Message-ID: <21672asstr$944453402@assm.asstr-mirror.org> X-Original-Path: not-for-mail From: Lee Vine Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} Rogue Reviews Digest No. 53 - December 5, 1999 Lines: 464 X-Original-Message-ID: <384B24D3.9D23D099@pair.com> Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit NNTP-Posting-Date: 6 Dec 1999 02:53:18 GMT X-Accept-Language: en Date: Sun, 5 Dec 1999 23:10:02 -0500 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation X-Story-Submission: X-Moderator-ID: Lambchop, kelly Rogue Reviews Digest No. 53 - December 5, 1999 NOTICE: If you are easily offended, not of the required legal age, or material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do not read what follows. ===== Shameless Plug Check out my home page for reviews of and links to over 450 stories of an erotic nature. http://www92.pair.com/leevine ===== Feedback The authors of these stories would love to hear from you. Whether you have praise or criticism drop them a line after reading their story. If you write your reactions in an intelligent manner then they will probably write back to you. Juvenile slobberings and flames are often ignored. ===== Reviews "Laura" by JennTill "A Posteriori" by Joanna "The Shit-Eating Grin" by Losgud "Three Days in August" by MichaelD38 "The Girl Who Came Out of the Blue" by Titmouse "Teacher's Pets.com" by Lotuseater "Trust" by E. Z. Riter ===== Rogue Review No. 466 - November 19, 1999 TITLE: Laura AUTHOR: JennTill LENGTH: 8,100 words MAIN CHARACTER: Female COMBINATION(S): Twosome (2 Females) Threesome (2 Females, 1 Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) Homosexual (Female) RELATIONSHIP(S): Friends KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Hotel GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Jen has an internet chat buddy, Laura, whom she has never met in person. Laura isn't completely satisfied in her marriage. She wants to experiment. Jen is more than willing to be of assistance. COMMENTARY: There isn't any one thing about this story that sticks out in my mind. It is just very well written and extremely arousing. It is well executed, not too predictable, and does not cut to the chase too quickly. At the same time the author does a nice job of hinting at what is to come without being too explicit. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.5 (out of 10) - Arousal: 5/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent LINK(S): Laura - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/21340 - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=550523905&fmt=raw Erotic Love Stories by JennTill - http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Kristen/www/jenn/ ===== Rogue Review No. 467 - November 20, 1999 TITLE: A Posteriori AUTHOR: Joanna LENGTH: 9,100 words MAIN CHARACTER: Male COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Strangers KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Home GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Greg is mowing his lawn one day when a beautiful woman shows up and asks if she can spend the night. She seems to know quite a bit about him and he is suspicious. COMMENTARY: This is an intriguing story. It isn't completely straight forward. Trying to figure out what it was all about gave me an additional reason for not wanting to put it down. In fact I would go so far as to say that this story was a little more interesting than it was arousing. It was arousing, just not as arousing it was interesting. Now that I am done chasing my tail, why don't I get back to the review. The author is British and uses a few expressions which baffled me, at first. I do not perceive this as a flaw, but something that other non-British readers might want to keep mind. If you are looking for stroke material, then I would recommend looking elsewhere, which is not to that this story isn't arousing; it is. I do recommend it if you are looking for something that might actually make you stop and reflect on what you just read. Of course, I suppose, some of you may enjoy reflecting on stroke material as well. Either way, I recommend this story, which in my opinion is much more than just stroke material. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.0 (out of 10) - Arousal: 4/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 5/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good LINK(S): A Posteriori - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/21347 - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=550750900&fmt=raw ===== Rogue Review No. 468 - November 22, 1999 TITLE: The Shit-Eating Grin AUTHOR: Losgud LENGTH: 8,800 words MAIN CHARACTER: Female COMBINATION(S): Twosome (2 Females) Threesome (2 Females, 1 Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) Homosexual (Female) RELATIONSHIP(S): Siblings KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Home GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Brenda flies home to visit her family, after her father has a stroke. It turns out she has to share a room with Sarah, her older sister, whom she has never gotten along with very well. Much to Brenda's surprise, this actually mellows the situation somewhat. Before you know it Sarah and Barry, her older brother, don't seem all that bad after all. COMMENTARY: This is an arousing tale of a rather interesting family. I enjoyed the twists and turns that story takes. The author does a very nice job working in little details. They inject both humor and reality into Brenda's situation. One problem that I do have with this story is the title. The author manages to work it into the plot, but it felt forced. It seemed peripheral and not central to the story. I also would have preferred a little more dialogue and a little less narration. Actually, the author does a very nice job with the narration. What really bothered me was that I felt like I didn't know Barry or Sarah, except through Brenda's eyes. So, maybe the problem isn't that there is too much narration, but that Brenda seems too in control of the situation. Nothing seems to leap out and surprise her. Well, that isn't completely true, but without giving away what happens I must say that her reactions seem rather subdued. Enough already! This is a very nicely written story. I'm just being picky. If you like stories that have more to them than just sex, and that includes stories of incest, then you should like this one. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.0 (out of 10) - Arousal: 4/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 5/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good LINK(S): The Shit Eating Grin - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=497927228&fmt=raw&part=1 Stories Online - http://www.storiesonline.net/ ===== Rogue Review No. 469 - November 29, 1999 TITLE: Three Days in August AUTHOR: MichaelD38 LENGTH: 9,100 words MAIN CHARACTER: Female COMBINATION(S): Solo (Female) Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Older Man-Younger Woman KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Indoors Outdoors GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Lori is nineteen years old and about to start her sophomore year of college. She flies to southern California, intending to spend three days visiting with her father. As it turns out, he doesn't have the time or desire to actually spend time with her. She makes the best of a crummy situation by hanging out with his 33-year-old neighbor, Jack. COMMENTARY: I have a feeling that this story may appeal more to women than it does to men. It is a romance; it isn't filled with sex; the main character is a young woman. Another way of putting all this is that while I was entertained, I have enjoyed other stories more than I enjoyed this one. I attribute this fact not to a lack of ability on the author's part, but to the fact that my tastes and this story do not mesh very well. If the main character had been a young man and he had been hanging out with older woman I think I would have enjoyed the story more, but then it would have been quite a different story. OK, now I am feeling guilty. I didn't mean to give this story short shrift. It is very well written. The author does a very nice job with Lori. She seems realistic. It is just that the subject matter wasn't the sort of stuff I look for in erotica. By the way, the operative in the last sentence, in case you missed it, was 'I'. To be perfectly honest I -- there I go again -- get the impression that the author wrote this with a female audience in mind. Have I gone too far? Was it really necessary to say all that? Maybe, maybe not, but I wanted to make sure that y'all understood that while I wasn't wild about the story, I get the impression that some of you may care for it more than I did. In particular I was thinking that members of the female persuasion will probably enjoy it more than I did. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 8.0 (out of 10) - Arousal: 3/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 5/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good LINK(S): Three Days in August - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=519384057&fmt=raw [1/3] - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=519384051&fmt=raw [2/3] - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=519384047&fmt=raw [3/3] Stories Online - http://www.storiesonline.net/ ===== Rogue Review No. 470 - November 30, 1999 TITLE: The Girl Who Came Out of the Blue AUTHOR: Titmouse LENGTH: 15,000 words MAIN CHARACTER: Male COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Older Man-Younger Woman KINK(S): Light Bondage SETTING(S): Hotel GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: 55-year-old Alan helps 22-year-old Linda reduce her purity score. COMMENTARY: Well, the sex in this story is over the top. It really got me going, even before it actually began. The foreshadowing was titillating, to say the least. Unfortunately, the story is taken up, for the most part, by a single sexual encounter. So while on the one hand, this sexual encounter was enough to steam up my glasses, on the other, the plot left something to be desired. Actually the way the story begins led me to believe that there would be more to it than just sex. In a way, there is; after all, the author does take the time to set the stage. There is a buildup. I was drawn in enough by the setup and the hints of what was to come (i.e. the sex) that I was a little more forgiving, for a while. If the story had been shorter then maybe I could have been a little more generous and given this story an even higher score, but considering its length, I think that there needs to be more to the plot to justify stretching out the narrative to its current length. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 8.0 (out of 10) - Arousal: 4/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 3/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good LINK(S): The Girl Who Came Out of the Blue - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/20951 - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=547051021&fmt=raw Stories by the Titmouse - http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Titmouse/www/ ===== Rogue Review No. 471 - December 3, 1999 TITLE: Teacher's Pets.com AUTHOR: Lotuseater LENGTH: 2,500 words MAIN CHARACTER: Female COMBINATION(S): Twosome (2 Females) ORIENTATION(S): Homosexual (Female) RELATIONSHIP(S): Roommates KINK(S): Exhibitionism SETTING(S): Dormitory GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Jennifer's parents don't have enough money for her to continue living in a dormitory, while she attends college. Karen, Jennifer's roommate, comes up with a scheme which, hopefully, will earn them enough money so that they can continue living together. COMMENTARY: This is a fun story; very playful. I like the manner in which the author sets it up and then carries through on it. It is very nicely paced. It isn't overloaded with sex. It would have been nice if the author had taken a little more time to flesh out the characters. The characteristics that distinguish them seem to have little to do with their personalities and more to do with their physical attributes or financial positions. In other words, the plot and pacing impressed me, the characters did not. Getting away from the plot and characters, there are some spots where a few more details would have helped. I like it when an author gives me enough to visualize the scene, but not so much that I feel like every last detail has been written in to it. More often than not, when I perceive a problem with the quantity of details, the author falls into the latter category. In this case there is actually a detectable dearth of description. This meant I had to make some more imaginative leaps than I prefer to, and although this was not an insurmountable task, it bothered me enough that I decided to mention it. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.5 (out of 10) - Arousal: 3/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 4/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Good LINK(S): Teacher's Pets.com - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/21588 - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=555108632&fmt=raw ===== Rogue Review No. 472 - December 4, 1999 TITLE: Trust AUTHOR: E. Z. Riter LENGTH: 6,100 words MAIN CHARACTER: Male COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male) ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male) RELATIONSHIP(S): Husband-Wife Employer-Employee KINK(S): -- SETTING(S): Home Office GENRE(S): -- CAUTION(S): -- SUMMARY: Danny's wife, Denise, works for a very powerful man, Mr. Chase. Her boss wants her to become his mistress and bear his children. The catch is that she wants to remain married to Danny. Mr. Chase complicates things by agreeing to financially support the couple and the children. What will Danny decide to do? COMMENTARY: This is an interesting story, to say the least. The opportunity that is presented to Denise and Danny isn't exactly run-of-the-mill, and that's putting it mildly. For the first two-thirds of the story I found myself both disturbed and aroused by Danny's situation. While reading the last one-third, I felt more comfortable identifying with Danny and much more comfortable with the level of arousal that I achieved. On the whole, this story is different. If you are looking for something romantic, you might want to look elsewhere. There are elements within this story that I believe will appeal to some female readers and elements that will appeal to some male readers. I can also see how some men and women could be turned off by this story. It is a bit convoluted, but it works. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.0 (out of 10) - Arousal: 4/5 - Editing: 5/5 - Plot and Characters: 5/5 SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent LINK(S): Trust - http://assm.asstr-mirror.org/Year1999/21633 - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=556359512&fmt=raw -- Lee Vine * E-Mail - leevine@pair.com * Home Page - http://www92.pair.com/leevine/ * AOL Instant Messenger - leevine * ICQ - 44754368 -- If you enjoyed this work, take a moment to email the author. Your comments are their only payment. 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