Message-ID: <43040asstr$1056316205@assm.asstr-mirror.org> Return-Path: From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com X-Original-Message-ID: <24.40ebcbac.2c2698fd@aol.com> MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit X-ASSTR-Original-Date: Sun, 22 Jun 2003 01:30:37 EDT Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} The Annex Reviews, 6/22/03 Date: Sun, 22 Jun 2003 17:10:05 -0400 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation X-Story-Submission: X-Moderator-ID: RuiJorge, dennyw, newsman The Annex Reviews, 6/22/03 by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com) Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh The Stories: Chosen Love (Gryvon): M/M, slash, tg A House in the Woods (Shakes Peer2B): M/F, M/M, BDSM, Fdom, oral, anal, best, toys, pierce, cbt Dear Bill (Smilodon): M/F, fetish, humor The Prize is Tight (Bert Prefect): M/F, TV spoof, humor Horny High School Freshman, Part 1 (D.F.): M/F, teen Nightmares and Visions (46-50) (Monocle): M/F, bond, impreg, vignette, dark The Bondage Perils of Supergrrl (expanded version) (FastFist): F/F, bond, superhero, fetish, entombment Curiosity (Ryric): F/F, bond, emtombment, forniphilia The Box (Thndrshark): M/F, BDSM, slave, pierce, shave, tort, severe, entombment Chosen Love [A-] Where found: Digital Paper URL: http://www.geocities.com/khyrs/original/chosenlove.html Author: Gryvon Type: M/M, slash, tg Sometimes slash is profound, sometimes derivative. Sometimes, like here, it's just plain... silly. Airynn is a... well, it's hard to figure out, but he is a male, and soon to be given in a goddess-mandated marriage: "Airyn knew little of the other man beyond his name and profession. Laers Ghelan, Blademaster from the Sakano village of Khyden in the Eastern Hills." I don't think we're in Kansas anymore, Toto. As it turns out Airynn is a faradhim, "a man who turned away from the warrior lifestyle to live as a woman" and he's therefore as nervous as any blushing bride in a prudish pagan society, concerned about his husband's violent temper and whether he will be pretty enough to please him. The rocky road to wedded bliss proceeds from there. I like slash, and some kinds of trannie fiction, but this combo was pretty hard to swallow, even though it's not unheard of for some men in primitive societies to live as women (e.g., the Sissy Men of the Lakotah.) Specifically, I just couldn't swallow a cross-dressing man that acts and emotes exactly like a Romance-novel heroine, right down to the choreographed blushes and sidelong peeks at his tall and handsome "groom." It's like the author cribbed a chapter from any one of dozens of romantic action/adventure fantasies written for female tastes, and switched the gender of the female lead. Silly, very silly, but if you like slash and like the idea of this, go to it... the author wrote it very well, and it certainly delivered the goods. A House in the Woods [A] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 06/14/03 Author: Shakes Peer2B Author email: shakes-peer2b@sbcglobal.net Type: M/F, M/M, BDSM, Fdom, oral, anal, best, toys, pierce, cbt College students Katy and Josh pull up to the backwoods home of a lifestyle dom so he can train Katy in the arts of submission. Katy, not having been informed of this by her boyfriend, balks, and the dom, sensing an injustice (and perhaps a dislike of smug football-player frat boys) stuns poor Josh with a taser, making him the victim in this classic BDSM scenario, while innocent Katy is invited to watch his training. This was an excellent BDSM kidnap/slave training story, with a twist in that the young girl winds up being the top, and enjoying it. Poor Josh is taken to the dungeon and suspended, caned, pierced, and all that other good stuff while being raped at both ends by his honey and his captor (and later, two dogs.) It's rare to find a bisexual dungeon story, and the dom also gives Katy some sage advice: >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> "You're a very lucky person Katy. You've discovered early something that most people never know about themselves. Of those who eventually discover their true sexual nature, most are already trapped in lifestyles that prevent them ever realizing the joys of that discovery. You're at the beginning of your sexual life, and now have the freedom to make choices that will allow you have what you need sexually, while getting on with the rest of your life. You're lucky in another way, too." She looked at me quizzically. "Josh is just discovering his own true sexual nature. It's hard on him because it goes against everything he's been taught to believe about himself, but by the time you two leave here, he will have realized that he NEEDS to be under a woman's heel. If you want him, you can enslave him for as long as you like." >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> I enjoyed the story, but I did think that Josh's conversion to the joys of subhood could have been more convincing -- I half expected the couple to go their separate ways after the ordeal, instead of uniting in their new roles. But the "happy" ending did charm, if a slave-training