Message-ID: <21457asstr$943477801@assm.asstr-mirror.org> From: Celeste801@aol.com X-Original-Message-ID: <0.35252830.256d9c28@aol.com> Subject: {ASSM} {REVIEW} Celestial Reviews 347 November 24 MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii" Content-Transfer-Encoding: 8bit X-MIME-Autoconverted: from quoted-printable to 8bit by sara.asstr-mirror.org id OAA02273 Date: Wed, 24 Nov 1999 16:10:01 -0500 Path: assm.asstr-mirror.org!not-for-mail X-Is-Review: yes Approved: Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories,alt.sex.stories.d Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d X-Archived-At: X-Moderator-Contact: ASSTR ASSM moderation X-Story-Submission: X-Moderator-ID: Lambchop, dennyw, gill-bates Celestial Reviews 347 – November 24, 1999 Note: One night three women who were roommates all came home from their dates at about the same time. The first said, "You know you've been on a good date when you come home with your hair all messed up." The second said, "No, you know you've been on a good date when you come home with your makeup all smeared." The third one said nothing, but reached under her skirt, removed her panties and threw them against the wall, where they stuck. "Now THAT'S a good date!" she said. Second note: A salesman was driving down a country road one day when his car broke down. There was a farm near by, so he went there to ask for some help. The farmer suggested that his daughter, Nelly, could give him a ride into town to get the necessary parts for his car. Nelly was an innocent girl, the epitome of virginal beauty. Nelly and the salesman were on their way into town when he convinced her to pull over to the side of the road to enlighten her about the facts of life. They had some down and dirty sex all over the car, and then went into town to get the car parts. By the time they got into town, the auto store was closed; so they had to return to the farm. The farmer allowed the salesman to spend the night in the barn and get his car fixed in the morning. The next morning the salesman went up to the farmhouse to get Nelly so she could give him a ride into town. Nelly was gone, however, and her sister Venus opened the door. Venus was very unlike Nelly. She was sexy, voluptuous, and really even a bit sleazy. Venus volunteered to give the salesman a ride into town, and off they went. Venus did the convincing this time, and the salesman had the "ride" of his life. They eventually made it back to the farm with the parts,ture, and went on his merry way. A few months later the salesman received a later from the farmer which contained only a poem: Were you the one who did the pushin' Left the bloodstains on the cushion And the footprints on the dashboard upside down? 'Cause since you met my daughter Nelly, There's a swelling in her belly, And you'd better get your ass back into town. The salesman thought for a minute, and wrote the following response: Yes, I was the one who did the pushin' Left the bloodstains on the cushion And the footprints on the dashboard upside down. But since I met your daughter Venus, I've had some problems with my penis, So I guess we're pretty even all around. Third note: An American was on a business trip to Japan. He received excellent hospitality, including a woman to satisfy his needs. The night before the meeting, he was with the woman, and she seemed to really enjoy the way he made love to her. She spoke no English, but the way she thrashed her head from side to side and gyrated her hips and yelled a certain phrase in Jap anese made him certain he was really rocking her world. So he guessed the meaning of the phrase to be "Wonderful! Great! Terrific!" He filed this phrase away for the time when he could impress the businessmen he was meeting with. The next day, while he was golfing with one of the Japanese businessmen, the Japanese man hit a hole-in-one. Thinking that this was the time to trot out his phrase, the guy began yelling it. The businessman turned, gave him an odd look, and said in excellent English, "What the hell do you mean, 'Wrong hole!' "? Final note: My thanks again to Techguy for helping me with the links. The two without links are stories with a Thanksgiving theme, and I added them at the last moment. You're on your own in finding them. Uther just reposted his in a.s.s.m., and maybe Tom will get the message and do the same. There's nothing wrong with getting a little behind in your Thanksgiving festivities . Keep in mind that most of these stories have recently been posted in a.s.s.m., and they can easily be found there. ===================== Celestial Reviews Index: ===================== "The Runner" by Sammie (casual sex with teenager) 7, 6, 6 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=541006416 "Bad Girls" by MichaelD (teen slut sex) 10, 10, 10 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=439901078 "Behind the Curtain" by Ann Douglas (ff older/younger) 9, 10, 10 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=517444559 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=517444599 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=517444636 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=517446543 "Revealing Secrets" by losgud (family threesome) 10, 10, 10 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=497927216 "So Typical My Desires" by The Mr. Lee (passionate exhibitionism) 7, 10, 10 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=550540648 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=550540647 "Small Town Teens - Stacy" by Unknown Author (older man & teen girl) 5, 8, 8 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=538858846 "Jack and Stacie" by EroScribe (older man & teen girl) 5, 7, 5 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=498172986 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=498175265 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=498175322 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=498175385 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=498177084 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=498177139 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=498177273 "Translator" by Spiller (risky sex) 9.5, 9, 9 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=512761483 "Gratitude " by Jedi Knight (sexual gratitude) 10, 9.5, 9.5 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=538041251 "LeAnn Rimes " by CasaDeNova (celebrity sex) 7, 5, 3 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=540339429 "The Penny Drops" by jcx (rash sex) 9, 8, 8 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=524935526 "High Beams II" by Mark Aster (sexy vignettes) 10, 8, 7 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=547005748 "A Touch of Cloves" by d137 (cheating the cheater) 9.5, 9, 9 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548624805 "A New Slave" by artie 10, 9.5, 9.5 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=539485577 "Furlong" by Jay (ponygirl) 8, 8, 9 ===================== Guest Reviews: ===================== "The Interview" by Maria Gonzales (Sex and blackmail). Fiddler: 7, 8, 7 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=523900025 "The Punishment" by Silverine (FF domination). Myers: NR http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=547309261 ===================== Reposted Reviews: ===================== * "Detention" by MD James (blackmailing a prude) 9, 9, 9 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=309350500. * "Valerie" by JS3729 (romance). DG: 8, 7, 7 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=423890770 * "For These Gifts" by Uther Pendragon (romance) 10,10, 10 * "Thanksgiving" by Tom (holiday orgy) 10, 10, 10 ===================== Here are the Reviews: ===================== "The Runner" by Sammie (Sammiestories@nospam.com). http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=541006416 The older man picks up a teenager runner in the hotel elevator, gets her to come to his room for a massage, and then has sex with her in several different ways. The problem with this story is that things "just happen." There's not really a good setup for any of the action. Ratings for "The Runner" Athena (technical quality): 7 Venus (plot & character): 6 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6 "Bad Girls" by MichaelD (MichaelD38@aol.com). http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=439901078 This is another old story that I have had on the back burner for a long time. I thought I had better hang onto it, because it looked good; and I was right. What we have here is a "tape" of the interview with a 15-year-old girl who has been using marijuana and having sex with the older man across the hall. The older guy is a graduate student; the mother is a heavy drinker who pretty much ignores her daughter; and the girl is a smart-ass teenager. In other words, it's pretty realistic. I'm sure lots of people will think this story is sexy. Personally, I thought it was poignant and sad. I guess I just have my values screwed up. The most unrealistic part of the story is the part about the guy being a graduate student in medieval English literature. People who study that sort of thing would be far too busy to have time to boink the teenager from across the hall. They get all the sex they want from their professors anyway. Ratings for "Bad Girls" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Behind the Curtain" by Ann Douglas (ann_douglas@hotmail.com) http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=517444559 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=517444599 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=517444636 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=517446543 For a person who manages to tell a good story with good character development and interesting non-sexual details, Ann Douglas certainly gets a lot of sex worked into this story. The basic plot consists of a young woman who has just been rewarded at work going out and looking for some fun with another woman. Along the way we get some retrospectives of past sexual activity and the suggestion of more to cum. However, the main action is some slightly kinky sex between the young woman and the mother of her old roommate. What I really like about most of Ann's stories – including this one – is the combination of normal life and ambivalence plus hot sexual action. Ratings for "Behind the Curtain" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Revealing Secrets" by losgud (lushgod@hotnomail.com). http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=497927216 The guy has a lovely and sexy wife, but she's not quite as great in the sack as she could be. Then her sister comes to visit, and the sister fills in the missing elements in the man's sex life. So the three form a team, and they fuck happily ever after. You're right. This theme has been used before, and it has a tendency to generate some lame stories. This one, however, was quite creative. The author throws in some humorous twists, innovative turns of phrase, and sexual scenarios that made me glad I dug this one out of my in-basket, where this story had been buried for over two months. I hope the author reposts this story. I certainly enjoyed it. Ratings for "Revealing Secrets" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "So Typical My Desires" by The Mr. Lee (themrlee@hotmail.com). http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=550540648 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=550540647 This story gives us some hot exhibitionism and voyeurism in a creative context. The narrator is a guy whose girlfriend has thrown a party that is being attended by a bunch of artsy people in whose company he takes little delight. With all due respect, they appear to be largely homosexual gentlemen who delight in exchanging jokes that make puns out of the names of Monet and Manet, whereas our narrator seems to be a more all-American boy with friends in lower places. So anyway, our hero starts feeling up his lady love while she is engrossed in conversation with the aforesaid gentlemen, and these others try to carry on as if they don't notice that he is dry-humping her. Soon, however, he and she are happily fucking like bunnies behind a partially closed door, while the others exchange Mapplethorpe innuendoes and try to eavesdrop without taking really obtrusive notes. The main flaw in this story is that the proofreading is really bad – as in omitted words and occasional piss poor grammar. But I still enjoyed this very short story immensely. Ratings for "So Typical My Desires" Athena (technical quality): 7 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Small Town Teens - Stacy" by Unknown Author (gitanostrings@yahoo.com) http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=538858846 This is a story about a fun-loving guy who likes to have fun with young girls. It's sort of a modern version of Chaucer's "Miller's Tale," only entirely different. In order to achieve an effect, sometimes an author writes with deliberately bad grammar. For example, the author may want to have the narrator/protagonist be a person who is extremely rough around the edges, who is describing his sexual adventures with teenage girls in a small town. Since such a person would not be likely to know a noun from a verb and would be much more interested in propositions than in prepositions, the author might choose to write from a first person perspective with deliberately fucked up grammar. That's what this author tries to do in this story. Writing this way is a formidable task, and almost all beginning authors who try to do it screw up very badly. My opinion is that this story comes off as chaotic and somewhat incoherent, but it's very close to being very good – the style, that is (whether or not you get off on stories about adults humping teenagers is a different question). As I have said before, a major problem with this style is that it's hard to know when the author is making a deliberate mistake to achieve a purpose or when he simply has his head temporarily up his ass. For example, when the narrator says he can "hear the footprints on the stairs," is he putting us on, or does he really mean to say "footsteps"? Anyway, the style is a 5 bordering on 10. I found the grammar to be a major irritation. But keep in mind that I usually pounce on stories about this theme. They're usually a mixture of immature drivel and the work of the devil. For me to give this story a couple of 8s, it must have something going for it. Ratings for "Stacy" Athena (technical quality): 5 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 "Jack and Stacie" by EroScribe (eroscribe@my-deja.com). http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=498172986 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=498175265 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=498175322 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=498175385 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=498177084 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=498177139 http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=498177273 The protagonist is a dirty old man who lusts after anything that has a pussy and isn't dead yet. With regard to the present story, that includes his teenage daughter, her best friend, the best friend's mother, and the odd passer-by. Near the beginning of the story the author tells us that Jack knows that if the girl decided that he had taken advantage of her (or for any trivial reason got pissed off at him) and told her mother, his life would most likely be ruined. Problems would be myriad: the affair would destroy his relationship with his daughter and reduce the chances that she would ever succeed in rocket science. Even if he avoided hard time with the gay gang bangers in the Big House, Jack would have to move to a new town and get a new