Message-ID: <11995eli$9806081302@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: From: alkaviade@cyberdude.com Subject: [review] {Alkaviade} Saliva (voy mast) Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Content-Type: text/plain Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: X-Original-Message-Id: <199806081406.KAA11026@web01.globecomm.net> X-Is-Review: yes Review by Lee Vine Rogue Review No. 40 - May 31, 1998 Saliva by Hugo Alkaviade M-solo, Teen Length: 2,500 words Summary Michael spends a day fantasizing about Christine, a girl who rejected his advances. He gets revenge on her by sneaking into the girl's locker room and beating off in her panties. Commentary This was a very well written story. The author has a nice light touch. His descriptions are not always central to the plot, but they do help to set the mood. He does not spend too much time describing any one thing. The humor was dry, and witty. I was a bit disturbed by this story. The narrator's feelings are not incomprehensible. His actions, on the other hand, are a bit over the edge. This is only a story, but it still gave me a creepy feeling. Despite my mixed feelings, well written but creepy, I liked this story. The author did not get into rape or torture, which it seems would be a logical expansion for some writers. I look forward to reading more by Mr. Alkaviade, but hopefully the tone will not always be the same. Judgment This was an excellent story. I would not change a thing. --------------------------------------------------- Get free personalized email at http://www.iname.com -- +----------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `--------------+ | | | | Archive site +----------------------+--------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | ----