Message-ID: <7995eli$9802011544@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: From: Celeste801@aol.com Subject: Piper's Favorite Stories Reviews 3/3 (M-Z) Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-transfer-encoding: 7bit Content-type: text/plain; charset=US-ASCII Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: X-Original-Message-ID: <7726ce6b.34d35804@aol.com> X-Is-Review: yes Piper's favorite stories list - reviews 3/3 (M-Z) January, 1998 Here's my reviews, or to be more accurate, my short summaries of the stories. I won't bother rating them, since I like all of them (nach!). Story codes included, if the copy I have has them. ... Piper Marnie's Day on the Sandbar - Caesar (21k) (Mf) Caesar and Marnie have a picnic on a tiny, sandy island well away from any prying eyes. Especially the prying eyes of his friends, who are enjoying Caesar's hospitality while staying on his boat. That's why they went to the island. You see, they hadn't had any private time to themselves, so they hadn't had any time to play their little games. Now, Marnie is a slave, and her chosen master is Caesar. When they are alone, they do normal master/slave type stuff. Like go for a swim. Collect up seaweed, firewood, and clams. Have a picnic. What, don't you think this is normal master/slave stuff? Sure it is, as long as you realize the swimming is nude, there's a blowjob on the way to the sandbar, another one after the swim, and some heavy duty fucking an appropriate time after their light lunch. No, Caesar isn't into heavy bondage, humiliation, or pain. Neither is Marnie. She loves the freedom of being told to be sexy and generous with her charms, at least with him. He loves the control, and having a pretty young woman around who is always horny and willing to follow his every (almost) command. Sexy, fun-loving, warm, and light. Those words pretty much describe what this story is all about. Mind Snatchers - Simon Bar Sinister (150k) (mc mf ff) CR 174 10,10,10 In a scifi story, anything can happen. After all, aliens, with their super-advanced technology and mental powers, can do things that look like magic to us simple humans. Enter two aliens, Dave and, uh, Dave. They are visiting the earth to collect women, plain and simple. Using a fancy ray gun, they turn women into slaves that want nothing more than to serve their masters. Their master is the first male to touch them, as long as it's within a certain time limit. Otherwise, the ray wears off. Of course, this is a story with a twist. A few twists, actually. One of them is the aliens endowment, or lack thereof. And did you know that almost all aliens speak English with a British accent? Just like on an early British scifi show. Also, almost all aliens are bipedal humanoids who are sexually compatable, just like on an early American scifi show. There's plot. The woman they kidnap has a boyfriend, and he swears to get her back regardless of what he has to do. There's another alien, a woman, who's entire planet (all women, no men) was taken over. She's tracking down the first aliens. He ends up with his own slave, despite not wanting one. There are space chases and foot races. There are really bad actors and sight gags. And, of course, many beautiful alien women slaves. If you want to read a scifi/mc/space alien story with a tongue in cheek attitude, try this one. Month - Deirdre (36k) (mf) CR 135 10,10,10 Deirdre writes stories about unusual situations, unusual people, or unusual activities. This one is about all of the above, plus a giant, invisible, very rich association of hedonists. Here's the deal. A beautiful, successful international model is offered ten million dollars for a month's work. No questions are to be asked, no harm will be done to her, and her reputation will not be smirched. Initially, she thinks it's a joke, so she counters with a demand for fifty million. The unnamed party agrees. Fifty million, for a month's work. Two hundred million if there is any harm done to her or her reputation. A reputable firm represents them. It must be a joke, right? No sane person would take up an offer like that, right? Well, she does. Why? Not even she really knows why. You'll have to read the story to find out why she gives back the money. My Friends the Allens - Mark Aster (many stories) Many CR's 10,10,10, Annex 10/12/97 A I'll preface this review with the author's preface of his stories. <> MyFrThAl is a series of tales about Pat, Julie, an unnamed male narrator, and a bunch of their friends and relatives. Pat and Julie are sisters, with Pat being the older one. She and the narrator meet and fall in love. Eventually, they get married, and have twins. Simple. Sweet. Oh, right. In the MyFrThAl world, hedonism is the rule, not the exception. Pat, Julie, and the narrator enjoy a lot of things together, including sharing the same bed at times. Or, for variety, any combination of two of the three. Or, for even more variety, they join in various combinations with friends, other relatives, acquaintances, and sometimes even total strangers. Kinda neat stuff. Before you start thinking that this is just a simple fuckfest, all of the stories are sensitive, character-revealing, and emotionally uplifting. They both enrich the soul and warm the libido. They also fire the imagination. My favorite MyFrThAl friend? Her name is Mike. She wears a t-shirt with the words "DYKE CROSSING" scrawled on it. That's also the name of the episode. I believe the author