job; and he would be classified as a registered sex offender. However, this information has no bearing whatsoever on the storyline. It just adds an element of danger; and it turns out that both girls dump him so that they can fuck each other anyway. In the end, he's left with the oversexed mother of the lovely 13-year-old he had been humping. There is a modicum of sex action in this story, but the plot and character development aren't really good enough to make this a story that I would recommend highly. So if you're serving ten to twenty for child sexual abuse and need some reading to fill your time, I'd suggest "Stacy," which I reviewed right before this story. Ratings for "Jack and Stacie " Athena (technical quality): 5 Venus (plot & character): 7 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5 "Translator" by Spiller (xxspillerxx@my-deja.com) . http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=512761483 The man has lost his job as a translator, but he manages to find part-time work translating for his wife's boss. The boss eventually asks him to translate some French porn stories, and he has some arousing sessions with the young damsel with whom he works. The best part of this story is the idea of two people fucking like bunnies while the people who can hear them in the next room think they are engaged in the serious work of translation. The main flaw in the story is that it's hard to understand why the guy wouldn't at least consider the possibility that his wife – whom he deeply loves and who got him the job and is one of the people in the next room – might object to the sex games he is playing with his co-worker. Ratings for "Translator" Athena (technical quality): 9.5 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 "Gratitude" by Jedi Knight (JediKnight@FarawayGalaxy.com). http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=538041251 The narrator is a cab driver who gives a young woman a quick ride to help her escape from an attempted rape. They don't get married and live happily ever after, but she does express her gratitude very nicely. Sometimes the good guys do get what's cumming to them. This is a simple but very nice story. Ratings for "Gratitude" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9.5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5 "LeAnn Rimes " by CasaDeNova (bill@microsoft.com) http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=540339429 My husband and I enjoy country-western music, and so I thought this story might be fun. It wasn't. The author just writes some silly sex fantasies that have no relationship at all to the persona of Lee Ann Rimes. Ratings for "LeAnn Rimes " Athena (technical quality): 7 Venus (plot & character): 5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 3 "The Penny Drops" by jcx (NOSPAMjcx100@hotmail.com). http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=524935526 This is an odd but creative story about a guy who has a nasty skin rash in a most private area. He must therefore refrain from active sex. The story consists of a series of telephone conversations between this man and his girlfriend, wherein they discuss and try to solve his problem. Reading this story as stroke material could be considered the apotheosis of irony. On the other hand, if you want romantic/humorous insights into a fairly common problem – and they actually do find a functional solution – you may want to take a look at this story. Ratings for "The Penny Drops" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 "High Beams II" by Mark Aster (MyFrThAl@aol.com) http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=547005748 This is a series of sexy vignettes. Instead of comprising a coherent story, they give the impression of taking us from one scene to another, as might happen if we looked out the window during a train ride through the Kingdom of Sex. Although I found it interesting, a major turnoff to some male readers will be the male-male sex in the final scene. Ratings for "High Beams II" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7 "A Touch of Cloves" by d137 (d137@my-deja.com). http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=548624805 The whole notion of bamboozling the bamboozler in sexual relationships must go back to antiquity. Certainly it appears in "The Canterbury Tales," and it reappears in this story. The wife and husband have shared fantasies about spouse watching, but they've never done it. However, hubby gets the wife to put on a blindfold; and while she thinks he's play-acting a strip show, the husband sneaks in a friend who sneaks it in, if you know what I mean . Through a clever ruse of her own, the wife discovers this chicanery and graciously retaliates with a resourceful and racy revenge. Near the beginning of the story, this author makes a mistake that many authors make. The problem is that the narrator, who certainly must already know the whole story, talks in the present tense of the indicative mood. For example, he concludes the introductory part with The specific problem is that the reader has a right to assume that the narrator (fictional though he may be) is telling the truth. Since the present tense of the indicative mood is supposed to indicate fact in the present time, and the present time at that moment