He asks to fuck
her; but she declines.  That would be beyond her present limits.  He
suggests a blow job; she compromises at a hand job, as long as she can
fuck herself with the bicycle pump while he cums on her face.

Bobbi Sue describes this as within her limits of fidelity. Those are
pretty broad limits.  I myself define FANTASIZING about this as within my
own limits of fidelity, and so I guess my husband and I have less generous
limits.  But it's a good fantasy, and both Bobbi Sue and I fucked our
husband's brains out afterwards.  I've noticed several additional Bobbi
Sue Adventures in the postings, and I'll try to review some of the later
episodes when I get a chance.

Ratings for "Bobbi Sue's Adventure 1"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10

"Young Love and a Forty-Five" by Jared M. (lovetodang@aol.com).  The
narrator is a 17-year-old who has moved from Chicago to California and
apparently intends to do something there other than study rocket science. 
He finds a nice girl who will let him kiss her. Cool!  Since he's in the
prime of his sexual life, he's really happy when she asks if he'd like to
try something else and he asks what and she says, "I don't know.  Whatever
you'd like."  Really cool!   Then Jessica asks him to take off her pants. 
Way cool!  They fuck kind of in slow motion, and the look on her face is
"one of confusion and intense arousement."  Too cool to talk about! 
"After the spams ended, they just layed there, giggling and kissing,
shocked at what they had just done."  Unbelievably cool!

Either the author IS an unsophisticated 19-year-old male writing about his
early sexual with a 15-year-old girlfriend or he is trying to write like
one.  If this really is a literally true story about the first sexual
experiences of a young couple, then I suppose I should apologize for the
irreverence I may have expressed in the preceding paragraph.  One doesn't
have to be a literary giant to be a tender lover.  The problem is that the
author is writing for an audience, and the story comes across as sounding
really simple-minded.  

I remember watching a "Family Ties" episode several years ago in which the
writer wanted to make Mallory seem to be putting on false airs of
pseudo-intelligence.  She used words like "importosity" and "smartitude." 
There are no such words; the humor arises from the fact that there are
very simple words that mean what Mallory really wanted to say
("importance" and "intelligence").  Similarly, there is no such word as
"arousement"; the author meant "arousal," and he should have been able to
figure this out before going to press with this story.  That's why
proofreading is important.  Likewise, it was probably the "spasms" that
ended - although on the Internet we normally appreciate it when the spams
end; and there is no such word as "layed"; it should be "lay."  And I have
no clue regarding what the title means; what does a "forty-five" have to
do with the story?  My guesses range from breast size (of a 15-year-old?)
to a weapon.  Maybe I missed something.

If the author (or reader) wants instruction, it would be useful to compare
this story with the preceding story ("Bobbi Sue's Adventure").  In both
cases the author purports to be relating a true series of events; and
(assuming the incidents really did happen) both stories would have been
intensely interesting to the original participants.  But "Bobbi Sue" is
clearly more absorbing to an audience that wasn't there to experience the
story first-hand.

Ratings for "Young Love and a Forty-Five"
Athena (technical quality): 6
Venus (plot & character): 5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5

"Baby Sitting" by The Englishman (ESkilton@aol.com).  The story is a clear
and plausible description of a trusted relative molesting a young girl. 
I'm sure this newsgroup is full of people who will find this to be erotic.
 I didn't.  When I read a story about a child having sex with an adult, I
seem to automatically ask myself whether I would have enjoyed either (1)
having this happen to me as a child, or (2) doing this as an adult to a
child.  There are some things that I am glad I did not do as a child, but
which would have been enjoyable.  Examples include seducing a couple of my
teachers, fucking under the bleachers at the football field, and fondling
some of my fellow cheerleaders.  These things would have been enjoyable,
but they probably would have affected my life in an undesirable way. 
However, I really do sometimes wish I could have done some of these things
- that is, I occasionally wish my value system would have been different,
so that I would have felt free to do those things.  Since my value system
is what it is, and since that part of my life is over, I settle for
reading stories about people with different value systems who did do these
things.

The situation is different with child molestation.  There is a limited
sense in which I WOULD have enjoyed being molested as a child by a trusted
relative.  It's the same sense that I WOULD have enjoyed eating vast
quantities of chocolate candy that would have made me puke afterwards,
stealing money from my parents' wallets, or pushing fat ladies down
escalators.  These activities would all have been fun, but I'm glad I
didn't do them.  In the same way, I'm certain that it would be PLEASURABLE
to be seduced and exploited by a trusted adult - after all, physiological
reactions occur no matter who stimulates them; but the harm would outweigh
the benefits by so much that it's hardly true to say that I "wish"
something like that would have happened to me.