now has more than 70 stories in this series. My Sister Jean - BillyG (345k) (m/f,cons,inc) CR 202 9,10,10 I'm sure there are lots of perve..., uh, people out there who saw the word "incest" in the story description and downloaded it strictly in the hope of finding a couple (or more) of family members doing the nasty. You know, like in Frank McCoy's stories. Or Tiffany's. Or even Michael K. Smith's. Not here, I'm not sorry to say. At least, not in the first 19 chapters. (Insert - picture of some overgrown pimply-faced no-longer-adolescent guy sitting down, hunched over, with his nose six inches from the monitor and drool running down from his open mouth and dripping off his chin into his keyboard). The author sent Celeste a copy of chapter 19, asking her to review it, even though he "knows" (and explains in his letter) it's not really her thing. Incest, that is. Nor is reviewing incomplete stories (one chapter out of many, with maybe one, maybe several, left to come). However, since Celeste is usually quite acommodating, but is currently rather overburdened with getting the new school year off to a flying start, she passed the baton to me . Hey Billy. You ready for this? He-he-he. Unknown to Celeste (obviously), I've already read all 19 chapters (I guess she knows now!). It's going to be difficult writing about _only_ the latest one. So, what the heck. I'll write about the latest chapter _and_ about the whole thing. Hey, this is actually a good story - let me emphasize *story* - about two relatively normal kids growing up. One is a typical over-hormoned teenage guy with a lust for anything vaguely feminine. The other one is his equally libidinous but much more controlled fox of a sister. The guy has a panty fetish, by the way. That's how his sister first caught him; he was sniffing around in the clothes hamper. Over the course of time, they develop a code of honor, and start some low- grade experimentation with each other. Like exposure. Touching. Things like that. They don't _do the nasty_ right away. All the previous chapters explore different situations, how they deal with each other's wants and desires, and dig into how they feel about each other, the rest of the family, and the world at large. This is fun stuff! Richly detailed, imaginative, and engrossing. The author even manages to pull off using "natural" language in his conversations without getting stilted or slangy. Chapter 19 takes place on Little Caymen (Island). There's lots of innuendo, sexy talk, some emotional bits, gameplay, and a bit of mental manipulation. And some scuba diving. And a very pretty (slightly older) dive master. This isn't the kind of stuff to get you off. However, it is the kind of stuff that will make you go look for your spouse (or whomever) to help you get off. Titillation. That's the word I'm looking for. The almost-done deed. But, despite the author's claim that this chapter stands up well on its own, it doesn't. Not really. This chapter is a continuation of the previous chapter and a setup for the next one(s). Also, if I had read this chapter without knowing any of the previous history of these characters, it would have been impossible to understand the reasoning behind some of their conversations and actions. Like who Ian and Jan are. And the "sex agreement" the two siblings have. It isn't explained in this segment. Of course, the easy fix is to read all of the chapters in order. One thing I will suggest to BillyG is that, unless he's purposefully trying to leave in those amateurish little mistakes, that he either go over the story carefully a second (or third) time, or get himself hooked up with a proofreader. Spell-checking alone just doesn't cut it. In several spots, missing or misused words really derailed the story flow. (Yeah, I know, we're getting pickier and pickier around here about them dang homonyms and missing bits of sentence structure. Life's a beach. And then you diet. Or is it the other way around?) Paying For It - J Boswell (42k) CR 202 9.5,9,10 If you're at all familiar with Boswell's other works, you know that he mainly writes hot-wife/slut-wife stories, where the wife suddenly discovers a deeply buried craving to have numerous large cocks deeply buried in her various orifices. This is a rather good variant on the usual theme. First off, Tim and Jessie (the narrator) are a happily married two-income yuppie couple with 2 cars, a townhouse in the 'burbs, and no kids. They've been together for years, and she has never cheated on him. One day, Jessie is in a rush to go see some old friends, and she's short of cash. Rather than taking time out to find a bank machine, she asks her hubby for some money. "How badly do you need this cash?" the horny hunk asks as a joke. He gets his answer when she whips out his cock and sucks him dry on the spot. That gets her all hot and bothered too, but she heads off to see her friends anyway, with her newly-earned cash in hand. That's the start of a developing play theme for the two of them, with her acting as his personal hooker. Any money she gets, whether for herself or for the house, she has to earn. On the flip side, if he wants any, he has to pay. They both like the fantasy, in and out of the house, and it leads to some really hot times in various exotic locales, like the front seat of his car in the mall parking lot, and a local hooker hangout. All right. No problem so far. Just a 'normal' couple with a rather well- developed fantasy life. So where's the "Boswellian" part of the story? That comes when hubby heads off on a business tour and leaves wifey high and dry, without relief and without fantasy play, for six whole weeks. Jessie can't take that! No woman starring in a Boswell story could! "Just one time," I imagine her muttering to herself. "Nobody will ever know. I'll dress up a little classy, head down to the sleaze bar, and hang out a bit. Nothing will happen. I can control myself. Really! Just one little drink, and then back home again." Yeah, right. Those words fit right in with "Just one more smoke and then I'll quit," or "Don't worry, baby, I'll pull out," or "You can't get pregnant the first time." So what happens when hubby finally gets home from his business trip? If you know the genre, you know the answer. I like this story. It's hot, it's fairly imaginative, and it has a good build-up to an inevitable (at least, for Boswell) conclusion. It's also a revamped version of the original, with most of the writing errors eliminated and the dialog and plot smoothed out. While there are still a few minor gaffs, they can be ignored. You don't have to be a fan of slut-wife tales to enjoy this story. Peer Pressure - Wollstonecraft (15k) (m/f) CR 93 10,10,10 In this story, Terri is on her first date in six months. Back then, she was a new arrival in school, and when her date tried to fondle her breasts, she screamed bloody murder. That's what all the girls did in her old school. However, according to her girlfriend, that's not what girls do in this school. Here, the girls let the boys take control, and do whatever they want. Since doing it her own way left her in a six month dateless drought, she decides to follow her girlfriend's advice. Bobby is the surprised and delighted young man who benefits from Terri's new attitude. During their date, she puts up no resistance to his advances. Being a horny young teen with raging hormones, he takes full advantage of her acquiescence. This story is about the dichotomy between her thoughts, and her words and actions. It also tells of her new popularity, and the not unexpected results of such irresponsible behavior. Yes, she was irresponsible, the same as he was. Neither gave any thought to the consequences beforehand, or took any kind of precautions. In this day and age, that is very much irresponsible. For most teenagers, especially teenage girls, the drive to be popular and accepted by their peers is a very powerful thing. Such a drive can sometimes lead to people doing things against their better judgement. In fact, sometimes they will do things that go against their moral fiber. Such actions do, occasionally, produce unwanted results. The author combines a moral message and some hot sex into a coherent, enjoyable, whole. The Photograph - Jym (5k) CR 207 10,10,10 I'm not sure that this can be called a sex story, since there isn't any sex in it. Instead, this is a frighteningly sad story about a woman who meets a sixteen year old mother-to-be in a park, takes her home, and proceeds to shoot some beautiful nude pictures of the young girl. The girl leaves, and they never meet again. What's so sad? The poignancy comes from reasons, and dreams, and desires, and might-have-beens. I can't say much more without ruining the story. Definitely a tear-jerker. The Photographer's Daughters - Observer (68k) (M/F) CR 93 9.5,9,9 Bob is the photographer. He lives next door to Our Hero (the narrator). His two daughters are named Julie and Wendy. First, Julie has to move in with Daddy after leaving her mother. It's only for a while. In the words of Our Hero, "..staying with her father until she can get her round heels back on the ground." Since Bob and his ex wife both guarded their daughter jealously, she's had no opportunities to relieve her aching libido for months, ever since her baby was born. What's a girl to do? Why, have a more than friendly chat with you-know-who, and arrange a late-night tryst. The tryst goes well, leading to frequent repeats. Months later, the other daughter gets involved, but only for one night. That's all it takes for Our Hero to do the nasty with the unprotected sixteen year old, with not unexpected results. Sometimes it's hard to tell if a writer (or narrator, rather), views women positively or negatively. The sense I get, after finishing the story, is that the narrator does appreciate the finer points of women, even though his language, when talking about certain members of the fair sex, is less than complimentary. Anybody that can say "Her hungry cunt was barking, yapping, talking to her. And Wendy was listening." with a straight face, can't be all bad. This one's got some nice, hot, juicy sex, and some interesting story. It's well written, with a heavy dose of irreverence. Just don't expect anything warm and sentimental. Reluctant Bride - M1ke Hunt (37k) CR 221 10,10,10 This is a M1ke Hunt story. I can tell. My sides hurt when I finished reading it. That's the problem with M1ke Hunt's stories. In his own paraphrased words, "They make you want to laugh and orgasm at the same time, which is physiologically impossible." Yep. That about sums it up. And, along with everything else, he writes good, too. In this one, Mike is the Best Man at his friend Brian's wedding. The bride's name is Gail. A few days before the wedding, Brian, Mike, and a dozen of their friends throw a bachelor party, complete with wild and wooly hookers. Everyone, and I mean everyone, gets a few samples. The next evening, Brian is partying at a closed-door stag thrown by his frat buddies. In the mean time, Gail is having a few pre-nup jitters. Who does she call for comfort? Why, Mike, of course. Poor Gail. Brian is the only guy she's ever been with, and, well, she's not really sure if she's getting everything she deserves from him. You know, like orgasms during sex. Something that hasn't yet happened. She's also a trifle worried about what's happened and happening to him at his stags. All those rumors and stories, you know. (Maybe she reads a.s.s. on the side?) Does the nearly inevitable happen? If it does, will it happen again? And, if it does, will they get found out? And by who? And what about afterwards, during the honeymoon, and beyond? So many nasty questions, all answered in M1ke's inimitable style. Sacrificial Lamb - Tiffany (47k) This story starts with Gwen and her husband experiencing financial difficulties. No, worse than that, they have watched their life savings, and everything they possess, get flushed down the toilet of his crazy business venture, in dribs and drabs, over the course of many moons. Finally, they have almost literally nothing left except the clothes on their backs. No home, no car, no furniture, nothing. The husband jets off overseas where a job awaits, but money won't be forthcoming for several months. Maybe just in time to move back home and get their foxy daughter Ginger back into her old high school for the start of the next school year. Without a home, Gwen and Ginger are forced to beg for aid from Gwen's sister Gloria and brother-in-law Hank. Well, forced may be too strong a word for it. Gwen has somehow managed to alienate or distance herself from anyone else who might have offered assistance. Her filthy little imagination has been hard at work, and has been surreptitiously guiding her actions. You see, Gwen has a history with her sister, and not a pretty one. Subjucated, sexually used and abused, and forced into virtual servitude is the type of history most people would try to forget, and they would try to avoid the perpetrator like the plague. Not Gwen. Especially since she knew Hank had raped one of their nieces. You see, she doesn't see herself in the role of abuse victim any more. Not with her sister or with Hank. No, she was a teenager when most of that happened. Instead, she sees her daughter in the role - raped by her brother-in-law, abused, misused, and probably (hopefully!) even made pregnant with Hank's bastard. Those images are in her mind the whole time, getting more vivid and insistent with each passing hour. But what about Ginger, the obedient, understanding, virginal, and very desirable young lady who just turned sixteen? On the long bus ride down from Cloverdale (somewhere in Canada) to backwoods Arkansas, Gwen explains to her daughter that things will probably be quite difficult. There will be strange events occurring. It's a different place, and she will have to develop some sort of fantasy, or story, or something, to help her cope with what Gwen knows will be happening. This might happen to her, and that will probably happen to her, and the other thing will definitely happen to her. Imagine the worst, she says. Well, the worst does happen, but definitely not in the way Gwen pictured in her perverted little mind. What happens to Gwen probably shouldn't happen to a dog. Well, maybe it should only happen to a dog. Or to a woman who offered up her daughter as a ... (read the title). I like this story. It's well-written, it's coherent, and it's one that made me want to read right to the end. Even through the disgusting bits. The few flaws I found were minor and in no way interfered with the story. Be warned - this is no warm, fuzzy romance. It's not a love story. No heroic prince comes to the rescue. The sex is difficult and mostly non-consensual, although it's not contested. Well, mostly not. That last bit out back of the trailer was very much vocally protested, even though Gwen couldn't fight back physically. And it was definitely disgusting. Oh, and I forgot to mention that Gloria has kids - four boys, hellions, aged 14, 12, 11, and 10. They don't figure in Gwen's imaginings. However ... As somebody-or-other once said, the best laid plans of something-or-other often go wrong (my modern English version - the original, I think, is gang aft agley). Be ready for a story that will haunt your dreams and fantasies. Sailing We Will Go - Caesar (78k) (ff mf) CR 8 6 Two couples, May and Dan and John and Susan, all go for a wonderfully pleasant week of sailing. They all have a great time, respect each other's privacy, and go home happy. What? This doesn't sound much like a Caesar story? Really? You're right. What really happens is somewhat different. Yes, the two couples do go on vacation. They are all, uh, friends, for lack of a more accurate word. Dan and Susan have been carrying on an affair for years. May knows about it, but John doesn't. John has a vicious, nasty temper, and he's the jealous type. Dan is manipulative, controlling, and thinks of May as property. Susan is sweet, submissive, and not too bright, but she knows if John found out about the affair, he'd do something about it, possibly something terminal. May is conniving, manipulative, and is sick and tired of her husband's affairs, and has an inkling of a glimmering of an idea of what she can do about it. These folks interract in realistic ways, if you follow the newspaper and