story can be said to charm. Dear Bill [A] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 06/04/03 Author: smilodon Author email: smilodonREMOVE@postmaster.co.uk Type: M/F, fetish, humor Steve writes a casual letter to his friend Bill: "Thought I'd drop you a line to let you know how things are with me. You may remember Jessica, that girl I was seeing? I think you met her when last you came down for the weekend. Well, the simple truth is, we're not together anymore." And why not? A serious of sexual escapades gone wrong, each played for laughs: "No, things stared to go wrong when she introduced the whipped cream and strawberries. She put on about ten pounds in a week and I got so drained I swear my cheeks were hollow." This was a short but amusing story by Smilodon, an author I've been meaning to read for some time now, but whose posted stories were just too long for a reviewer with limited time. A nice combo of fetish and low-key humor. The Prize is Tight [B+] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 06/20/03 Author: Bert Prefect Author email: canyonero@excite.com Type: M/F, TV spoof, humor This story was a spoof of the old daytime game show staple "The Price is Right" with perpetually perky, geriatric host Bob Barker. I don't know if it's still on TV, but it was a mainstay of the sweltering east coast summers of my youth, my precious days of unschooled freedom spent slack-jawed in the dark cocoon of air- conditioned living rooms, forced to watch this dull, cheesy show because there was nothing else on (this being the BC days -- Before Cable) and going outside was like walking into a polluted Turkish sauna. Yes, I have no small amount of hate for this show. The author spoofs it in the obvious way here (you can tell by the title) with host Big Porker, and male -- and only male -- contestants with manly-man names like Rob, Rick, and Ryan who try to guess the price of various prostitutes' services. The prizes are sexual access to young high school girls, porn stars, and ever-ready female anuses lubricated with Anis-all, commercials for which are repeated at every station break. The concept was amusing for the first quarter of the story, but then became tedious. Like a feature-length movie spawned from a SNL sketch, it went on too long. The author's anal sex and schoolgirl obsessions also got tedious and made me wonder just what kind of person he was. Which you shouldn't when reading a spoofy sex story designed to be humorous; you're supposed to be concentrating on the laughs. Horny High School Freshman, Part 1 [D] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 06/14/03 Author: D.F. Author email: storywriterdf@yahoo.com Type: M/F, teen Every so often I like to review a story that shows just how far we've come from earlier days on the net when the quality of writing was often low. Of course, you can tell right away by the title that this isn't Shakespeare, or even M1ke Hunt. The story is more like someone's idea of a story, a someone with very limited imagination and experience, and even fewer writing skills. The freshmen of the title are two "well devolped young girls" one of which has a pair of sentient, domineering buttocks ("She also had a rather large ass, which made her wear thongs by seventh Grade") and the other a boyfriend whom she services ("John ripped his pants off and she started to give him head through he boxers." -- Hmm, guess she likes the taste of wet lint). The story ends with the immortal kicker: "She decied she couldn't wear her thong home, it would be to obvious. She toot it off and went commando home." My suggestion to the author: Toot it off and go commando home. Nightmares and Visions (46-50) [A-] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 06/12/03 Author: Monocle Author email: monocle_o@NOTTHIS.hotmail.com Type: M/F, bond, impreg, vignette, dark Monocle has been posting a series of short stories he says are "strange, short e-mails from anonymous addresses by parties unknown." They're more like vignettes, female fantasies in the purest sense of the word, as they concentrate on the sensations of the female body and feelings of shame, exhibitionism, and forbidden pleasure. All are dreamlike, disquieting, yet keenly erotic. In #46 the narrator is attacked by a series of candy- colored ghost men who ravish her, turning her into a ghost like themselves; #48 has a spread-eagled woman on a rack who watches as her body causes men to masturbate wildly against a glass partition, then is ravished in turn by a strange machine that pumps her full of cum. In #50, the ravisher is a mirror that sends out silver pseudopods. Numbers 47 and 49 were less interesting as they didn't contain any novel elements, focusing on pure sensation; while well written, they didn't say anything new to me. Different from the usual sex story, and intriguing enough to read more. I wonder how long these unknown writers can keep the series going. The Bondage Perils of Supergrrl (expanded version) [B-] Where found: Sweet Chastity URL: http://www.sweetchastity.com/supergrrl.shtml Author: Ryric Type: F/F, bond, superhero, fetish, entombment Curiosity [B+] Where