Message-ID: <7052eli$9801072257@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: From: Celeste801 Subject: {ASS} Celestial Reviews 247 - Jan 3 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 8bit Content-type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1 Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: X-Original-Message-ID: X-Is-Review: yes Celestial Reviews 247 - January 7, 1998 Note: I am getting a little behind in my reading lately. With the holidays and the Christmas Story Contest, I have not been able to read many of the stories submitted to me for review. I'll catch up shortly. Second note: THE WINNER OF THE CELESTIAL CHRISTMAS STORY CONTEST. Before I announce the winner, let me say that I was delighted at the number and quality of the entries. I don't mean to be trite when I saw this; but I honestly feel that there are no losers in a contest like this. The authors "won" by expressing themselves in some excellent stories; and we readers won by obtaining some good stuff to read. I hope many of the new authors will use this as a starting point from which to gauge their progress as writers. Thanks to everyone who participated! I am going to announce only one winner, and it has not been an easy decision. There were several outstanding stories. I have no objection at all to someone else publicly proclaiming his/her own winner based on these entries. The winner of the Celestial Christmas Story Contest is "Stocking Filler" by Bronwen. The story came across to me as a wonderful presentation of sexy Christmas magic. Congratulations, Bronwen! You can add this award to your resume! The following is an alphabetical list of ALL 31 entries. Reviews of these stories can be found in the current and past issues of Celestial Reviews. Several of the best made my December Top 20 list, and a few others are almost certain to make my January 1998 list. "All I Want for Xmas" by No One "Another Christmas Carol" by James Martin "Carole" by Kim "Charlie B's Christmas" by Sacvan "A Child's Christmas" by Mat Twassel "Christmas Carole" by MrSpraycan "Christmas Dinner" by Tom Bombadil "Christmas in Scarsdale" by MrSpraycan "Christmas Present For Kathy" by Unknown Author "A Christmas Triple" by Kim "Claustrophobia" by Adrian Hunter "The Curiosity Shop" by Sven the Elder "Dance With Me" by Ellen Hayes "Destiny Manifested" by Losgud "An Elf Maiden's Christmas" by PJ "Fantasies" by BitSlinger "Forget All That" by Uther Pendragon "Holly & Ivy - An Xmas Fantasy" by Captain Atom "A Letter to my Babe" by Dexy "My Xmas Threesome" by Patty Nickel "The Night Before Christmas" by M1KE HUNT "Room with a View" by Mark Aster "Seduction" by A Magician "Snow Angels" by Saucy Wench "Snow Flake" by DG "Snowbound" by Ann Douglas "Stocking Filler" by Bronwen "Thank You, Mr. Dickens" by El Sol "Tongue and Cheek" by Hawk "Santa" Richards "The Twelve Nights of Xmas" by Captain Atom "A Very Rejected Christmas" by OddManOut Anywhere "Winter Solstice" by Raven M. My congratulations and appreciation to everyone who entered this contest! Final note: Remember: even though someone else may be posting my reviews for me, my e-mail address is still Celeste801@aol.com. - Celeste "Snow Angels" by Saucy Wench (cold sex) 10, 8, 8 "A Child's Christmas" by Mat Twassel (Christmas sex) 10, 10, 10 "An Elf Maiden's Christmas" by PJ (sci fi Christmas sex) 10, 9, 9 "All I Want for Xmas" by No One (ff sex with sexy elf) 10, 9, 9 "Holly & Ivy - An Xmas Fantasy" by Captain Atom (Christmas threesome) 10, 9, 9 "The Twelve Nights of Xmas" by Captain Atom (lengthy orgy) 10, 9, 9 "Charlie B's Christmas" by Sacvan (cartoon character sex) 9, 8, 8 "A Christmas Triple" by Kim (three stories) 10, 10, 10 "Thank You, Mr. Dickens" by El Sol (classic Christmas tale parody) 9, 9, 9 Guest Reviews: "Other. A Fantasy" by Tom (time travel) 9, 8, 6 "Summer Help" by Joshu Levi (sex with yardboy) 7, 6, 5 "In the Backyards" by Frederick T. (emerging sexuality) 8, 6, 7 "Blossoms" by Lord Malinov (pregnant sex) 10, 10, 10 "Romantic Interludes" by LM l (fuck & suck story) 7, 7, 7 Reposted Review: * "Citation" by Unknown Author (pleasurable police bondage) 8, 9.5, 9 * = Repost of previous review (because the story has recently been reposted) "Snow Angels" by Saucy Wench (wenchsaucy@aol.com). Question: What is a "coolie"? Answer: A quickie in the snow. The two ladies are snowed in for the evening - or perhaps longer - in a comfortable rustic cabin. So they go outside and frolic naked in the snow. Their nipples get hard, their breasts get perky, they make snow angels, and then Caesar (the dog) jumps against the door and locks them outside. Well, not really; but Brandi lets Janet think so. So what do two sexy ladies do to keep warm when they are trapped outside the house in the snow near a hot tub? Wrong! They walk a half mile or so to the nearest occupied house, which is occupied by a half dozen teenage boys jerking off while they are watching porn flicks. But that possible scenario seems risky or risqué or