Is this an "evil" story - the sort that lends a bit of validity to the
arguments of people who say that Internet sex will ruin the lives of
children?  I don't think so.  I think any reader with an ounce of sense
can see that this little girl is being manipulated for the gratification
of her uncle.  I think the overall realism makes it a good story.  I think
the "religious" people who object to stories like this should have the
courage of their convictions and believe that if readers see realistic
information, the "truth will prevail."  If I knew my children were reading
this story, I would simply help them see the shallowness of the uncle's
reasoning; and I think they would thereby become LESS likely to be
exploited themselves.  In fact, this story would be worthwhile reading as
part of a course in parenting.

If a little girl doesn't learn about sex from a Benign Opportunist, where
would she learn about it?  Well, I myself learned to kiss from a
pimple-faced kid whom I respected and trusted.  I learned to French kiss
from a really nice guy with whom I split up because his priorities in life
differed from my own. I gradually learned more and more by experimenting
with my peers and with my boyfriends in settings of trust and respect.  I
think most normal people learn this way.  And I think the stories on this
newsgroup that describe learning about sex in an atmosphere of trust and
respect are every bit as sexy and interesting as those that describe
exploitation, as this one does.

Ratings for "Baby Sitting"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10

"Mary Tyler Moore" by Uncle Mike (fr582@cleveland.Freenet.Edu).  Mary
needs some time off, and Mr. Grant is unwilling to give it to her. 
Finally, she whines in her inimitable way that she'll "do anything for
it."  Mr. Grant's eyes light up in response to an evil thought: "You'll do
anything, Mary? ANYthing?"  So Lou finally gets the blow job he's always
wanted from Mary; and Mary figures it's over.  But then Ted walks into the
office; and to keep him quiet Lou lets him fuck Mary; and to placate Mary
for this humiliation, Lou gives her a second week off.  But then Murray
walks into the office, and we have another emboikment and another week's
vacation.  And then Gordie the weather man walks into the office...  This
is a pretty good parody.  Mary, Lou, and Ted are done best; it's easy to
imagine these TV characters doing what they do in this story. 

Ratings for "Mary Tyler Moore"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9

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Celestial Reviews 99 - July 13, 1996 (2/2)

(Continued from 1/2)

"The Waltons" by Uncle Mike (fr582@cleveland.Freenet.Edu).  Erin and
Jason, the 12- and 13-year old children of the Walton clan go off to a
field and watch horses copulate.  They marvel, and Erin tries to get Jason
to explain the process to her more clearly, but Jason doesn't know much
himself.  Eventually they experiment by examining Jason's sexual anatomy
and then Erin's; and after that Erin suggests that Jason and she might
want to imitate the horses.  They quickly discover the missionary
position, which they prefer to horsy style; and soon they are having sex
regularly.  Then one day their older sister Mary Ellen catches them in the
act.  So Jason fucks her too - after Erin primes her, of course.  A
prologue tells us that eventually the rest of the kids join the fun as
well.

This is an interesting story about kids having sex with each other on the
farm; and I guess it's fun to associate the activities with the various
Walton kids.  I have trouble with parodies, however, when the people get
too far out of character.  These kids all behave as if their irresponsible
parents have taught them nothing about sex.  I have an overwhelming
impression that the parents and grandparents in the Walton series would
have done a better job of raising their kids.

Ratings for "The Waltons"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7

"The Party" by WouldBeBad (WouldBeBad@aol.com).  I occasionally give
negative reviews to stories because they are "filled with nothing but
mindless sex."  This story is filled with nothing but mindless sex, but
it's well written and at least moderately interesting.  The basic premise
is that the three female cousins get caught masturbating together, and
instead of apologizing they announce that they enjoy sex and are proud to
be sluts.  Their parents respond by throwing a party for them at which
they will be able to demonstrate their sexual abilities by performing
every kind of sexual act imaginable.  The description of the ensuing orgy
is well written and vivid.  Orgy enthusiasts will possibly be impressed.

I guess this kind of activity could be fun; but if anyone ever throws an
orgy for me, I would appreciate it if they would skip letting Rex the
German Shepherd fuck me.  Actually, this story comes with two variations
of Part 2; and the second version skips the dog and has the girl get
simultaneously fucked by three men instead.  The author read my mind!

Although it was described in comprehensive detail, I did not find the orgy
to be all that arousing.  I did not get even a little bit wet in my
vagina, nor did I have an urge to wake my husband up when I went to bed
afterwards.  This may be because we had already had delightful sex earlier
in the morning; but I think the reason may also be that I subconsciously
felt enough is enough.  I have certainly enjoyed orgy stories before, but
this one took special delight in incest and in the notion that it was
really neat to have the parents feeding their children sexually to the
horny crowd.  

I acknowledge that I respect the incest taboo as a valid prohibition; but
I also maintain that I am able to suspend that taboo in my imagination
while reading fiction.  I can understand that with the right setup it
could be extremely erotic to read about a child having sex with a parent;
but there is no setup here. The author simply demands that the reader
believe that there's something special about sex just because it involves
parents with their children.  I just don't see the point in this.

Finally, I like orgies better when they're a bit more spontaneous.  This
story resembled a modern, slick porn movie with no plot - just sex and
more sex.  I sometimes find such movies to be stimulating - depending on
what else is happening to me at the time or what else is on my mind; but I
would rather see a less explicit movie with a sexy plot.  Ideally, I'd
like to see a porn movie with a sexy plot; but not many talented actors
and actresses seem to feel called to copulate with strangers in front of a
camera.  I don't need much of a reason - the rationale for the orgy
described by this same author in "My Wedding" was sufficient, as are all
the rationales I've seen so far in Mark Aster's Allen Sisters stories; but
I like to see a bit of creative plot or personality injected into the
orgy.

Ratings for "The Party"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7

"Brief Visitor" by Sunrain (an648227@anon.penet.fi).  The ladies have gone
camping in the woods.  One of them wanders off alone and is approached by
an alien from outer space in a barn.  She doesn't get a good look at the
alien, but it does a good job on her with its tentacles.  I would have
liked to have seen some more plot development in this story.  As it is,
the woman just gets fondled and fucked by the unseen alien, and that's
about it.  English is not the author's first language, and so there are
some mistakes - usually omitted words or correct spellings of incorrect
words; but he/she did a lot better than I would have done writing about
sex in a foreign language.

Ratings for "Brief Visitor"
Athena (technical quality): 7
Venus (plot & character): 6
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6

"Liar, Liar" by SueNH (SueNH@aol.com).  About a year ago a person with a
warped sense of humor posted a message on a.s.s. stating that SueNH was
not a real person but rather merely a front for an alleged money-making
scheme of some kind.  Sue (who I have reason to believe really exists)
wrote this story in retaliation.

The protagonist of the story is a man who gets his sexual kicks by hiding
in anonymity while making untrue statements about beautiful, lusty women
who write hot stories on the Internet.  He likes these stories and even
jerks off while reading them, but instead of doing something artistic in
return, he responds in his uncreative, anonymous, cowardly manner.  This
makes him feel bigger, more powerful - it provides a kinky sort of sexual
turn-on for him. Just thinking about it makes his cock harden in his
jogging shorts as he begins his run, and his little nipples get hard and
show through his T-shirt as he start to work up a sweat within a block of
his house.

Shortly after he starts his run, he spots a beautiful woman jogger.  He
follows her and is eventually astonished to discover that she has stopped
at his house and obviously wants to come inside.  She enters the house and
teases him sexually, eventually binding him to the bed and revealing
herself to be SueNH, the very person to whom he had directed his cowardly
criticism on the Internet.  Sue continues to tease him and brings herself
to orgasm several times.  She leaves it up to him to decide whether he'll
repent and gain genuine pleasure or continue to live his miserable, craven
existence.

Reality check:  This jerk runs five or six miles in about a half hour. 
I'm in good shape and can't do that - and I'm usually not encumbered by a
hard-on.  If Sue revises this story, she should either drop the distance
to 3 or 4 miles or up the time to 45 minutes.

This is an unusual and interesting story.  I don't normally like sexual
violence, and neither does Sue.  But no real harm comes to this asshole,
and he deserves the discomfort her gets.  People who are familiar with
Sue's other stories (many of which are currently being reposted) will
enjoy this story the most.

Ratings for "Liar, Liar"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9