Message-ID: <24395asstr$959757086@assm.asstr-mirror.org> From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com X-Original-Message-ID: MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset="US-ASCII" Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} The Annex Reviews, 5/31/00 Date: Wed, 31 May 2000 03:11:26 -0400 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation X-Story-Submission: X-Moderator-ID: gill-bates, apuleius The Annex Reviews, 5/31/00 by Lady Cyrrh (ladycyrrh@aol.com) Website: http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh OR http://home.aol.com/ladycyrrh The stories: Rashid and kira (Viking Boy): M/F slave, hist Blue Whale of a 'Fish Story' (mdkarl): f teen, zoo, pedo, preg Civilized Society, parts 1 and 2 (Joe Camp): M/b cons, fantasy Mom's Dirty Dancing (AnjingAnak): M/F inc Jomadi: _To Explore Potential_ (Pseudonym Jomadi): F/m teen, BDSM, tort Rashid and kira [B+/A-] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 5/24/00 Author: Viking Boy Address: vikingboy50@hotmail.com This story, which seems to be the third in a series about the same characters, is set in the perennially popular mythical Middle East (see the 5/27/00 Reviews for particulars) where slaves are fiery yet submissive and Masters harsh, but fair. Rashid is a Greek officer in the Sultan's guard and he returns after a long trip expecting to be rewarded with kira, a slave whom he fancies. He gets her after a few minor problems, and the rest of the story is devoted to whipping and all that other good stuff. This story was a little different than the usual run of the slave mill in that the author tried to give the language an Arabian Nights feel: He pushed on, until the three months were complete and He could fly back to the Harem, back to her, to His reward for faithful service. He beat His mounts, going through three strong stallions. He rode through the nights, sleeping in the oases during the heat of the day, taking little refreshment as He went. He was dust covered, road weary, yet exhilarated, for every second, every league, He was closer to His kira...to her coal black eyes, her luminous skin, her dusky pink nipples, her cleft flowing with honey. Throughout the story Rashid was Master, He, and His to denote his status, while kira was uncapitilized, to denote hers. While fairly common in D/s slave role-playing circles, in a story it annoys me. I can see how a story told from a slave's point of view might deify the Master and grant him the almighty capital 'M', but this one story wasn't told from any particular POV, so therefore, why? Blue Whale of a 'Fish Story' [B-] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 5/25/00 Author: The Depraved Canuck Address: mdkarl@incentre.net The Depraved Canuck seems to be a new writer on the scene intent on taking up the M1ke Hunt gauntlet of fast-talking, humorous, in-and-out heterosex, but with pedo and pregger leanings. Twelve year-old Angela Collins has been knocked up by a blue whale while trying to liberate it from the local aquarium in a "Free Willy" type scenario, and the narrator of the story gives us the dirt on it as a roving reporter for "Action News Team" which lets him simultaneously write the story and leeringly comment on it (here he's throwing the girl's halting statements back to her): "You had no choice but to hold onto the boy Blue Whale's ten foot cock with your arms and ride it as he fucked it and you into and out of the girl Blue Whale's slippery, wet cunt. Even though the girl Blue Whale's cunt was big, you still got a very rough ride out of it and your entire suit was shredded off of your body so that you became completely naked." Ooooo-kay. It's an interesting way to tell a story, but frankly it was wasted on a plot like this. Granted, the author says it wasn't his idea, but the story was still idiotic and insulting rather than humorous, and retro in an R. Crumb way...I could almost imagine seeing it in one of my brother's old National Lampoons. Of course, it *is* humor and not intended to be taken seriously, but successful humor depends on how real and plausible you can make an otherwise outlandish event, and this story hardly tried at all...the mechanics of whale mating, for example, will ring false to anyone who's had even a passing acquaintance with the Discovery channel (the kid gets sucked into the female whale's vagina and everything.) And outside of a gene-splicer, there's no way a human female could get pregnant by a whale anyway. So I didn't find the story very funny, and in fact, when I finished reading it, I was very sorry I had, and felt kinda PO'd. But then I'm a female, and being forced to birth a 200-pound whale calf is something I'd rather not think about at *all.