both, and so they go to the next house; where they are greeted with open arms, dial 911, and make a cop come. Actually, this isn't a Christmas story at all - just a walk in a winter wonderland. It's an unpredictable story with numerous twists and turns and various other gyrations. Let me say that everyone - er, everything - finally comes together in the end. I liked this story a lot. Ratings for "Snow Angels" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 "A Child's Christmas" by Mat Twassel (Mmtwassel@aol.com). The author says he hadn't originally intended to write a Christmas story, but he was disappointed that Mark Aster didn't give us Pat and Julie and Keda and Tommy enjoying Christmas and felt compelled to do it on his own. So he borrowed the gang from the Allen sisters, and the result is a delightful story that reads almost like one Mark would have written himself. The author points out that if Mark wants to sue him, he hopes that maybe Julie Allen will consent to be his lawyer. The story begins with Our Hero (to whom the author gives the cryptic, almost laconic name "Al") returning from his day's work as a department-store Santa Claus, accompanied by a delightfully bratty child named Malcomb. The adults do Christmassy things with the kids and sexy things with each other. The NBC Today Show is currently running a series about turning 40; and from what they say and from what happens in this story, we can safely conclude that Al has not yet reached that age. The author does an excellent job of imitating Mark Aster, with perhaps a touch of John Steinbeck at the very end. Ratings for "A Child's Christmas" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "An Elf Maiden's Christmas" by PJ (pjurado@aol.com). An evil, dark, intergalactic power has decided to destroy Light throughout the universe, beginning with Earth, which is noteworthy for the light and goodness emanating from its north pole. The disembodied Elf Maiden Gwena is sent as the emissary of Naar to carry out this destruction of benevolence. Meanwhile, in Mr. Claus's toy factory, the novice elf Tifa has been assigned to section thirteen to screw on case lids. This could lead us to the classic Christmas joke: How many elves does it take to screw on a case lid? Answer: Just two, but they'll sometimes fall off the case lid while they are screwing. But the author doesn't go there. Instead, we have a face-off between the Elf Maidens Gwena and Tifa. Will Gwena convert Tifa and the others to the power of darkness? Or will Tifa win Gwena over to the power of Light? Or will they simply engage in wild elfin sex and go their separate ways? Or will Gwena possess the body of Tifa and seduce Santa himself? And what will Mrs. Claus do if she finds out? The answers may surprise you. There's only one way to find out. Read the story. Ratings for "An Elf Maiden's Christmas" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 "All I Want for Xmas" by No One (tcm_mct@hotmail.com). Bree is a young lady who has discovered and accepted her lesbian orientation. Which is fortunate, because Santa Claus happens to be female in this story. Actually, it's not Santa who is delivering Bree's present, but rather one of those elves with fiery red hair, pert breasts, and a tight little ass - the sort that evokes visions of sugarplums. After some small talk over milk and cookies, the elf serves herself up as Bree's Christmas present. The story even has a moral: it's only when you start taking the gift for granted that it loses its meaning, and is no longer a gift. This is another very nice story! Ratings for "All I Want for Xmas" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 "Holly & Ivy - An Xmas Fantasy" by Captain Atom (captatom@thepentagon.com). Many other Christmas stories have a plot of sorts - something to do with harmony in the universe or being kind to children. This one is a straight fuck and suck story: the narrator finds Holly and Ivy under his Christmas tree, and they're off to the races. It's hot stuff! Ratings for "Holly & Ivy" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 "The Twelve Nights of Xmas" by Captain Atom (captatom@thepentagon.com). The narrator has done a good deed for Mary, a new vice-president at the company he works for. As a reward, he has received the gift of a new woman for each of the twelve nights of Christmas. Beats the hell out of a partridge in a pear tree or a bunch of lords a leaping! The episodes are hot but brief. I suspect that the author knows that there are FORTY days in Lent. Ratings for "The Twelve Nights of Xmas" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 "Charlie B's Christmas" by Sacvan (sacvan@hotmail.com). Charlie Brown has been seduced yet one more time by Lucy. No, not for sex, but to play football. As he approaches the ball to give it a good, firm kick like one of the Pilgrims from the Mayflower, he notices that Lucy is wearing no panties at all. Her cunt is pink and beautiful, with just a well-groomed touch of her