tabloid headlines. Not everybody makes it through the big storm. This is not a feel-good story. The sex is mostly done for reasons other than pleasure. The ending is only sarcastically happy. If you are highly empathic, or dislike violence, skip this one. The Scandalous Stewardess - Unknown Author (245k) This story takes place on the Bahamian island of Eleutheria. Peter Knight is the owner of a resort called "French Leave". Tall, muscular and handsome, he's been divorced these past three years. Davie Knight is his 16 year old virginal daughter. Trish Byers is the stewardess in question, a gold digger, a wanton woman, a slut in chic clothing, and a lady who is trying to sink her claws into Peter and Davie, any way she can. Randy Byers is Trish's half brother. He's also her lover and co-conspirator. What follows is a tale of lust, debauchery, incest, and heated passions at least as wild as any Roman orgy ever held. There's a midnight tryst on the beach. There's wild happenings in the sack. There's double crossing. There's scheming. There's bodily fluids everywhere. Yes, it's another good one. One thing to be careful of is the scan errors - words that scanned from the printed page, but didn't end up being what they started out as. Makes for some weird cracks in an otherwise solid piece of erotic fiction. Scarlett's Cove - Ann Douglas (57k) CR 137 10,10,10 Scarlett's Cove is a hideaway vacation resort somewhere in the Caribbean. It's a place where women can go to unwind, relax, enjoy themselves, and, if they're in the mood, to meet that someone special. You see, Ms. Scarlett McMurphy, the owner of the retreat, was, and is, a lady's lady, and her various enterprises are all geared towards catering to women with a similar taste. Into this beautiful place come Jeanette Randolph and her friend Arlene. They've been friends for many years. This vacation is a gift from Arlene to Jeanette. While there, Jeanette meets a young lady - actually, the young lady buys Jeanette at auction - who used to be one of her students, years earlier. They become more than friends. In the words of Celeste, "There's a lot more to this story than that." Yes, there is. There is curiosity, tenderness, hesitation, a certain feeling of rose petals and fine wine, and a bit of gentle humor, all mixed in to a story that will leave you misty eyed and smiling. Seinfeld: The Blowjob - Dimitri (16k) CR 177 9,9,9 Television pastiches can be a wonderful thing. Then again, sometimes they can fall flat on their faces. It can be very hard to not only get the characterization right, but to also have an interesting story. In this one, Dimitri has the characters down pat. He has a story that reads so much like a real episode would, it's uncanny. Hilarious, rib-splitting, and consciousness-raising, but uncanny. The only thing Dimitri lacks is technical ability. Ouch! This story is all about blow jobs. Not just women giving to men, but also men giving to women, and all the different opinions people have towards this form of sex. Kramer, George, Elaine, Jerry, and two extras named Marlene and Sheryl, display the complete range, from "Eeew!" to "God, I feel so cheap!" In spite of the many technical flaws in this story, I found it to be one of the best belly laughs I've had in a long time. Siblings - Michael K. Smith (unfinished,540k) CR 121 10,9,10 This is an amazing story. We follow the life of the narrator Michael, and his sister Alec, from their early years, through high school, college, and into parenthood. Of the 17 proposed chapters, we've got 9, and still, it's one of the best, most detailed, most intimate, and involving stories of any kind I've read. The closest story to this one I can remember reading, is "The Trinity Trilogy". It has the same level of detail, better exploration of personalities, but not the same level of hedonism. So far, we've got chapters 1-7, plus 11 and 12, of a proposed 17. I can hardly wait for the next chapter to come out. Sister Mary Joseph - BillyG (80k) CR 211 10,10,10 What we have here is a guy and a nun on a sailboat, alone together, for several days. The nun is a looker, once she gets out of the habit. However, the guy is pragmatic, realistic, and, believe it or not, sensitive. She is on a voyage of self-discovery, in every sense, trying to find herself, and figure out what she really wants in life. They have some very long, revealing, and intimite conversations. Do they do the dirty? Read the story and find out. I like stories that explore the human psyche, especially the female psyche (I already know lots about how guys think). There's something intrinsically fascinating about them for me. What, I don't know, but it's there. Maybe that's why I like this story so much. Sisters I, II, III - Jan V (275k) (ff,incest,teen) The four sisters are Linda (17), Nikki (16), and the twins, Zoe and Jeannie (15). All are beautiful, of course, and their parents are financially well off. In the beginning, they're normal, smart, athletic, rich kids. Only, Linda starts really noticing these feelings she has for Nikki. Not sisterly feelings either, since her nipples get hard and she keeps getting damp between her legs. What follows is a long, detailed story about the sisters, their boyfriends, and their parents. Its interesting to read a good sex story with some story to it. Emotions run rampant, with the shifting relationships between the four taking center stage. Jealousy, fear, angst, love, tenderness, and a fair dollop of sensual gay love fill out the picture. The story is mostly technically correct, although I did find the writing itself a little iffy in places. Better phrasing and better word choice would improve things, but not by a whole lot. It's an involving read, if you're a fan of romantic lesbian incest stories. The Stepford Wives - Rhett Dreams (450k) (Mf,ff,mc,nc,Bob Dole,not pc) CR 238 10,10,10 Funny. I've learned more about classical literature from reading "smut" in ass than I did all through school, university, and the many years of normal reading since. That's probably because my interests lay in other genres, like scifi, fantasy, comic books, and the like. This means I have absolutely no bias in (and no basis for) comparing this story with the original. Having said that, I think that Rhett's version is probably not as literary as the original, but it is probably much hotter and more titillating. If you've never read the book or seen the movie (there is a movie, isn't there?), there is something strange going on in the town of Stepford, Kansas. Something very strange. All of the women are perfect. Not physically perfect, of course, but perfectly made up, perfectly dressed, perfectly mannered, and perfectly wonderful wives and mothers. Too perfect. Scary perfect. There's a reason for this perfection. He's called Dr. Richard Poulson -- aka Joseph Mengele, Jr. He's controlling their minds, using drugs. But if you think this might be a normal run-of-the-mill mind control story, you would be wrong. Dr. Poulson has much greater ambitions than a small town like Stepford could ever contain. Who else is in on this plot? Just about every male resident of the town, of course. When will his ambitions break loose? Soon. Very soon. Into this cauldron of depravity comes a couple of strangers and their little girl. These are normal, every day people. The doctor, in order to protect his dirty secrets, must incorporate these newcomers into his web. The husband must be seduced and compromised. The wife must be processed. All without their knowledge, of course. He orders his minions to see to it. When they try, complications arise. I liked this story. There are plenty of plot twists. There are genuine bad guys and good guys. There is evil aplenty. There is tons of sex of all types and varieties and degrees of heat. Being a MC story, naturally a fair bit of it occurs without one or more of the participants' informed consent. Sometimes it occurs without their knowledge. Sometimes it involves whips and chains and crops and the like. Definitely not for the faint of heart, but definitely interesting and engrossing. There are a couple of things that bothered me. One was the need for a final, thorough, proofreading. I hate getting deeply involved in a story, only to be thrown out of my carefully built up mental world by a wordsmithing problem. Another was the ending. I don't know how closely this story mirrors the original, but the ending was a little hokey. Minor hokey, but hokey none the less. Maybe that's just me and my non-literary judgementalism. I'm sure there will be lots of folks who will enjoy the ending. Despite these minor flaws, I loved the story. It's worth a read. But be warned -- it's long. 410k long. I don't know how many words that translates into, but it's a lot! (I just got told it's around 75,000 words by one of my lady friends. Even she liked the story!) Strip Chess - Delta (212k) (mf) CR 189 10,10,10 Strip chess? Really? Yep, with lots of extra rules and lots of extraneous activities to keep the opponents distracted. This is a fairly long story, with lots and lots of detail. Basically, several friends get together for a small party. They start making dares, then bets. Two of them have been playing chess against each other for a while, and they make a wager on the outcome. What she doesn't realize, is that he has been taking it easy on her during their games. What can she do? Note above extra rules regarding distractions. Sex everywhere, with believable characters, mostly believable events, and some hot, wet, fun. The only thing is, payback is a bitch. Read the story to find out what that means! Like most of Delta's offerings, this is a delightful, funny, technically sound, easy-on-the-eyes story. Sucker - BronwenSM (72k) (M/F,teen,oral,anal,fucking,humor,love) CR 193 10,10,10 Kim Nice-but-Dim is the narrator of this Proper English Tale of a Woman's Coming Of Age. She is the daughter of a middle-crust government minister and his discreet, tactful, yet barbedly witty wife. Kim, as a younger girl, was pudgy (I'm being kind), with mousy brown hair. All of a sudden, due to an illness, she sheds umpteen pounds, gets this great tan because of all the time she spends in the sunshine, gets her hair made-over, and _develops_, all in one summer. You know, the old ugly-duckling-beautiful-swan thing. Now she's the most popular girl in school, and loving it. Only, she doesn't have a clue as to what to do with a guy. Not really. To make matters worse, she _believes_ what her date tells her. I mean, really! This makes her wildly popular with the boys, but less so with the girls. This is a delighful story, full of British language, British slang, and British humor. And all of it, the author tells me, comes from real, every-day, British speech. I'll believe her, since I don't know no better mesself. I'm just glad Kim's uncle finally took her under his wing (I'm being tactful) and set her straight about a lot of things, especially about Greek Eddie (who she thought came from Greece), and about boys not dying if they can't find a girl to ... well, you've all heard that one before. Tape Slaves - E (290k) (mc,ff,MmFff) CR 98 9.5,10,10 There are mind control stories, and then there are mind control stories. Some, like this one, purport to be serious about the methods used to gain control over the subjects, whether the method used is hypnosis, drugs, fancy scientific devices, magic, or advanced mental powers. Others are less so. Either way, one or more people gain a measure of control over one or more victims. Some stories more believable than others. In this one, a modified audio tape system is used to "reprogram" the listener's thought processes and beliefs. A complex system of standing orders creates people who are happy, friendly, sexy, and have the sexual morals of a horny jackrabbit. However, each person can only have sex with another "taped" person, one who has been inducted into their "sex circle". Of course, intercourse with family members is practically a given. We see a lot of sex, a lot of fun, a drop in crime, the practical elimination of rape and murder, and all kinds of wonderful benefits. For the longest time, we have no idea who the originator of the tape systems is, whether it's a single person, a group, an organization, or a government, or much of anything, really. Once we do find out who created the "tape" system, then the story really starts. This is a very interesting story, both for the massive volume of hedonism included, and for its plot and characterization. Of all the stories I've read in the mc genre, "Tape Slaves" has one of the most original storylines I've seen. Teen Breeder - ucclear (26k) (FfM,nc,preg) CR 159 7,5,3 This is a mill town. Everyone in town either works in the mill, or sells to the people who work in the mill. Dad has been working there for decades, but has failed to brown-nose his way up the corporate ladder. Now, there's a new owner - the son of the previous owner. He's making big changes. Dad and Mom have one asset that the new owner wants to exploit - their 18 year-old daughter. No, he doesn't want her as his wife, or as his mistress. Read the title. Mom is more gung-ho about the idea than Dad is, but he'll go along with it, as long as he doesn't have to be there. A promised big raise and job security go a long way towards easing his conscience. Is this a good story? It's probably one of the best of it's kind, although I'm a little put off by the way the mother so easily falls head over heels into depravity, and by the utter docility of the daughter. Still, it does hit several of my hot buttons. The Tick!!!! Arthur Takes Charge! - Dulcinea (12k) Who is The Tick? Who is Arthur? They're television cartoon superheroes, of course. The Tick is a six-foot-six three hundred pound gung-ho-style indestructable mass of muscle with a brain not much larger than a walnut. Arthur is a meek, normally timid and mild mannered guy who found a moth suit that lets him fly. He's the sidekick. American Maid is another Superhero - black-haired, clad in a red-white-and-blue Maid's outfit - who's bored, horny, and looking for a good time. Now, when a superhero dame is looking for some extra-curricular fun, she usually knows where to find a great-looking hunk of a superhero dude to have fun with. Only, in this superhero place, the other superhero dudes are folks like Sewer Urchin (phew!) and Deflater Mouse (yech!). This leaves her only one unexplored possibility - the great, powerful, muscular, gung-ho, Tick!! Of course, in this story, just like there probably would be in the TV show, there's a problem - a "bug", as it were. The Tick is afraid of, uh, well, not women specifically, but, uh, well, kinda like that other thing that goes along with women. And men. Like, when they get together. And do stuff. Hoo, boy. Needless to say, American Maid isn't overly happy. But look! There in the sky! It's -- it's -- it's a bird! It's a plane! No, it's a guy in a moth suit! Arthur to the rescue! A very well-written story that hold true to the characters, style, and humor of the television show it pastiches. Treach - The Cruiser (147k) (mf, teen, nc) I'll let the author introduce the title character. <> Treach ain't a nice man. Matter of fact, since he started ministering to his flock's needs, there hasn't been a single virgin bride. Those prenuptual wedding talks do get rather steamy. In this story, we follow the path of one soon-to-be-married young lady as she gets swept up in the hitherto unsuspected dark side of the world of Treach. Her deflowering is only the beginning, as she is dragged on a spiraling course down into the depths of depravity. Dark, seedy, nasty, with not a ray of hope to be seen for miles - that's what this story brings to the table. If sexual domination, blackmail, depravity and conspiracies are your thing, you'll love this one. Triplets - Frostflower (182k) (mf fff teen inc) Three girls - Brandy, Sandy, and Mandy - are the triplets in question. They're blond-haired, blue-eyed examples of teenage pulchritude all, nach. Each has a different personality. Each has a unique style. Brandy is the brain, the militant feminist, the repressed woman. Sandy is the wild, willful, wanton hedonist. Mandy is the sensual, not too bright, submissive one. This is the story of how each of the girls get into trouble, and how, with each others help, they get out again. While nobody is going