Message-ID: <19337eli$9901250527@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com Subject: The Annex Reviews, 1/25/99 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-transfer-encoding: 7bit Content-type: text/plain; charset=US-ASCII Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: X-Original-Message-ID: <1f2560d1.36abdbcb@aol.com> X-Is-Review: yes Hi there. Here's some more reviews on the latest stories I've found of interest. I am also pleased to say The Lady Cyrrh website has been mentioned in "Hot Off the Net: Erotica and Other Sex Writings from the Internet," a compilation of erotic poems and stories published by Black Books. The official website for the book is http://www.mindpollen.com/hotn and it, as well as many other things these days, can be ordered from Amazon.com. It just keeps getting bigger and bigger... Among other news, the ASSTR server is going to be down for a month or so due to server problems, and the BitBard site will be down for the near future as well. Is anyone up to filling the gap? The BDSM and Treksmut communities have well-organized, stable, server sites, I can't see why the folks in ASS can't too. I also would like to reiterate my policy for website listings on my links page. Such sites must be noncommercial or semicommercial, semicommercial meaning the page is out to sell you something (a book, fetish gear, the services of a dominatrix, etc.) but that there is also plenty of *interesting, quality* fiction available there for free to balance out the sins of X-rated commercialism. Sorry, including one or two sorry stories doesn't cut it. Neither do I list sites of the "Hi, I'm Mary Sue Smith from Tulsa Oklahoma and here are photos of my cats, some Garth Brooks tunes, and my erotic stories--" the said erotic stories reading exactly the same as hundreds of other people's erotic stories. Quality, originality, and sincere attempts at writing only, please. The stories: Zhentilar Boys, by The Storyteller (M/b, fantasy) Cthrag Drusta, by PJ Jurado and Lady Vanessa (M/F, inc, fantasy, Belgariad fanfic) Picard in the Garden, by Ascem Noone (M/M, Trek, slash, SF, Jesus) Story by Skayda Lee (Tarnished), by Skayda Lee (M/F, rape, fantasy) Didi on the Cross, by Tarquinius Rex (M/F, BDSM, historical) The Secret Side of the Street, Part One, by Hyne T'hcalla (F mast, M/M/F, Street Fighter fanfic) Zhentilar Boys [A/A-] Where posted: ASSGM When posted: 1/8/99 Author: The Storyteller Address: mail@boytales.com Website: http://www.boytales.com Cthrag Drusta [A-] Where posted: ASS When posted: 1/18/99 Author: PJ Jurado and Lady Vanessa Address: hiflame77@aol.com I'd estimate there are over 100,000 pieces of fanfiction available on the web today. Most are related to TV shows and movies. But there is also a rapidly growing subgenre of fanfics based on fantasy novel series, of which the following two stories are an example. "Zhentilar" is based on the Forgotten Realms, an imaginary kingdom under copyright to TSR, Inc. to serve as a setting for role-playing adventures, though it has spawned many novelizations as well. The story follows the adventures of a slave trader on a mission to the northern lands to pick up some special merchandise, namely well-trained prepubescent boys and girls. Though the story used the background of the TSR novels the writer brought his own spin to it--the slave trader turns out to be not such a bad guy after all; he's only doing his job and soon develops an affectionate relationship with two of his purchases, both boys. Likewise, the slave auction he attends seems to have been based on historical accounts from the ancient world, for the kids wear Egyptian makeup, skimpy tunics, and perform a near Eastern belly dance, resulting in a fairly interesting hybrid between the "canon" world and the writer's personal interpretation of it. He also avoids the stilted language and blandness that keep the books rated PG. PJ Jurado, on the other hand, specializes in fantasy novel fanfic and has developed the knack of copying the authors' style so closely I honestly can't tell the non-sexual parts of his writing from the non-sexual parts of the original book. This is both good and bad. Good, because it allows for a smooth bridge between the original and the imitation; and bad, because the usual writing style is overly bland and none of the imitator's own particular personality shines through. "Cthrag" is based on the Belgariad series of books by David Eddings and picks up at the end of the last book after Garion has married Princess Ce'Nedra and settled down. They are experiencing sexual difficulties and Garion goes to his aunt, the beautiful sorceress Polgara, for advice, but a malign power soon takes over their minds and they wind up fucking each other. The Princess witnesses and runs out in tears. Jurado copies Edding's writing style very well, but when the characters start having sex they stop being the particular characters fans of the series know and love and turn into the generic fuck-puppets that populate every other mind control story on the net. This is too bad, because if the author had held them in character the spoof could have been wicked and witty instead of just wooden. Picard in the Garden, Parts One and Two [A] Where posted: ASCEM When posted: 1/13/99 Author: Ascem Noone Address: ascemnoone@yahoo.com On we head into the sleek high-gloss corridors of Treksmut, where writers have been happily slashing the straightlaced members of Starfleet for over thirty years now. Treksmut writers like to challenge themselves by writing unlikely sexual pairings between the various shows' characters, and in this story Noone has taken up the ultimate gauntlet, namely a sexual encounter between Capt. Picard and Jesus Christ, courtesy the magic of time travel. This idea may be a sacrilegious one to some, but the author meant it quite sincerely; whether or not he or she also took it seriously is another story. Like most slash it was written to play on the emotions and personalities rather than gonads, in this part for example: He leaned close, nuzzling at Jesus' cheek before gently kissing his mouth. One hand came up to cup his face as the other one pulled him close. To his delight, Jesus kissed beautifully, melting against Picard's body as his mouth opened wide. After a few minutes Jean-Luc reached under Jesus' robe and ran a hand up his muscular thigh. He tried to keep his touch soft and comforting, but Jesus moaned deep in his throat and opened his legs wider, giving Jean- Luc access. Did I take the story seriously? No, but I don't take anything related to Star Trek seriously. Story by Skayda Lee (Tarnished) [A-] Where posted: ASS When posted: 1/13/99 Author: Skayda Lee Address: "Shawn Ricardo King"@ior.com This story wasn't so much erotica as genre fantasy with sexual undertones. In a world that's a mixture of contemporary earth and Fairyland an elf and a nymph frolic around; the nymph is gang-raped when the elf steps away for a minute (the rape is not shown) and when the elf returns she is dying of the violation, literally fading away before his eyes. He grieves, but in her last moments she sends him a message that they will again be together one day. There wasn't any sex in this story, only some lightly risque frolicking, so I'm kind of puzzled as to why it was put on the newsgroup at all. However, it was a good workout in the fantasy genre with a few amusing elements such as the vomit-sprites that are born from people's barf...though it was ultimately too lightweight to work as a story in the usual sense. The Secret Side of the Streets [B+/B] Where posted: ASS When posted: 1/19/99 Author: Hyne T'hcalla Address: hyne-thcalla@rocketmail.com Here's yet another kind of fanfic, based on a video game this time. This truly puzzles me. How can people get so attached to those blocky, jerky little figures that periodically die in horribly gory ways, and neither speak or evince any sort of personality? (To be fair, I believe there may be a Street Fighter movie and/or TV series out there, but I'm not sure.) Anyway, Chun Li, the female kick- boxer on a secret mission, fantasizes about the two male opponents who defeated her in a recent tournament, Ryu and Ken. But instead of kicking their nabs in she's taking them in tandem, and masturbating herself as the fantasy unfolds. This was basically an OK story; how much you like it would depend on how much you like the video game/TV show/movie/whatever. The writer writes well, with the caveat that nothing happens in the story that would challenge his or her writing skills very much, and the sex acts were on the generic side and of the kind men like to imagine as being basic nature to beautiful, sexually skilled females, namely a cum-hunger so strong they orgasm from cocksucking alone. There's something insulting in a conceit like that. Didi on the Cross [A] Where posted: ASSB When posted: 1/17/99 Author: Tarquinius Rex Address: tarquinius@my-dejanews.com The ancient world was a tough on crime, as the author of this story reports: "The events detailed here occurred about 30 CE in the city of Rome." Didi, an ex-slave (female) is convicted in a plot to impersonate a god, and is crucified with weighted fishooks on her nipples, nails through her wrists and ankles, and her legs spread wide so everyone can take a good look at her goods: Your gaze focuses on your sex, never before seen in public, and you notice how the spreading of your knees opens the pink interior of your pussy, letting the hot intense sunlight sear it like raw meat tossed on a heated grill. Runny white semen slowly oozes from your open pussy down your spread-open crack and onto the probing horn in your asshole. You gaze, in hypnotic transfixed wonder, at your clitoris, publicly displayed for all to see. You try in vain to flex something in rhythm, trying to match body movements in unison with the shocked waves of shameful sensations flooding that prominent and throbbing button of nerves. Definitely not for the squeamish, though the historical tone lends a certain amount of distance. Visceral and haunting, recommended for BDSM fans. Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh -- +----------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `--------------+ | | | | Archive site +----------------------+--------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | ----