Message-ID: <40507asstr$1042938605@assm.asstr-mirror.org> Return-Path: From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com X-Original-Message-ID: <17.34a754eb.2b5b23ec@aol.com> MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit X-ASSTR-Original-Date: Sat, 18 Jan 2003 16:41:00 EST Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} The Annex Reviews, 1/18/03 Date: Sat, 18 Jan 2003 20:10:05 -0500 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation X-Story-Submission: X-Moderator-ID: dennyw, hecate, newsman The Annex Reviews, 1/18/03 by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com) Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh This posting: The Prince (Unknown): m/f, femdom, bondage, fantasy Working at the Institute, Part 1 (Tom Wayne): M/f+, M/F, SF, exhib, mild D/s, bondage, oral, rim, anal, toys, latex Megan's Fantasy (Laura Lynn Davis): M/F, F/F, BDSM, slave Bed and Breakfast, Part 1 (Kelli Paine): m/f, M/F, cons, inc The Prince [B] Where found: Diana the Valkyrie URL: www.thevalkyrie.com/stories/1misc6/prince.txt Author: Unknown Type: M/F, femdom, bondage, fantasy Sometimes it's refreshing to read a story badly translated from another language, like this one. It gives you a different perspective on things... world culture, and all that. I don't know what the original language was but I'd say it was Japanese going by the long series of adjectives before each noun and the anime-ish plot. The ruthless girl soldiers of Deviland have invaded Souland, and the boy soldiers of that state are helpless to stop them. In fact, they are conquered pretty easily and marched back to serve Deviland's Warrior Queen as sex slaves, except for the nameless crown prince, who is to serve her daughter, the Devil Princess. It's a very cute idea, and save for all the abuse inflicted upon the kid's cock and balls, an agreeable servitude. The fractured prose had a rhythmic feel ("In no time at his powerful male body spasmed with climax and he pumped his semen, his royal boy milk into the air in great spurting globules") and though repetition usually gets on my nerves I found it soothing here, almost poetic: >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> [The] prince knew that he would be the sex slave of the Devil Princess for the rest of his life, and serve his princess master with his strong chests muscles, his eight pecks, muscular thighs, once proud royal cock and manhood. He would be raped, whipped, spanked, tortured over and over again by his master, while the prince's cock, nipples and balls would be squeezed, twisted, kneaded often. The prince would be ordered to lick and suck the princess, use his tongue to serve the young princess, while his cock was being stroked and manhood being milked dry. His muscular smooth body would be kept shaved, with no pubic hair and armpit hair. And the prince, once a proud young handsome and muscular warrior boy, would be violated, degraded and humiliated over and over again by his new master, the Devil Princess, while he would be always nude except for his slave collar and cock cage, spread eagle, showing his muscular torso and vulnerable manhood to his master to admire when he was on his knees spread eagle. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> Daffy, no? Especially the "eight pecks" (could the writer have meant "six-pack?") Definitely a different flavor than a Western femdom story. Though I can't rate it too highly because of its many errors, I did get a little excited reading it. Working at the Institute, Part 1 [A+] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 1/7/03 Author: Tom Wayne Author address: kinkyhotrod@hotmail.com Type: M/f+, M/F, SF, exhib, mild D/s, bondage, oral, rim, anal, toys, latex I always feel like I've accomplished something when I discover a new writer this good. He's written a story with a number of different sex acts, but the overall theme of it is (in the male narrator's words) "I loved being a slut. Most men did, but not everyone could admit it. I knew my place, and it was right here, being a sex object." It is the 22nd century and the narrator of the story works at a high-tech sex education center where he gives erotic demonstrations to different classes of young people. The future world is well detailed and very real, the forced education having eradicated prostitution, venereal diseases, and sexual hang-ups. It's all pretty plausible, really, up until the time braless schoolgirls enter clad in tight latex shorts, thong panties, and slave collars for their lesson. Oh well, you can't have anything. But then they get their hands on the male demo model, and there's the greatest description of schoolgirl orgy I've ever read, twenty or so girls ravishing helpless male flesh with their lips, tongues, fingers, and pussies, the guy loving every minute of it even as they invade his ass. What is not to love? But it doesn't stop there. The class's instructor Ms. Neubold has her way with the models after the class has left, trussing them up in bondo gear as she rides one and sucks the other... until she presses the secret button on her leather corset that finally lets them cum buckets. Very descriptive, and very hot. This story had something for everyone. My only nitpick is that while lesbianism was mentioned as a sexual alternative male homosexuality was not. An oversight? Megan's Fantasy [A] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 1/10/02 Author: Laura Davis Author address: ldavis4@hotmail.com Type: M/F, F/F, BDSM, slave This author posted a lot of stories under this name in early 2002; all of them dealt with dark themes, and all were excellent, including the finely crafted short-short "Serial Killer." This story begns with the narrator telling us her fantasy has always been to be a slave, and after a divorce, she assists her ex-husband's aid in making the dream come true. She's soon on her way to a Hong Kong clearing house for piercing and training, culminating in an auction with a twist: "Before the sale began I was put through my paces - I sucked cock, was fucked, and took one cock in my ass while sucking another. Then, as a finale, I went down on Willow. I had to bring her to orgasm within two minutes or I'd be strung up by my ankles and whipped to death. There were ten seconds left when she came." She winds up being sold to a wealthy Chinese businesswoman who wants a bodyguard/bedmate, and after a demonstration of her loyalty (which requires self- mutilation) the narrator receives training in the defensive arts, and in the end is very happy with her new life of luxury. There was enough stuff in here for a novel (or a couple of novels) but it was told in under 2,000 words, which was fine by me... all the shocking stuff was there without the lengthy slave-training passages stories of this sort usually have. Unless you bring some unique twist on it -- like having your victim be a petite cheetah-girl in a space opera setting (like the furotica novel "Trouble's Story" was, which I'll be reviewing in a future posting) why bother re-inventing the wheel? There's only so many ways you can torment a slave. More of a vignette than a fully fleshed story, but still well done, and the author's other work is recommended as well. Bed and Breakfast (Part 1) [C] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 1/18/02 Author: Kelli Paine Author address: kellipaine1979@hotmail.com Type: m/f, M/F, cons, inc I've noticed the number of stories on ASSM has been steadily dropping for the last year. It's maybe half to one third what it was back in 1997 when I started reviewing, which isn't surprising as so many writers have their own websites now or submit to specialty archives to showcase their work. There's been a corresponding rise in story quality as casual writers defect to self-posting archives and role-playing chat rooms. Happily, though, there are always enough atrocious stories around for a reviewer to spit her coffee across the room in a wheeze of pure vicious pleasure. This one was one of the family-that-has-sex-together- stays-together ones. Not that I have a problem with incest per se, it's just that the setups are always so laughable. A well-off 32-year-old mother decides to get out of the computer business (it isn't explained why) by buying a bed and breakfast and pimping herself, and her teenage children, out to the B&B's customers (again it's not explained why she gets such a radical idea) a plan which the kids are very amenable to (once again, it's never explained why.) Mom even posts an extensive list of rates for sexual services: $100 buys an hour of her daughters' whipping and torture, but her own costs a mere $30. Sounds kinda low to me. And only $500 for a virgin deflowering? For shame! Virgins are worth much more these days. Actually the whole story was list-like in nature -- Mom is 5 feet 7 and 120 pounds, Daughter One, 5 feet 3, 110 pounds, Daughter Two, 5 feet 5, 100 pounds, in which case, please feed her, as she's borderline anorexic. And though the author meant by these fact-nuggets for everything to seem logical, it wasn't: Daughter One is 17 and Mom 32, which means Mom birthed her first child at age 15. While it's possible for young teen mothers to continue school, graduate, and get good jobs, it's not very likely if they have two other kids in close succession. And where is the kids' father in this scenario? In sum, silly, unbelievable, and not worth much even as a stroke story, because the writing was so flat and factual. In fact, the whole thing showed a severe lack of imagination. ____________________________________________________ Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh -- Pursuant to the Berne Convention, this work is copyright with all rights reserved by its author unless explicitly indicated. +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ | alt.sex.stories.moderated ----- send stories to: | | FAQ: Moderator: | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ |Discuss this story and others in alt.sex.stories.d, look for subject {ASSD}| |Archive at Hosted by | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+