in the narrator's mind is after the story (because he already knows the story that he is going to tell), this verb usage is illogical. There are several ways to solve this problem. Most simply, the main verbs could simply go into the past tense and the anticipated action into the subjunctive. That way, the narrator (now) would be talking about what he knew then (before the episode took place). In spite of that flaw, this was a very nice story with a playful but complex revenge theme. Ratings for "A Touch of Cloves" Athena (technical quality): 9.5 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 "A New Slave" by artie (artie@netgate.net) http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=539485577 The man is breaking in a new slave. As I was reading this story, I said to myself, "Somebody ought to do something about these guys who think they can just humiliate and enslave attractive women for their own gratification." And my wish was the author's command. This was one of the nicer sex slavery stories I have read in a long time. Ratings for "A New Slave" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9.5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5 "Furlong" by Jay (anchor987@hotmail.com) This story held my interest, because I have often wondered what a ponygirl story was. Now I think I know. A ponygirl is a woman who has a sexual fantasy to be trained as a horse, or rather as a pony. Go figure. They enjoy being beaten and trained, and they stare off sort of blankly into space. I think I have several students in my class right now who fit this description. They don't have the bit between the jaws and blinders on each side of the head, and I don't beat them in any non-metaphorical sense, but they make up for it by staring blankly into space real well. The unique feature of this story is that the narrator sneaks into the stable and fucks a ponygirl from behind while she is hanging from a beam and (of course) staring blankly into space. Then he gets lassoed and captured. I was kind of left hanging and staring off into space at the end. Maybe this was a hypnosis story. Maybe I have become a ponygirl. What's that funny feeling in my ass? Ratings for "Furlong" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 ===================== Guest Reviews: ===================== "The Interview" by Maria Gonzales (maria1971@aol.com). "The Reviewed by Fiddler. Apologies to both Celeste and Maria for the month delay in this review. Yolanda Garcia, cub reporter, tries to find the real story behind the retirement of football star Billy Zatcher. They fuck, and Yolanda gets the story. But Billy gets the tape of their dalliance. This is a stroke story with a little plot for icing. The version I saw hadn't been proofread. Ratings for "The Interview" Athena (technical quality): 7 Venus (plot & character): 8 Fiddler (appeal to this reviewer): 7 "The Punishment" by Silverine ( asinine@antisocial.com) This is a great FF dom story, and it really shows through that the author put a lot of effort into writing this piece. This story explores the familiar ground of the torture of pleasure allowed only at the Master's pace. While other stories of this type might be suited to either MF or FF by simply changing a few things here or there, this story is particularly geared toward a plot that only really works as an FF design. I should pay a substantial compliment toward the author's attention to things which highlight nuances that would not be present in an MF story. The reasons for the punishment received in the story are very much secondary, as they often are in these settings. The subject has forgotten to address the Master properly. Oops! Well I guess that means we have to do something about it. Our helpless narrator isn't too good at playing along just yet, because she is new to the ways of BnD. The story does end rather abruptly, as if the author decided that it would be too much to sustain the moment in trying to give it a full resolution, and so chose to leave things very open ended. It feels a little like a cop out, but it's pretty minor. It won't disturb most readers, I suspect. Hopefully we'll see more and it will make up the gap anyway... ===================== Reposted Reviews: ===================== * "Detention" by MD James (d2beast@aol.com). Ms. Jay is that polygon of evil - er, paragon, I guess - the prudish English teacher who comes down hard on innocent teenagers but inside is a boiling cauldron of illicit lust. Ms. Jay inflicts one too many detentions on Our Hero, and he really sticks it to her. It seems Ms. Jay has been boinking a City Councilman. Our Hero has obtained evidence of this and uses that information to blackmail, humiliate, and generally enjoy Ms Jay before he gives her a stern warning and sends her on her way. I normally don't approve of these things, but with prudish English teachers or librarians, anything goes! The author makes some minor but annoying mistakes in verb tenses and in spelling. He obviously ran a spellcheck, which missed a few spelling errors (e.g., "throws of passion" for "throes of passion") and which brought to mind the following poem: * "Valerie" by JS3729 (JS3729@mindspring.com). Guest review by DG (DG@newsguy.com) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?423890770 This is a long and ultimately unsatisfying story about a middle-aged man who returns to the small town where he grew up after the death of his wife. He expects to lead a quiet life, but he runs into his wife's sister, who was his old flame in high school, and things quickly take off from there. This is actually a rather promising premise, and there are some good ideas in this story. Unfortunately, the quality of the writing is not up to the demands of the plot. The dialogue is stiff, with the sort of long, unrealistic monologues that you often get on soap operas: designed to impart information rather than reflect natural speech patterns. The characters go through many emotional "big moments" and these never resonated with me because the characters themselves never became real. I would encourage the author to continue writing, but to try completing some shorter, less complicated stories while polishing his technique. Ratings for "Valerie": Technical: 8 Plot and Character: 7 Appeal to DG: 7 * "For These Gifts" by Uther Pendragon (anon584c@nyx.net). It's Thanksgiving break at Bob and Jeanette Brennan's house, and it's time for games. These "games" are choices of sexual behavior, new positions on the days when he chooses, mostly old ones when she makes the choice. In fact, she called her first game "Missionary." Tonight she has a genuine need for Bob to "be gentle"; and so they play Cherish, which is actually a variation of Missionary. Compared to some of the scenarios we see in this newsgroup, this sexual activity is no big thing - but a very nice no big thing. For Bob's turn they make love sitting down - and standing up. Between the two games, this story even includes a prayer - in fact, the title refers to the prayer that people often say on Thanksgiving, when they give thanks for the gifts they have received during the past year. What I like about this series of stories is that the lovers are intelligent but ordinary people. Bob is going to school (majoring in history) and Jeanette is working full time to make Bob's academic career possible. They are looking forward to a happy future, but they are also trying to enjoy a happy present. They sometimes have riotous sex, but it's in the perspective of a full life. Another way to say this is that a typical episode in this series is like three or four Dulcinea stories cohesively joined together. Ratings for "For These Gifts" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * Thanksgiving" by Tom (laddie@anon.nymserver.com). Ann is a mild mannered former toxicologist who is now a dance therapist and active member of the local PTA. She has a great ass and a pussy whose fragrance automatically generates erotic thoughts, even when one's face is not nicely nuzzled where it fits best. She is married to Tom, the narrator of the story, a handsome chap who is a journalist. Jerry, a brilliant scholar and sexy lawyer, was the narrator's closest friend in college and has become like a brother-in-law to Ann. The kids have gone away for Thanksgiving, and Jerry is visiting the couple for Thanksgiving and has brought with him Sue, a professional masseuse who is at least as attractive as Ann. I can identify with these people. The story opens with Ann and Sue walking ahead of the guys on the beach, gently swaying their cute little asses. (I hope that misplaced modifier aroused you as much as it did me.) From this point you can probably guess at least the general outline of the rest of the story; but the tale is delightfully told, and the fact that you can guess what's going to happen will not diminish your enjoyment of this story. And besides, there are some surprises. Now I have a confession to make - two confessions actually. Although I write these reviews and have become a bit of an expert or at least a connoisseur of sexual acrobatics, I have never engaged in an orgy and probably never will. My husband and I both understand the intense stimulation and sense of freedom that would be present if we did it with another couple, but we also see the value of the one-to-one intimacy that we share and don't want to do anything to risk losing this. Nevertheless, I really enjoy picturing in my mind stories like this - even while I am making love to my husband Which brings me to my second confession. Between the first and second paragraphs of this review, I field tested this story. I can now verify (1) that it is possible to come to mutual orgasm with a spouse by relating the basic events of this story by the fireplace - although it may be necessary to alter the plot to include a bank teller; and (2) that a focus on one part of this story seems to greatly increase the probability that the male partner will have a roaring second orgasm. Go figure! As I was reading this story, I couldn't help thinking that it reminded me of several of the stories written by SueNH. This is ironic; but you'll have to read the whole story and be at least remotely familiar with the writings of Sue to see the reason for this irony. I really enjoyed this story - and so did my husband, even though he hasn't had time to read it yet. Ratings for "Thanksgiving" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 -- If you enjoyed this work, take a moment to email the author. Your comments are their only payment. 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