Message-ID: <8463eli$9802141653@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com Subject: The Annex Reviews, 2/14/98 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-transfer-encoding: 7bit Content-type: text/plain; charset=US-ASCII Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: X-Original-Message-ID: <8768b5f0.34e5f593@aol.com> X-Is-Review: yes Happy Valentine's Day everyone. Make sure you give your loved one something nice. Lady Cyrrh could do with something nice, as her SO is no longer around. Maybe a hot new website listing or something. Last week I was complaining about the XXX-rated banners that some sites have been using. The ASSGM archive site has thought of a clever way to abuse this visual spam. All visitors to the archive are asked to click once on the banner to give it a hit, then click back to the archive, with the advertiser being none the wiser, I suppose. Not too bright if they're counting hits as the measure of advertising success and not sales figures. Make no bones (or boners) about it though. I'd still rather see a banner for a Horizon card or USWest than someone's twat. Also, the chocolate box gif award is still available to anyone I've ever given an A+ story rating to. Created just in time for Valentine's Day, these luscious chocolates may be seen on my website (http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh) as a black and white gif. The official award is in 256 color, and it is quite gorgeous. You have to email me for it; it doesn't come automatically. This award is meant in goodwill and humor, like the "Pick of the Day" stickers you see on so many websites, and a fun way to brighten up your website. I don't mean to discourage writers or pit them against each other. If anyone thinks I am, tell me about, and the sticker will disappear *pronto.* The stories: Lord Kinzuburo's Gift, by D.G. Ross (M/m, bond.) Waiting, by MD (M/F, mast.) Tease: A Lesson in Understanding, by Myschief (MM/F, cons, light D/S) Kinky Elvis, by Sydb (humor) Sue's 9th: Slippery When Wet, by Sue NewHamp (M+F, Jacuzzi) Saucy Wench #4: Trick or Treat, by Saucy Wench (F/F, F/M, Halloween) Milkmaid, by Joy Paine (M/F abduction/rape) Lord Kinzuburo's Gift [A-] When posted: 2/7/98 Where posted: ASSG Author: D.G. Ross Address: duster_15@hotmail.com A poet in Medieval Japan receives a special gift from his Lord, and is surprised to find out it's a young boy. The kid dances for him and for encore wheels out an elaborate bondage-chair device, into which he coaxes the poet. Once Buto-san is strapped in, the adventures begin. This is the first part of a multi-part series, so more shenanigans are planned. This story was both elegantly historical and amusing at the same time, no mean feat. For example, the poet, in the manner of 14th century Japanese poets, is fond of creating spur-of-the-moment haikus to describe his reactions: The slave captures his master. O, strange night! Night of agony and smiles! The other historical detail was well done also and seemed authentic, and the tone was good-natured without overdoing the kink aspect. The author wants to know if there is enough reader interest to continue "translating this ancient classic of lust, bondage, and forbidden pleasure." I vote yes. Waiting [B/B+] When received: 2/1/98 Author: MD Address: mmd@efn.org A long-time couple are separated by a family emergency and begin to long for each other. They talk on the phone, and a discussion ensures about sex. "Is that all you men think about?" Lisa says, to which Jake replies, "Oh, so you don't miss sex?" Rather indignant by now, Lisa replies "Sex is not that important. It's you I miss. Sex I can do without." Unfortunately, a few paragraphs later she contradicts herself by revealing she masturbates three or four times a week, and the bet the two later make--Jake will be her slave for a day if she can avoid jerking off for a week--seems groundless because of it. It also seemed out of character for her to put him in a dog collar and leash when she wins the bet, as she wasn't built up as a kinky sort. However, if you can swallow these goofs, the story contained some nice female masturbation scenes. If the characterization had been better, I might have rated it higher. Tease: A Lesson in Understanding [B+] When posted: 2/8/98 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: Myschief Address: myschief@aol.com The narrator and her boyfriend AJ spend all day lying around the pool, then decide to have sex in the shower. However, she gets a surprise when he invites a friend to join him. They have sex together (no double penetration). Afterwards, AJ is sore because the narrator attended the friend's orgasm without giving him one, too. So, he disciplines her by spanking her lightly, and forcing her submit, then punishes her further by getting her horny and masturbating on top of her. Hmm, not much of a punishment to me. This was an OK story, marred only by vague motivations on the part of the narrator and her friends; they almost became real people to me, but not quite. If this author gets the knack of coming up with an interesting plot and well-rounded characters to go along with the sex, he or she would be someone to watch. Kinky Elvis [B+] When posted: 1/7/98 Where posted: SSBB Author: sydb Address: sydb@twd.net A film critic specializing in 60s cinema called Elvis Presley musicals the most genial movies ever made. No one gets hurt, Elvis sings his troubles away, and everyone has a good time. In this short humor piece, the lyrics of well-known Elvis songs are rewritten to reflect various sexual fetishes: You know I can be found, sitting home all alone tied to a chair, can't reach the telephone Please be cruel to a sub that's true Baby, if I made you mad for something I might have said Please, let me make amends, take the spankings ahead Please be cruel to a sub that's true. This humor probably didn't take too much time and thought to write, but it was genial, amusing, and didn't tax your brain too much. Just like an Elvis movie. (My favorite is "Viva Las Vegas.") Sue's 9th: Slippery When Wet [B-] When posted: 2/13/98 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: SueNewHamp Address: suenewhamp@aol.com I've got a big bias against stories written in 2nd person voice. The only writers that do them well are Adrian Hunter and Dulcinea, and Dulcinea is a special case. Her stories are acceptable to me because they don't really try to be stories. They're more like ad copy, cute, quick little snippets designed to get you horny or maybe read out loud to someone you want to make horny...like the sorta blurb you might find on a t-card attached to a pair of Victoria's Secret silk panties suggesting various sexual fantasies to have while wearing them. The tone is soft-focus, with vague interruptions of ....s which you can imagine are filled in with steamy feminine exhalations. (One of these days, I'll get around to reviewing one.) That said, this story didn't work for me because it tried to be a real story, or rather a shared fantasy where the narrator tells the unnamed male "you" everything he thinks, feels, says, and does to her, and the tone was pretty idiotic at times: "You have obviously been talking to your friend George about some of our fantasies of the big Jacuzzi, because he has offered you a favor. " When and where on earth would a normal person speak in tenses like this, using this kind of address? The plot of that follows is a standard one: the narrator and the man sneak into the extra-large Jacuzzi of a college gym and have sex, then the man permits the three college kids who sneak in after them to have sex with narrator as if she doesn't have a mind of her own. The story was pretty porny, with lots of descriptions of dripping pre-come and cunts and cunt hairs, and suffered from the "Danger! Will Robinson" syndrome where acts are described in precisely modulated robot speech: "But I could feel the moisture in my crotch all afternoon and evening, and after many hours of being a little high on the anticipation, I know that the flesh of my cunt has become swollen and sensitive, and that my clitoris has puffed up and pushed out from the lips of my cunt, so that I could even feel it rubbing against the silk of my panties as I walked." Yes, I know this is what is known as a "stroke" story; it's not meant to have scintillating prose or realistic plots or characters you feel for. But I've enjoyed stroke stories in the past, like the overheated Jayant Lund Indian tales, while this story just seemed out of whack. The addition of the college boys redeemed it a bit for me, but not by much. Saucy Wench #3: Trick or Treat [A+] When posted: 2/13/98 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: Saucy Wench Address: WenchSaucy@aol.com This Saucy Wench tale was a real treat. The unapologetically bi narrator goes to a Halloween party with her girlfriend where all sorts of hijinks occur: sex with a female devil in the bathroom and a male Robin Hood in the cellar; a blowjob to a scarecrow in a pick-up truck; and a doggy-style encounter with Boba Fett, interspersed with apple-bobbing, scary stories, and dancing. Each encounter was headed with an amusing header derived from a well-known quote: 11:30PM, HOW ABOUT A LITTLE FIRE, SCARECROW? (OR, SUCKING THE STRAW). Afterwards, the narrator trades amusing quips with her lovers, such as this one (the pair have been fucking in the utility shed): "What's your name?" I asked. "John." he replied. "Thanks, John, dear." I said, as I climbed off the tractor. What I really enjoyed about this story, however, was that the sex was lighthearted yet realistic (condoms are used) and everyone has a great time without feeling guilty or exploiting each other, and each encounter had its own individual flavor. I noticed his writer posts frequently, but they've always been the same 5 tales. Here's to hoping she writes more, or puts together a creative website. Milkmaid [A] When posted: 2/13/98 Where posted: ASSM Author: Joy Paine Like "Slippery When Wet" this story was strictly a fantasy. However, the POV of it was handled a lot better. The presumably young, high school virgin narrator is telling her story to us, and that story is what happens when her friend tricks her into becoming part of the "herd"--a group of blackmailed sex slaves maintained for the use of the local men. She is raped, out into bondage, threatened with pregnancy, and trained sexually. My feeling is probably more women than men would enjoy this story. The tone was straightforward, and though the poor heroine does not enjoy what is being to her, her pain and disgust were soft-pedaled, so that someone reading the narrative could imagine the acts and imagine them being done to her, and become aroused without dwelling too much on realism or violence. So, as a female rape fantasy this was pretty good. No milking or milkmaids in it, though. 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