Message-ID: <34960asstr$1012180205@assm.asstr-mirror.org> Return-Path: From: Taintedlime@aol.com X-Original-Message-ID: <127.b08d7a2.2985c254@aol.com> MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit X-ASSTR-Original-Date: Sun, 27 Jan 2002 15:51:32 EST Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} Tainted Lime Reviews #10 Date: Sun, 27 Jan 2002 20:10:05 -0500 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation X-Story-Submission: X-Moderator-ID: newsman, dennyw Tainted Lime Reviews Issue #10 January 27, 2002 Reviews are archived at http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/TaintedLime/www/. --- Stories reviewed in this issue: Together to Learn - The Rest of the Evening, by Millie Teases (* * *) as falls cuyahoga, so falls cuyahoga falls 5, by Nicholas Urfe (* * *) Spice Up the Night, by Idle Hands (* * *) Hollywood Moves, by Katherine T. (* * * * *) Elective Course, by Dancer (* * *) --- {ASSM} Together to Learn - The Rest of the Evening F-solo M-solo Cons Mutual Mast. By Millie Teases http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/34897 For a long time, I couldn't tell out what was going on in this story, but I eventually figured it out. This seems to be the sequel to another story, one where six nerdy college kids get together to learn about sexual response. In this story, "The Rest of the Evening," the four young women and two young men demonstrate masturbation techniques for each other. I suspect this would have been a much clearer story if I had read the first chapter. About half way through, when I had a better picture of who the characters were and what they were doing, my feeling for this story switched from mild annoyance to genuine enjoyment. I loved the final bout, where the whole gang gropes Amy to orgasm. Millie Teases writes with more grammatical precision than I do, so the writing is smooth and clean. The story concept is interesting. Alas, this particular chapter does not stand alone too well. However, if this chapter is any indication of the writing quality, you'll probably enjoy looking up the other stories of this series and reading it straight through. Rating: * * * --- {ASSM} cuyahoga.005 [urfe] [new] (as falls cuyahoga, so falls cuyahoga falls 5) By Nicholas Urfe http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/34903 This is the third story of this series I've reviewed, and I'm afraid I'm getting confused. The first time I read part five, I was completely lost in all the names and relationships. Re- reading it a second time and taking careful notes, I think I got most of it straightened out, although I'm still confused on a few points. Vanessa, Jackson (also known as Jack), Addison, Alexandra (also known as Sandy), Edie, Sam, and Mister Tisdale all meet at a spot on the river where a few combinations have sex with one another. Peter, Marlowe, and Richie are also significant, although they don't make appearances in the flesh. I'm guessing that Edie and Addison are sisters, which means there may be incest occurring here. Sam and Vanessa are grown-up sisters (or sisters-in-law?), so I suppose there's definitely incest occurring here. Alexandra struck me as being the snotty younger sister, although there is no specific age stated; she blows Mister Tisdale, which means there may be some pedophilia going on, too. The best part of this story has little to do with the sex. Vanessa and Jackson, who are married, are bickering as the story unfolds, and I liked the way that was done. And the way Alexandra tells on Edie and Addison for touching each other in the back seat of the car was right on. But I think the style of the story, told in present tense with frequent shifts and without quotation marks in the dialogue, makes it hard to follow more than a couple characters at once. Perhaps it is easier to keep a coherent picture in your head if you read the first five chapters straight through, one after the other. Perhaps this says something about the difficulty of describing a sex scene with seven characters: if a writer as talented as Nicholas Urfe can't do it without it getting confusing, then it is a very difficult task indeed. Rating: * * * --- {ASSM} Spice Up the Night by OneIdleHand By Idle Hands http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/34905 Hayley and Steven are a married couple who, according to Hayley, don't have much romance in their lives. Sure, Steven writes smutty stories, but they cover every topic *except* romance. While Hayley likes the turn-on from her husband's stories, she wants something more. The couple leaves the kids with the grandparents and plan a night out. They have a drink at TGI Fridays, where Hayley retires to the restroom and removes her bra. Then they go to the mall, where Steven picks out clothes for Hayley to try on. And then they have a very nice time in an isolated clearing near a billboard. The grammar and spelling are first-rate, but there is something a little bit off about this story. I got the impression Hayley didn't care much for her husband. He was so predictable, behaving exactly as she expected every time. It wasn't much fun to hear Hayley predict how Steven would react and then have him react exactly like that. It killed all the tension. Still, the final scene with the billboard is very nice, and definitely worth the price of admission. I just wish the story had been told in a way that built my anticipation, instead of killing it off. Rating: * * * --- {ASSM} Hollywood Moves (FF, FFF, lesbian) (Katherine T.) By Katherine T. http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/34858 Rikki is a lesbian screenwriter who came to Hollywood to make it big; Marion Turner is Hollywood's latest sex symbol; Josey Corel is Marion Turner's famous lesbian lover. Rikki meets Josey at a party, and Josey invites her over to discuss a possible screenwriting job with the notorious lesbian couple. Hoping this is her big break, Rikki arrives to find Marion Turner strutting around in a semi-transparent peignoir. Marion flirts, and before long, the would-be screenwriter is sucking clit between the superstar's spread thighs. During a break in the action, Rikki discovers Josey spying on them, a pink dildo dangling from a leather harness. There are too many good things about this story for me to list here, so I'll limit myself to one: I loved the way this ambitious screenwriter is devoured by Hollywood. I don't know if Hollywood is really like this, but after reading this story, I'm inclined to believe it. This is an exciting sex story, one with a real setting and plot. It was a joy to read. Rating: * * * * * --- {ASSM} "Elective Course" [Dancer] (MF rom cons 1st coll humor) By Dancer http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/34927 Pierce Herron had a wild time with three girls while on spring break in Texas. But now that he's back in school, he's beginning to miss Ivy, the girl he liked the best. When he takes out his sketchbook to doodle, he ends up with Ivy's image on the page, her face contorted with ecstasy. And then, out of the blue, Ivy calls. She's been trying to find him for a month. Pierce yearns for the feel of Ivy's tongue stud, and he rushes over to see her. And they rekindle their acquaintance in the sexiest way possible. There was a little sloppiness to the story-telling here. In one place, where the author just wanted to move the story forward, she inserted a parenthetical remark that stated some action was snipped out. And while the ending was interesting, it didn't ring true. But it's still a pretty good story, sexy as hell and with a touch of humor that often made me smile. Rating: * * * -- Pursuant to the Berne Convention, this work is copyright with all rights reserved by its author unless explicitly indicated. +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ | alt.sex.stories.moderated ----- send stories to: | | FAQ: Moderator: | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ |Archive: Hosted by Alt.Sex.Stories Text Repository | |, an entity supported entirely by donations. | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+