Message-ID: <34786asstr$1011229805@assm.asstr-mirror.org> Return-Path: From: Taintedlime@aol.com X-Original-Message-ID: <150.7512854.29771b23@aol.com> MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit X-ASSTR-Original-Date: Wed, 16 Jan 2002 13:06:27 EST Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} Tainted Lime Reviews #7 Date: Wed, 16 Jan 2002 20:10:05 -0500 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation X-Story-Submission: X-Moderator-ID: newsman, gill-bates Tainted Lime Reviews Issue #7 January 16, 2002 Reviews are archived at http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/TaintedLime/www/. Now that I've done a few reviews, I have the star rating system set a little more clearly in my head. I rate stories from one to five stars. Because most stories I read are pretty good, the rating system is skewed to help differentiate between good stories. In my opinion, anything rated three stars or above is worth reading. I hope to reserve the five star rating for a few exceptional stories. A two-star story may still have niche or novelty appeal, but it isn't the kind of story I come to ASSM to read. A one-star story is dreck with little redeeming value. --- Stories reviewed in this issue: Adventures on I 70, by bill johnson (* * * *) The Stake, by Leviticus (* *) Fresh, by Kelly Adams (* * *) as falls cuyahoga, so falls cuyahoga falls 2, by Nicholas Urfe (* * * *) Recollection, by Christopher Andrew (* *) --- {ASSM} For Pebble, my British Friend, Adventures on I 70 (m/m) By bill johnson http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/34679 Although this story is coded m/m, the participants are both consenting adults. In this story, a man who is in a bad marriage has a job delivering important papers by car between Baltimore and Peoria. After a particularly bad time with his wife, as he passes through Columbus, he picks up a male hitchhiker. This other man has also had a bad experience with his wife, and these two bitter men begin to bond. The bond tightens after they stop at a hotel for the night, and the bond becomes airtight as the story reaches its climax. The story itself is a good one. A relationship based on anger towards women put me off a little, but it's a believable scenario. And the story even wraps up believably, with an underlying feeling of loneliness. I genuinely felt sorry for these two men by the time the story was over. There were some weird writing problems, like a repeated paragraph and a couple nonsensical sentences, but the writing is usually pretty good. The seduction and sex is arousing, and the author paints a clear picture of the main character. If you like bisexual men enjoying each other's company, you'll like this one. Rating: * * * * --- {ASSM} The Stake. (bondage) By Leviticus http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/34690 This is an interesting little piece about a man who has tied up a woman and left her to think about her situation. She is hugely aroused by being bound, but the only way she can relieve the arousal is to strain as far as she can against her bonds and rub her pussy against a stake. This is a very short story that should have been even shorter. The build up where we don't see the woman goes on too long, and then when we do finally see her, the narrator spends too much time patting himself on the back for how clever he's been to set her up in this situation. As it is, this story has some novelty appeal, but there isn't much of a story and the scene isn't vivid enough to rate a higher score. Rating: * * --- {ASSM} "Fresh" by Kelly Adams (FF rom) NEW By Kelly Adams http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/34691 Gretchen arrives home late from work, but she makes up for her tardiness with a little surprise she picked up from the grocery store. All through dinner she refuses to tell the narrator what she has. After dinner, Gretchen sends the narrator upstairs to shower and get ready for the grand unveiling. After a sexy shower, she comes back downstairs, and she gets to taste some fruit that you don't ordinarily see at this time of year. I noticed one grammar mistakes (a lay that should have been a lie), and very few slightly awkward sentences, but the writing is very clean and smooth. I wouldn't call this a story, though. While the contents of Gretchen's shopping bag become part of the action, it is tangential. The sex is nice and pleasant, but the best part is in the narrator's anticipation. But even the anticipation came up short for me. During dinner, when the tease should have been building, the story went by too fast. But I think many readers will enjoy this one. With little plot to distract from the tease and the sex, you can concentrate on just the tease and the sex. Rating: * * * --- {ASSM} cuyahoga.002 [urfe] [new] (as falls cuyahoga, so falls cuyahoa falls) By Nicholas Urfe http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/34713 This story takes up just a little after the first Cuyahoga Falls story finishes with Vanessa screaming down the loop in her little red Miata convertible. She's talking to her girlfriend Richie on the cell phone, explaining just what she'd done with the brothers Lappalainen and promising what she's going to do when she and Richie get together. But the plans run amok when an unmarked cop car catches her driving above the posted legal speed limit. Apparently the cop doesn't care much for rich bitches driving little red Miatas, and she introduces Vanessa to her "swagger stick." And Vanessa and the swagger stick become real good friends. The aggressiveness of the policewoman character came a bit out of the blue for me, and if I read "swagger stick" one more time, I was going to scream. The distinctive style used in the Cuyahoga tales glitched once or twice, and I even noticed one misspellchecked word. So this story isn't perfect. But an imperfect story by Nicholas Urfe is still a damn good story. He has again turned out a stylish, sexy piece that I'm sure everyone will enjoy. Rating: * * * * --- {ASSM} Recollection (MF MFF Rom) by Christopher Andrew By Christopher Andrew http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2002/34727 A woman wakes up with her lover, and while they reminisce about a threesome they took part in, they have a nice, loving screw. It's kind of cool the way the author weaves two sex scenes together in one story, but this story has a lot of problems. It starts out with a major mistake: the story shifts from past to present tense in the second paragraph. Couple that with numerous small grammar mistakes, and the story isn't the easiest one to read. But the biggest problem with this story is the extended, unrealistic dialogue. And because these lovers are retelling the story to one another, we get the additional annoyance of that "second person" feel, where every other sentence contains the word "you." There isn't enough plot to counter-balance the negatives in this story. Unless you're the kind of person who can't get enough romantic threesomes, you'll probably want to skip this one. 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