found: Sweet Chastity URL: http://www.sweetchastity.com/curiosityryric.shtml Author: Ryric Type: F/F, bond, emtombment, forniphilia The Box [A+] Where found: Thndrshark URL: http://www.gwenmedia.com/thndrshark.htm Author: Thndrshark Type: M/F, BDSM, slave, pierce, shave, tort, severe, entombment There's a very small subgenre of mummification fiction (which in turn is a subgenre of bondage fiction) that, for lack of any other term, I'll call entombment fic. These stories center on a fetish of being embedded alive in substances like plaster of paris or cement, like the unfortunate workman who's said to have fallen into the wet concrete at Hoover Dam, and remained there to this day. There aren't many writers working in this genre and they tend to be scattered, some on the bondage or mummification sites, some on ASFR sites. FastFist wrote one of the all-time great entombment stories with his Supergirl (now wisely retitled Supergrrl) series which featured all sorts of fly-in-amber, or girl-in-amber, embedding scenarios. The story has been expanded since I reviewed it last but has degenerated badly. Once a grand, apocalyptic tale of a supervillain's conquest of the world, and the types of revenge she gets on the good guys (and the decadent form of governance she installs) it's petered out into round-robin series of random fetish ficlets, with nary a superheroine to be seen, or any sort of overriding plot or conclusion. Too bad. On the same site, Ryric's "Curiosity" deals with the sad story of Chrissie, who lets curiosity get the better of her when she peaks over the estate wall of a deranged sculptress. The artist sports a tattoo of a cement mixer over her pussy -- a spooky touch -- and it turns out her concept art consists of capturing female slaves, training them, then covering them in concrete... in one memorable scene revealing a series of beringed nipples and clits protruding from a wall, all that's to be seen of her former proteges. In the end, the poor protagonist is entombed alive in a pit in the floor. Not much of a story, but the concept gives it an interesting Stephen King flavor. Thndershark's "The Box" also deals with entombment but in a more conventional BDSM sense. His stories have severe torture and degradation themes -- the enslavement and bodily modification of young attractive females, who most often go along with it out of anomie or a lack of alternatives. There's an element of jerkfic (explained in the 4/30/03 reviews) in this writer's style as well, as the female victims are usually presented as fresh- faced subs out to fulfill their wildest fantasies, only to get more than they bargained for when those fantasies become real. In this case the sub has asked to be shaved, pierced, bound into a painful hogtie, then buried alive in a steel box that is filled with cement. I could almost imagine the writer smirking as he writes passages like: >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> "Well, Jane, the cement is pretty much solid now," I said to the camera again, as I pressed against the solid mass in the box. "You're probably feeling the weight of all the stuff on you, and maybe even panicking a bit because you find yourself absolutely immobile. Well guess what? That's how you'll be forever now." >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> The box is then buried again in a pit of concrete, only the slave's feeding and waste elimination tubes connecting her to the outside world. She's to be maintained for a while (the other female slave gleefully administering electrical tortures via remote control) but eventually, in the ultimate act of indifference, >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> The truth of the matter was one day we would all tire of her. The time would come when, as she had requested long ago, her pussy, ass, urethra, and stomach would be filled with cement as well, sealing her completely in her tiny coffin, beneath the ton of concrete that now rested above her. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> This jerkfic tone was not very morally appealing to me as a person, in fact it right angered me, but I do admit it fit in well with the story's theme of sexual horror and excess, if it wasn't as two-dimensional and likeable as Toran's and Jenny's similar entombment fic "Do You Want to Continue?" It's also the shortest of this author's stories, and the most succinct; which makes it the best of the bunch, as its particular thrills aren't belabored -- they're short and sharp. An A+ for going way, way out; if you like sexual horror, give this a read. ____________________________________________________ Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh -- Pursuant to the Berne Convention, this work is copyright with all rights reserved by its author unless explicitly indicated. +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ | alt.sex.stories.moderated ----- send stories to: | | FAQ: Moderator: | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ |Discuss this story and others in alt.sex.stories.d, look for subject {ASSD}| |Archive at Hosted by | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+