to confuse the way these three act with real life sisters, it's close enough to keep me from questioning their motives too much. It's a fantasy, after all. And besides, I like the way Sandy and Mandy kiss. Each other, that is. Also, this story isn't going to win any literature awards. Nope. Not at all. It will get most of you guys, and many of you girls, into the mood for some partnership action. Definitely. It's light, easy, and breezy, sort of like an episode of Three's Company, but with body parts showing and bodily fluids flowing. Unholy Passage - Phil Phantom (42k) Cynthia Roundtree is going to India to meet with her husband, a missionary worker, after he's been away for a whole year. Their church group arranged cheap passage for them on a cheap cargo ship. No problem, the captain is a religious man. Cynthia, along with her five kids, gets on the wrong ship. Oops. Maybe that should be Big Oops. While Cynthia is a Prim and Proper mother, a devoutly religious woman, and regards sex as something practiced only between married couples in the dark at night in their marital bed, she, like many women in Phil's stories, has repressed her Wild and Wanton nature. Her kids, especially her daughters, don't share her strict morals about sex. Note the decided lack of panties on all three young ladies. On the tramp steamer they board, the Captain is also Owner and Sole Arbiter of Justice. He sees a beautiful mother, a sixteen year old girl, a fifteen year old boy, twin thirteen year old girls, and a baby, board his ship just as he is leaving the LA docks. Cynthia is a realist, and, once she hears the Captain's "rules", decides that God Will Forgive All once they reach their destination. She then proceeds to enjoy herself thoroughly. One more thing - six Roundtrees start the voyage, but ten finish it. You figure that one out! Wendy - Joanthan Redgrave (180k) Uncle Dan, who's the narrator of this story, ownes a nice, big, isolated house, with pool, way out of in the country. His brother, who isn't doing all that well financially any more, needs a break from the city. So, Dan invites his brother John, John's 2nd wife (14 years younger than him), John's three kids (2 from his first marriage, 1 from his second), and John's step-sister (who's several years younger than his wife) out for a long weekend. There's only one thing on the minds of all five of the women who come out to Dan's place. Yep, you got it. Mind you, it takes almost half the story to get to that part. In the mean time, you get to find out all about the kids, the sister, the wife, laugh at brother John's mechanical ineptitude, get teased by the jailbait, and generally have a good time. This one is well-written, intelligent, and a lot of fun. Willy Tamarack Adventures - Frederick T. (540k) Willy is a middle-aged hedonist. He likes his drink, he likes his smoke, and he likes his women, not necessarily in that order. For him, life is pleasure, interrupted by bouts of paranoia, work, and other things. This story combines all of the above into a coherent whole. Despite its episodic nature, the author manages to keep all of the characters consistent from one end to the other. He also combines many real-life things in with situations and events that should only happen in fantasy. There's lots of sex, too. Singles, pairs, threesomes, foursomes, moresomes, you name it. There's even a villain or two. It's a wild ride. Xena: The Bed of the Beast - Reynaldo J. Antonio (98k) What happens when you mix Xena, a corrupt government, slavers, evil warlords, a kidnapped princess, some wizards, and a fortress floating on the back of a giant turtle? You get madness, mayhem, and a story worthy of becoming a movie of the week. This is the last, the longest, and the best of this batch of Xena stories. It's almost as long as all the others put together. At the same time, it's as good as all the others put together. The author states that this story is set after Hercules defeats Xena and puts her on the path to goodness, and before Xena meets Gabrielle and gains a travelling companion. So, no Gabby. Instead, Xena hooks up with one of the kidnapped princess' personal guard. He's young, tall, well-built, and good looking (of course). He's also striking out on his own to try and rescue the princess. Naturally, Xena decides to help out. Technically, this is a very tight story. I was hard-pressed to find any typos or misused words. Even the English usage, while sometimes not as sharp as it could be, is still better than the average a.s.s. posting. The only thing this story lacks is a lot of sex. What there is fits in well with the plot and storyline, and in my opinion, forcing more in would actually intrude. There is lots of sexual situations and innuendo, of course, and a fair dollop of NC stuff (what else would you expect from slavers) to keep you titillated. This lack, in my opinion, is not a deficiency for this story. Instead, there is detail, plot, character development, angst, anticipation, and fun. A great read for people who happen to like adventure stories that actually contain story. I hope that Antonio makes a comeback and writes more stories of this quality. -- +--------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `------------+ | story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us | story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us | | Archive site +--------------------+------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ |