Message-ID: <23084asstr$952308606@assm.asstr-mirror.org> X-Original-Path: not-for-mail From: Lee Vine X-Original-Message-ID: <38C2B5F8.84C7F3F6@pair.com> Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit NNTP-Posting-Date: 5 Mar 2000 19:32:09 GMT X-Accept-Language: en Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} Rogue Reviews Digest No. 56 - March 4, 1999 Lines: 572 Date: Sun, 5 Mar 2000 21:10:06 -0500 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation X-Story-Submission: X-Moderator-ID: dennyw, english Rogue Reviews Digest No. 56 - March 4, 1999 NOTICE: If you are easily offended, not of the required legal age, or material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do not read what follows. ===== Comments It has been almost two months since my last issue of Rogue Reviews Digest. Lately, I haven't had much time to read and review stories. Don't expect to see more than one issue of Rogue Reviews per month in the near future. ===== Shameless Plug Check out my home page for reviews of and links to over 475 stories of an erotic nature. http://www92.pair.com/leevine ===== Feedback The authors of these stories would love to hear from you. Whether you have praise or criticism drop them a line after reading their story. If you write your reactions in an intelligent manner then they will probably write back to you. Juvenile slobberings and flames are often ignored. ===== Reviews "Blue Sky" by DG "Mystery Caller" by The Redoubt "The Perfect Pair" by DrSpin "Sunday With Dear Abby" by Paris Waterman "Confessions of a Poodle Shaver" by artie "V Day" by E. Z. Riter "Be Prepared" by Jenny Wanshel "Can I..." [Chapter 1] by Anthony Matthews "Divertimenti" by Hecate ===== Rogue Review No. 488 - January 7, 2000 TITLE: Blue Sky AUTHOR: DG LENGTH: 11,400 words MAIN CHARACTER: Male COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Relative Strangers KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Boat Home GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Noel catches Jim's eye when she steams into the marina on Mort's arm. It isn't too long before Jim manages to get himself wrapped up in her problems. COMMENTARY: I like the idea behind this story. I think the author did a pretty good job with the characters. Some of the sex scenes are arousing. Despite all this, there is something about the story that strikes me as being wrong. The pacing could be better. It feels rushed in some places. Also, there is a bit too much dialogue, in certain scenes. I feel that, those scenes would benefit from having a bit more narration thrown into them. I'm not sure that this would make the story as a whole eminently better, but I think it would improve those scenes and give them a more natural flow. By the way, if you are interested in reading a story that happens to have sexual elements in it, then you may want to try this one. If you are solely interested in sex scenes or being aroused, then you will probably find this story somewhat lacking. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.5 (out of 10) - Arousal: 3/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Good LINK(S): Blue Sky - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/erotica/assm/Year97/4199.txt - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=273662435&fmt=raw DG's Story Page - http://baird.pair.com/dg.htm ===== Rogue Review No. 489 - January 8, 2000 TITLE: Mystery Caller AUTHOR: The Redoubt LENGTH: 3,300 words MAIN CHARACTER: Male COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Mother-Son KINK(S): Phone Sex SETTING(S): Home Work GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Soon after he buys an answering machine, Steve start receiving sexually explicit messages from an unknown woman. The list of suspects includes Cheryl, his mother. COMMENTARY: Now this is good, very good; no, wait, I think its excellent. There isn't a hell of a lot to it, but I like it a lot. What impresses me the most is how the author twists the story toward the end. I don't want to say anymore for fear of giving something away. I will say that what he does do turned, in my opinion, a very good story into an excellent one. On the whole I found this story to be extremely arousing and very entertaining. Keep in mind that I usually enjoy stories of consensual incest. This may have biased me toward this story some, but at the same time I think that author has done a better than average job. If you don't care for stories of consensual incest then maybe you should skip this one, otherwise I highly recommend you read it. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.5 (out of 10) - Arousal: 5/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent LINK(S): Mystery Caller - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=569683713&fmt=raw ===== Rogue Review No. 490 - January 8, 2000 TITLE: The Perfect Pair AUTHOR: DrSpin LENGTH: 3,100 words MAIN CHARACTER: Male COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Infidelity KINK(S): Voyeurism (sort of) SETTING(S): Home GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: A man becomes obsessed with his coworker's wife's breasts. COMMENTARY: This one is a little different, but I like it. I found it to be only mildly arousing, but I there is much more to it than just sex. I like the way the author plays with the main characters; how he has them interact. They seem very realistic. For example, the narrator did not just say that he was obsessed, he also seemed obsessed. His action backed up his words. As I may have already indicated, this doesn't exactly strike me as stroke material. It is, however, a fun read and isn't all that long. I think that most of you should enjoy it. