Message-ID: <21894asstr$945580201@assm.asstr-mirror.org> X-Original-Path: not-for-mail From: Lee Vine Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} Rogue Reviews Digest No. 54 - December 18, 1999 Lines: 506 X-Original-Message-ID: <385C06B9.8644A0A3@pair.com> Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit NNTP-Posting-Date: 18 Dec 1999 22:13:20 GMT X-Accept-Language: en Date: Sun, 19 Dec 1999 00:10:01 -0500 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation X-Story-Submission: X-Moderator-ID: assm-admin Rogue Reviews Digest No. 54 - December 18, 1999 NOTICE: If you are easily offended, not of the required legal age, or material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do not read what follows. ===== Shameless Plug Check out my home page for reviews of and links to over 475 stories of an erotic nature. http://www92.pair.com/leevine ===== Feedback The authors of these stories would love to hear from you. Whether you have praise or criticism drop them a line after reading their story. If you write your reactions in an intelligent manner then they will probably write back to you. Juvenile slobberings and flames are often ignored. ===== Reviews "A Question of Honour" by Delta "The Wedding Dance" by Ann Douglas "My Niece, Jan, and I" by Cagey "Passenger" by Sidney Durham "The Uncertainty of the Meek" by The Mysterious Mr. Lee Organization "Massaged" by JennTill "Phone Sex Diary" by Paris Waterman ===== Rogue Review No. 473 - December 6, 1999 TITLE: A Question of Honour AUTHOR: Delta LENGTH: 21,700 words MAIN CHARACTER: Male COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Strangers KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Outdoors GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Riltan, a renegade from justice. Takene, a widow and temporary guardian of Iro and Lere, a couple of teenagers. Riltan, half dead, encounters Takene and her two wards soon after they survived an attack by bandits. Takene, with some help from Iro and Lere, nurses Riltan back to health. She doesn't trust him, but soon finds herself caring for more than just his physical health. Riltan, for his part, is rather emotionally dead when he meets Takene. Her ministrations and care do as much, possibly more, for his spirit as they do for his body. COMMENTARY: I may have given away some of the plot in my summary. What I cannot give away, what I can only hint at, is the beauty of the author's writing. The story itself is somewhat mysterious. The author does not start the story with a detailed explanation of who the characters are and how they got where they are. Instead, he opts to reveal this sort of information as the tale progresses. In some ways, this story reminds me of a Louis L'Amour western. It has some romantic moments, and I think the theme is for the most part a romantic one. It isn't heavy on plot, but the author does a very nice job drawing out what plot there is. No one part of the story is focused on too heavily. It doesn't drag, or at least I don't think it did. I can see how some might grow weary of not being told explicitly who the main characters are and what exactly their initial motivations are for feeling the way they do. I, for one, enjoyed piecing together the bits and pieces that were thrown my way, as the story unfolded. It isn't a short short story, but it kept my attention. If you are looking for stroke material, then I recommend you look elsewhere. If you are looking for a story with a plot and characters, then you should definitely read this one. It also strikes me as being suitable for those of you who enjoy romances. It isn't a wild or incredibly kinky story. It is very well written story, that I found to be a very enjoyable read. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.0 (out of 10) - Arousal: 4/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 5/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent LINK(S): A Question of Honour - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=479557014&fmt=raw [1/2] - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=479560307&fmt=raw [2/2] ===== Rogue Review No. 474 - December 8, 1999 TITLE: The Wedding Dance AUTHOR: Ann Douglas LENGTH: 8,800 words MAIN CHARACTER: Male COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Older Woman-Younger Man KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Home GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Jack just graduated high school and is still a virgin. He desperately wants to lose his cherry. Based upon information provided by one of his friends, he is hopeful that his sister's wedding will put his girlfriend "in the mood". Unfortunately, things don't work out quite the way he had planned. Jack's girlfriend is a no-show, although she does have a reasonable excuse, and he gets paired up, at the reception, with Tina, one of his new brother-in-law's older cousins. COMMENTARY: Great story. I love the part that takes place at the dance. It is entirely possible that I am biased towards this sort of story, i.e. older woman initiates younger man, but I still think that there is much more to it than just sex. The author does a very nice job building the story up, so don't be fooled by the first few paragraphs, because as I just said there is much more to it than just sex. The scene that the title refers to is priceless. I enjoyed the dialogue and the characters. The plot is very nicely paced. I think that this story should appeal to most. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 8.5 (out of 10) - Arousal: 4/5 - Editing: 4/5 - Plot and Characters: 5/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent LINK(S): The Wedding Dance - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/21406 [1/4] - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/21408 [2/4] - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/21409 [3/4] - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/21407 [4/4] - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=551759705&fmt=raw [1/4] - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=551784003&fmt=raw [2/4] - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=551783995&fmt=raw [3/4] - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=551759699&fmt=raw [4/4] The Ann Douglas Archive - http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Ann_Douglas/www/ ===== Rogue Review No. 475 - December 10, 1999 TITLE: My Niece, Jan, and I (Part 1) AUTHOR: Cagey LENGTH: 6,800 words MAIN CHARACTER: Male COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Uncle-Niece KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Home GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Jim is a writer. His 14-year-old niece, Jan, isn't satisfied with the sexual education she has received from her parents. She turns to him for enlightenment. Once he starts explaining, one thing leads to another. COMMENTARY: The thing that impresses me the most about this story is the author's restraint. He doesn't push the story too fast. He takes the time to set the scene and allows it to develop. I was also impressed with the manner in which the author handled Jan. She was both hesitant and eager at the same time. That seemed realistic to me. Jim, on the other hand, did not seem to be quite as torn between options. He knew what he wanted and went after it. I think I would have enjoyed this story more if he had been more like Jan, in that respect. I was less impressed with the ending, than I was with the beginning. The plot seemed to go out the window and the story devolved into a series of physical interactions with little or no plot development. In my estimation this story describes a male fantasy, not a female one. Jan isn't just a type or a body, but the story seems to be primarily about how Jim lived out one of his fantasies. Jan seems to enjoy herself, but for the most part the story seems to be about him, not her. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 6.5 (out of 10) - Arousal: 3/5 - Editing: 3/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Good LINK(S): Stories written by Cagey - http://www.mrdouble.com/htm/authors/cagey.htm ===== Rogue Review No. 476 - December 11, 1999 TITLE: Passenger AUTHOR: Sidney Durham LENGTH: 2,000 words MAIN CHARACTER: Male COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Strangers KINK(S): Exhibitionism SETTING(S): Car GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Albert is an accountant, very straight-laced. He is headed to Asheville when he meets Indigo, who is anything but straight-laced. She is headed to Gatlinburg and needs a lift. COMMENTARY: This is a fun little vignette. I like the interaction between Albert and Indigo. The author does wonderful job showing how they contrast without explicitly saying that they contrast. I call this a vignette, because it seems more like an episode in something longer than it does a stand alone story. There isn't much of an introduction or a conclusion. I think the author intended it that way. I think that this one should appeal to readers of both sexes. I can't see how anyone, who enjoys erotica, could be offended by anything in this story. Both characters get treated fairly. I just wish there had been more to the story. It left me wanting more. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 8.5 (out of 10) - Arousal: 4/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good LINK(S): Stories by Sidney Durham - http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/SidneyDurham/www/ ===== Rogue Review No. 477 - December 12, 1999 TITLE: The Uncertainty of the Meek AUTHOR: The Mysterious Mr. Lee Organization LENGTH: 12,400 words MAIN CHARACTER: Female COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) Twosome (2 Females) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) Homosexual (Female) RELATIONSHIP(S): Friends KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Home GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: This is the story of Michi's life. In particular it focuses on her love life, from high school, through college and grad school, until after she turns thirty. She is, in her own words, meek. It is this quality of her personality that shapes her development. COMMENTARY: This story evokes a lot of thoughts and feelings. I'm not too sure where to begin but why don't I start with what I perceive to be the central theme of the story: growing up. That is what this story is all about, in my mind. It tracks Michi's development from her teen years until she is about thirty. Maybe growing up isn't the best way to describe the focus of the story; maybe maturation is a better way to think of it. The story is about how Michi matures over those years. Yes, I think that sounds better; is more accurate. I really think that part of the reason I enjoyed this story is because that was the focus of the story. Another reason why I liked this story was the narration and author's descriptive abilities. Michi's recollections of her life are rich in details. She does not speak as much about why things happened as she does about what happened. All the little details that she remembers made the story that much more real to me. The fact that she didn't feel the need to explain most of them was perfectly all right with me. In fact, I usually prefer it that way. She had her notions about why some things happened, but didn't get caught up in trying to explain too much. She merely described. Yet another reason why I liked this story is the main character, Michi. Being a devout introvert, I felt that I could empathize with her. Well, actually it was her manner of speaking that made feel close to her. She described the shortcomings in her life in ways that spoke volumes to me. I felt like I knew the song, even though I only got to hear a few notes played by one instrument. It was really quite beautiful and moved me in a number of ways. It would not surprise me to find out that not everyone who reads this story has the same reaction, as this was a very personal reaction on my part. Finally, the part you've all been waiting for, I found this story to be wildly arousing. I hope that you are still reading, because I'm not sure that all of you will find this story quite as arousing as I did. There is sex in this story, but sex is not the focus of the story. The focus of the story is Michi's emotional development, or at least that is how I would phrase it. There are things in this story that I found arousing, which I am sure some of you would not. There are descriptions of kisses and touches, that had the blood pounding through my veins with inevitable consequences. Likewise there are also conversations that had little or nothing to do with sex that I found to be extremely intimate and got me quite aroused. There are also some explicit descriptions of sexual couplings, but those aren't as easy to find in this story as some of the other things that turned me on. I wish I could say that you will all enjoy this story, but I'm sure that some of you may not. I found it to be a very satisfying read in more ways than one. I hope that this review has made that clear. I think that it should appeal to those of you who want more than just sex, those of you who want a story that isn't about sex, but maybe has some sex in it. I think that it should appeal to those of you who like stories about characters, about growing up, or about emotional development. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 10.0 (out of 10) - Arousal: 5/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 5/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Outstanding LINK(S): The Uncertainty of Meekness - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/21707 [1/4] - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/21708 [2/4] - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/21709 [3/4] - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/21710 [4/4] - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=558444848&fmt=raw [1/4] - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=558444854&fmt=raw [2/4] - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=558458856&fmt=raw [3/4] - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=558458860&fmt=raw [4/4] The Mysterious Mr. Lee Erotica Emporium - http://pages.ripco.net/~metrdesn/ ===== Rogue Review No. 478 - December 15, 1999 TITLE: Massaged AUTHOR: JennTill LENGTH: 3,200 words MAIN CHARACTER: Female COMBINATION(S): Threesome (2 Females, 1 Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) Homosexual (Female) RELATIONSHIP(S): Friends KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Home GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Jenn accepts an offer from a married couple, Fred and Jeannie. An offer to give her a massage, that is, with no strings attached. But what if she wants more than just a massage? COMMENTARY: What I like about this story is how the author builds it up. She does a great job making it arousing, long before the sex begins. The focus of the story seems to be Jenn's experience. I had a hard time following some of the descriptions of the menage-a-trois. The mental images that I conjured were not always consistent with normal humans having sex. Maybe Jenn, Jeannie, and Fred are contortionists? Maybe my brain just wasn't functioning correctly when I read this story? Either way, it did not detract form my ability to enjoy the story, but taken from an objective point of view, it is a flaw. If you are looking for a story with a deep plot, then you might want to skip this one. The author does a beautiful job with narration, but the overwhelming focus is on Jenn's emotional state and not the progression of a series of events. That sounds overly clinical to me, so let me end this review by saying that I really did enjoy this story. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.0 (out of 10) - Arousal: 5/5 - Editing: 4/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent LINK(S): Erotic Love Stories by JennTill - http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Kristen/www/jenn/ ===== Rogue Review No. 479 - December 16, 1999 TITLE: Phone Sex Diary AUTHOR: Paris Waterman LENGTH: 5,000 words MAIN CHARACTER: Female COMBINATION(S): Twosome (2 Females) ORIENTATION(S): Homosexual (Female) RELATIONSHIP(S): Cousins KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Restaurant GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Rachel tells her friend Lisa about her two cousins, Brenda and Josie, over the phone. COMMENTARY: I thoroughly enjoyed this story. I think that it has two strengths. The first is the omnipresent dialogue. Almost the entire story consists of dialogue. The author uses it quite effectively. In particular, it is a medium that allows the author to reveal how Rachel and Lisa differ. He does so quite effectively. The second strength of this story is the manner in which the author weaves two narratives together. The story begins with Rachel and Lisa talking on the phone. Soon there after, Rachel begins to tell Lisa about her night on the town with her cousins. I suppose that this could also be referred to as a story-within-a-story. Either way, the author does a very nice job jumping back and forth, quite seamlessly I might add, and in the end tying the two together. If you don't care for stories of lesbian lust, then this may not be the story for you. Other than that, I can't see anything else that should bother most avid readers of erotica. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.5 (out of 10) - Arousal: 5/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent LINK(S): Phone Sex Diary - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/21364 - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=551056435&fmt=raw Paris' Place - http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Paris_Waterman/www/ -- Lee Vine * E-Mail - leevine@pair.com * Home Page - http://www92.pair.com/leevine/ -- If you enjoyed this work, take a moment to email the author. Your comments are their only payment. 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