* Civilized Society [A] Where posted: ASSGM When posted: 5/21/00 Author: Joe Camp Address: idc90@hotmail.com This story handles underage sex more respectfully. First in a series, it sets up the existence of "Civilized Society," a sort of secret ruling subculture with roots in the distant past. (Think Masonry.) Members of the society are uplifted without being snootish about it, and have long been major powerholders in business and politics. The twist comes with how they maintain their moral purity, so to speak. Underage sex is frowned upon, but only between males and females. Both young girls and young boys are paired with same-sex adult mentors from about 8 onwards whose job is it to guide them into being adults, and that includes sexually. This concept is introduced with the introduction ceremony of Peter, a young teenager, to his mentor David: "Citizen David Knight, do you wish to adopt Peter Morgan as your Student?" "Yes." I responded, "Do you promise to continue training him in the ways of the Civilized Society? To instruct him in the true history of the world? To love and protect him into adulthood?" "I do." I responded. "Peter Morgan, is it your wish to be adopted by David Knight as his Student and for him to become your Guide?" "It is." Peter informed the gathering in his clear voice. "Do you promise to diligently study and follow the ways of the Civilized Society? To love and honor David until adulthood?" "I do." he responded in a voice as clear as a bell. "Citizens and young members, it is my honor to now enter the name of Peter Morgan into the book as a full citizen under the protection of David Knight. His name will be sent to all the Guardians of the Truth in the world, to be entered into their books as a citizen of the Civilized Society." The plot is obviously a boy-love one, but the theme was handled evenly and without exploitation, and may have been a kind of wish-fulfillment on the part of the writer. The setup was almost science fiction in its thoroughness, and I'm betting as the series continues, political thriller elements will pop up as well. For that I recommend it. Mom's Dirty Dancing [A-] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 5/20/00 Author: AnjingAnak Address: anjinganak@aol.com This story was one of those first-person "This really happened" ones. A young man comes home from work to find alkie Mom in her Chinese silk pajamas waiting up for him. They're both a bit on the white-trash side (in the story, it's played for fun) and when son asks Mom's advice on being on exotic male dancer, she shows him how it's done: At this Mom gave my face a very light, playful slap. "Stay right there." she said. The song was ending and she went back in the living room and started it again. It took her a few extra moments to come back, and when did I saw that she had changed out of her pajama bottoms and into some panties. They were a light cotton material and high cut at the hips. The panties were tight and I could see the outline of her pubic mound. She looked so sexy I thought I would come in my pants right then. "How's this, Mr. Critic?" she said. "Wow!" was all I could think to say, but it must have been the right response because Mom smiled from ear to ear, then turned around and bent over, tossing her long hair back and forth to the beat. The cotton fabric strained against her pussy and I could see that her lips were large and swelling just like my cock. She obviously enjoyed putting on a show. The setup was outrageous, but as the story progressed it became more and more believable, until both son and Ma were doin' the dirty on the living room floor, and yes, it was pretty hot. Kudos to the author for the plentiful and realistic detail; with a plot and traditional story structure, this could have been A+ material. Jomadi: _To Explore Potential_ [B] Where posted: ASSM When posted: 5/23/00 Author: Pseudonym Jomadi Address: mr_asher@hotmail.com A teenage boy entraps a near-middle age female through a kinky internet chat room. When she goes to meet him in person, he kidnaps her and tapes her to a chair in his basement, intending to enact some Master-slave BDSM fantasies, without her consent. That's how the story starts, and after some menacing talk and preliminaries, the teen and his friend start in with the clothespins and forced "yes Sir's" from Ms. Wet, as they have renamed their victim. This story tried really hard to be a dark cautionary tale--a woman goes too far with her fantasies, and gets caught for it--but it wound up being mean-spirited and overdone. The teens act more like suave juvenile clones from "American Psycho" than real high school boys who would snicker and use slang, which would have upped the story's anxiety factor considerably: how could real teens do something like this? But instead things proceed as in any other nonconsensual BDSM tale: the dom always knows the right thing to say, the victim always comes against her will. As a story it was acceptable, but missed the mark on adding a new and truly scary twist. ___________________________________________________ Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh -- Pursuant to the Berne Convention, this work is copyright with all rights reserved by its author unless explicitly indicated. +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ | alt.sex.stories.moderated ----- send stories to: | | FAQ: Moderator: | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ |Archive: Hosted by Alt.Sex.Stories Text Repository | |, an entity supported entirely by donations. | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+