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 8.5 (out of 10) - Arousal: 4/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good LINK(S): The Perfect Pair - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/21288 - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=549270368&fmt=raw ===== Rogue Review No. 491 - January 29, 2000 TITLE: Sunday With Dear Abby AUTHOR: Paris Waterman LENGTH: 3,100 words MAIN CHARACTER: Male COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Unmarried Couple KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Home GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Warren drops in on Abby, one Sunday. COMMENTARY: Don't read too much into the title of this story. It doesn't have anything to do with advice columnists. It is, however, an enjoyable read. The sex is passionate. There isn't a whole lot to the plot, but part of the fun in reading it is watching how Warren and Abby interact. In other words it doesn't really matter that the story is thin in the plot department, in my opinion, of course. One thing that does strike me about this story: there are places where the action seems to jump forward in time without any visual or textual reference to indicate what's happening. This threw me off a bit. It also seemed as though there were places where details were included for no particular reason. By themselves, these details did not help to make the situation any more real for me. I took them as precursors, although nothing really followed them, so they weren't precursors. This left me wondering why include these details in the first place. They bumped me off track a bit; they distrubed the flow for me. Most of you should enjoy this story, although it is a bit subdued. If you prefer something a bit more intense or kinky then you may want to pass on this one. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.5 (out of 10) - Arousal: 3/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good LINK(S): Paris' Place - http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Paris_Waterman/www/ ===== Rogue Review No. 492 - January 30, 2000 TITLE: Confessions of a Poodle Shaver AUTHOR: artie LENGTH: 8,400 words MAIN CHARACTER: Male COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Unmarried Couple KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Hotel GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Roger grooms dogs for competition. Melissa is in need of some grooming. Melissa isn't a canine. COMMENTARY: There some things that I like about this story. The sexual situations that Melissa and Roger get themselves into are hot. There is much more to the story than just sex. The author does a very nice job setting the scene. The are some things that bothered me about this story. Generally speaking, I prefer dialogue to narration. It seems to me that this story had an abundance of narration, but fell short in the dialogue department. Specifically, there is much more narration by Roger than there are conversations he has with Melissa. I was also disappointed by the fact that Melissa does not seem to be an independent character. Most of what the author tells us about her is told through Roger, and he seems to be in control. Maybe I am trying to say that the story was a bit too predictable, which it wasn't, but I am not sure. What I do know is that it would have been nice if Melissa had gotten more air time. All in all this is a well written story. I think that the flaws I see are primarily creations of my own imagination. There are 'things' that I like to see in a story and 'things' that I don't. These 'things' color my views and reviews. In other words, some of you may enjoy this story more than I did; but don't get the wrong idea, I did enjoy it. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.5 (out of 10) - Arousal: 3/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good LINK(S): Confessions of a Poodle Shaver - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/22056 - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=566779303&fmt=raw artie's stories - http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/artie/www/ ===== Rogue Review No. 494 - February 12, 2000 TITLE: V Day AUTHOR: E. Z. Riter LENGTH: 5,300 words MAIN CHARACTER: Male COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) Threesome (2 Females, 1 Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Married Couple Friends KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Home Hotel GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Barbara gives her husband a very special gift for Valentine's Day. She invites her friend, Veronica, to join them in bed. COMMENTARY: This one is a little different. The author may not like this, but I'm going to say it anyway, there is a twist at the end of the story. It isn't that I wasn't expecting some sort of a twist in the tale, but in this case I feel that the twist did not work completely. It was too abrupt and did not keep the story flowing in the same general direction, in my opinion. It wasn't quite a hairpin turn, but it did alter the mood of story dramatically. Aside from the ending, I enjoyed the story. The characters seemed realistic enough. The sex was hot. It is probably much more of a male fantasy than female fantasy one, but the twist at the ending, well that's all I going to say. You'll just have to read it and judge for yourself whether the story and the ending work. ... After I wrote this review I looked back and noticed that the story codes reveal much more than the title does. Um, in other words, I should not have been surprised as I was by the ending. Is there a moral to this paragraph? Maybe. Oh, you actually want to know what it is? Well, um, I guess it is that if you want a better idea as to what a story is about before reading it, then maybe you should try reading the story codes, unlike me. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.5 (out of 10) - Arousal: 3/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Good LINK(S): V Day - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2000/22746 - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=584819296&fmt=raw ===== Rogue Review No. 495 - February 26, 2000 TITLE: Be Prepared AUTHOR: Jenny Wanshel LENGTH: 10,000 words MAIN CHARACTER: Female COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Teenagers in Lust KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Woods GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Jenny goes to girl scout camp with her friends. The main attraction is the boy scout camp just across the river. Jenny and her friends manage to do more than just think about the other camp. COMMENTARY: I enjoyed the author's style. She has a nice light touch and doesn't treat her characters or the situations that they get themselves into too seriously. The humorous asides and detours from her narrative made the story much more enjoyable for me. One thing about the story: it is a bit episodic. It is all about the time they spend getting to and at scout camp, but it seems to lack a focal point. The story as a whole does not build up to one climactic moment, although it does have such a moment. This is just an observation, not a criticism; something to keep in mind when you are reading it. I get the impression that this story will appeal more to women than to men. I could be wrong, but that is how it -- er -- rubs me. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.5 (out of 10) - Arousal: 3/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good LINK(S): Be Prepared - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2000/22615 ===== Rogue Review No. 496 - February 27, 2000 TITLE: Can I... [Chapter 1] AUTHOR: Anthony Matthews LENGTH: 3,500 words MAIN CHARACTER: Male COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Cousins KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Home GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Anthony is reunited with his cousin Kelly during the summer of 1996. They are teenagers, born a month apart, and appreciate the manner in which the other has developed physically. COMMENTARY: I like the manner in which the author tells his story. It does not seem matter of fact, but rather is filled with little details that gently nudged my imagination. He seems to focus as much on how the main character is feeling as he does on what exactly is going on. I like that, a lot. This story is written as the first chapter of a longer work. While it can probably stand on its own, I feel that this segment was lacking in plot. The author basically sets the situation, introduces a bit of tension, and then has a sex scene. The tension seems to flow away once the sex begins. The tension does not last long enough to fully satisfy me. Of course, if this is just the first chapter of a longer work, then there is plenty of time to bring back the tension, which I feel is an essential element in any sort of story about human interaction. So, I like what the author has written so far. I hope that there is more to the relationship between Anthony and Kelly than just sex. Hopefully the author will continue with his story and prove this to be the case. If you prefer things that are over-the-top and incredibly kinky, then you will probably be disappointed by this story. If, on the other hand, you enjoy stories that are more on the gentle side, then I certainly recommend it to you. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.0 (out of 10) - Arousal: 3/5 - Editing: 4/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good LINK(S): Can I... [Chapter 1] - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2000/22858 - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=587102957&fmt=raw Anthony Matthews' Stories - www.mrdouble.com/htm/raauthors/nlsoldier.htm ===== Rogue Review No. 497 - March 3, 2000 TITLE: Divertimenti AUTHOR: Hecate LENGTH: 8,100 words MAIN CHARACTER: Female COMBINATION(S): Twosome (2 Females) Threesome (3 Females) ORIENTATION(S): Homosexual (Female) RELATIONSHIP(S): Teacher-Student KINK(S): Spanking, Light Bondage, Discipline SETTING(S): Home Restaurant GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Susannah's ballet instructor, Claire, grows tired of her student's attitude. She wants to discipline her student. Susannah indicates that she isn't adverse to the idea of discipline. The story progresses from there. COMMENTARY: I like this story for a number of reasons. It wasn't too predictable. The sex was hot. The focus seems to be Susannah's emotional state and not the sex acts she performs. The plot develops at a nice pace. On the down side the story is a bit lacking in the plot department. Given the up side (see last paragraph for details) I am willing to overlook this fact. A story does not have to have a great plot to be a fun read or even to be a great story. What it does need is something compelling; something to drag you in. I found that in the main character. Susannah seems torn throughout the story. One minute she is thrilled and aroused by her ballet instructor's actions and the next minute she is nervous and scared. She willingly submits to Claire's discipline, but usually not before expressing doubts or hesitating. I guess that if you don't care for stories that involve spankings or light bondage, then you might want to skip this one. The female homosexuality may turn some of you off. I enjoyed it quite a bit and certainly recommend it to those of you who don't think they will be squicked by the subject matter. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.0 (out of 10) - Arousal: 5/5 - Editing: 4/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent LINK(S): Divertimenti - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2000/22995 [1/2] - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year2000/23000 [2/2] - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=590740623&fmt=raw [1/2] - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=591123740&fmt=raw [2/2] -- Lee Vine * E-Mail - leevine@pair.com * Home Page - http://www92.pair.com/leevine/ * AOL Instant Messenger - leevine * ICQ - 44754368 -- Pursuant to the Berne Convention, this work is copyright with all rights reserved by its author unless explicitly indicated. +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ | alt.sex.stories.moderated ----- send stories to: | | FAQ: Moderator: | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+ |Archive: Hosted by Alt.Sex.Stories Text Repository | |, an entity supported entirely by donations. | +---------------------------------------------------------------------------+