raven-black hair, flashing sensuous organic color right next to the white snow. As he continues his approach, he notices that the tuft of pubic hair seems sticky. The fingers of her other hand are rhythmically circling her clitoris, her pelvis moving in sympathy. Maybe she had been masturbating right on his front porch. Or perhaps she had just had sex with someone else. The hand reaches down, so delicately, it seems to take impossibly long, and inserts fingers deep into her cunt. She tosses her head back, her lips parted.... Will he kick the ball, or will the distraction cause Charlie Brown to miss the football yet one more time? This story will make no sense to Europeans, who think football is soccer. The story is not yet complete. The author promises us the rest by next Christmas. I hope he keeps that promise. Ratings for "Charlie B's Christmas" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 "A Christmas Triple -- Three Stories by Kim" (Ghost@nym.alias.net). Kim certainly has been writing some excellent stories lately! This is a set of three stories, each quite different from the others. "A Quiet Rooftop Orgy" is set in the context of Malinov's Holiday Orgy. To put it briefly, Kim and Rob get it on nicely on the rooftop of the Castle. Then in "Dark Doings in the Dungeons" various authors punish the repentant reviewer for her pernicious punditry, if there is such a word. But the depraved damsel bares up - er, bears up - and takes on all comers - men and women, fingers, tongues, pricks, dildos, with a delightfully wicked enjoyment and offers her customary love and kisses to all. The final story, "Silent Night," is not as good as the other two. It relies heavily on a surprise ending that just didn't move me. But two out of three ain't bad! Ratings for "A Christmas Triple" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Forget All That" by Uther Pendragon (anon584c@nyx.net). I suppose the main characteristic of the sexual activity in Uther Pendragon's stories is that it is both delightfully arousing and arousingly delightful. In addition, the sexual activity is a perfectly natural part of each story. We don't read about sexual athletes or people under the mystical influence of mind control; we read about people like ourselves or our parents twenty or fifty years ago. It turns out we might have been interesting and sexy people. And then we have the aphorisms - adages that would make Benjamin Franklin proud. **** "There is room for two in a twin bed, but not for two and a wet spot." **** "Daughters and husbands both create messes, but my daughter and my husband are both worth it." This chapter in the Brennan saga is written from Jeanette's perspective, and it includes her perfect description of her perfect man: "His puns are execrable, his vocabulary can make me blush, he thinks that passing gas is funny, his version of vacuuming a carpet isn't worth plugging the machine in, he can out-stubborn a cat without even trying. He will, however, hug me when I need it without my telling him why I need it. And no, you can't have him." When you mix that sort of thing with discussions of family finances, parenting skills, French phrases that are easily transparent to non-francophiles, and really hot and tender sex, the result is a darned good story. As this story begins, Bob and Jeanette have now been married for ten years. Imagine that. The Kitten (their daughter) is not yet a year old. They have returned to Bob's parents' house to celebrate Christmas and to make this story eligible for the Celestial Christmas Story Contest. The story is a remarkable combination of current activities and flashbacks to Bob's and Jeanette's earlier lives together and apart. I laughed and I cried and visited my own version of Bob for orgasmic and comic relief. What more can a girl ask for in a story? The story is long on "relationships" - in this case with a focus on the relationship between Bob and his family. In addition, within this line of thought the author gives us sometimes lengthy digressions on complex topics. For example, we get a complex lecture on economics from Bob's father. This is boring - but that's the point: the old man goes off onto perplexing tangents, but that's part of his personality. I think it is always difficult to deal with relevant but extraneous information in a story where the readers will be looking for erotic impact. I suppose this author could improve, but I think he already does a pretty good job. My advice is, if you find yourself reading a paragraph that sounds way too complex, just read it without trying to understand all the details. There's a good chance the author is just trying to give the impression that the characters are having complex thoughts - he's probably not really trying to teach you any French or economic theory. As in many other episodes of the "For" stories, the author throws in tantalizing details that make us wonder, "What was that all about?" For example, in this episode Bob and Jeanette visit her family as well as Bob's. The details of that visit led me to suspect that Jeanette had been subjected to some form of childhood sexual abuse from which Bob wants to protect his wife and his daughter. The author handles this kind of innuendo extremely well. Penultimately, let me give you non-francophiles some free help. Bob and Jeanette are long on puns. The main pun in this episode occurs whenever the baby says, "Oooh." Each time this happens Bob immediately replies (often in French), "No, it's not August; it's December." Ya see - The French word for August sounds remotely like "Oooh," and since Jeanette is a student of French.... Finally, please note that the story has been reposted in revised form by John Dark (john_dark@anon.nymserver.com). Ratings for "Forget All That" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Thank You, Mr. Dickens" by El Sol. The author has subtitled this "A Slightly Sexier Christmas Carol. And indeed it is. Although Ebonezer Razz is a modern version of Ebenezer Scrooge, the author has expended legitimate and fruitful effort to bring the old tightwad into the 20th century. In addition, the genders of some of the characters have been changed in order to enrich the sexual experiences. To enjoy this story, all you have to do is engage in a few "what if's?" What if Scrooge had a sexy half-sister instead of a loving nephew? What if his beleaguered employee were a hard-working but attractive secretary rather than a guy with a crippled kid? What if Scrooge begrudged his employees their happiness but then eavesdropped on a couple of them having sex in the office during the Christmas party? Think of the voyeurism that would be possible during the visits of the ghosts of Christmas past, present, and future! Think of what Scrooge could do that would be more memorable than send a prize goose to his nephew! And who might exclaim, "God bless us every one!" at the climax of the story - and how might that climax and those words differ from Tiny Tim's? This story has great potential, but the author himself points out in his disclaimer that this story isn't yet quite what he wanted. The Christmas Carol theme seems to be a natural for a sexy Christmas story, but nobody yet has risen to the task. El Sol promises to try again next year. I hope he does. It's already a good story, but it could become much better. And remember: the copyright has expired; so the rest of you can grab onto this story as well. Ratings for "Thank You, Mr. Dickens Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 "Other. A Fantasy" by Tom (tje@mail.nls.net). Guest review by BillyG. Have you heard someone lament, "If only I had my life to live over."? Or have you said, "If I only knew then what I know now . . ."? The story's author, mourning the missed opportunities of seducing his boyhood friend, Sam, or the "lovely blond girl with braids on each side of her head," Molly, gives himself that chance of going back and re-living his life at age 12. Accept that there are an infinite number of parallel worlds and that our protagonist has the capacity to jump at will to any of these and you have the beginning of this story. I'm left with the impression that the author regrets the missed possibilities of seducing a smooth young boy or a pre-pubescent girl and is giving himself permission to go back and get it right. Now here's the important psychological catch: He goes back with all his adult memories intact. He becomes, in essence, the same "dirty old man" in the body of a 12-year-old boy. As a consequence, his psychological advantage is enormous. This story then becomes a variant of the body snatchers or the shape shifters wherein a lecherous adult who is emotionally stuck in the missed windows of pre-adolescent seduction, disguises himself as a kid that he might re-live the lost chances. More, if and when the natural course of events play our or fail to develop to his desire, he simply looks for the EXIT sign and jumps to yet another parallel universe. There is a lack of substance in the nameless protagonist, a slippery superficiality of repeated seduction and desertion that I found decidedly unappealing. Ratings for "Other " Athena (Technical Merit): 9 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6 "Summer Help" by Joshu Levi (levi_joshua@hotmail.com). Guest review by James. What I immediately liked about this story was its mildness, its suggestiveness. The first few paragraphs made me think one way, but really took me another. I had to ask myself what sort of story I was reading. Strangely, I liked it this way. She is Barbara Williams, a divorcee for five years. An overprotective 17-year- old son who has now left for school helps set the scene. Now the house feels empty and larger than it really is. At least she still has her looks. Barbara knows she still looks good. She's noticed the way her son's friends look at her. Especially the one she invites over to help her with chores. Such is the story. I like this story best not for its sex, but for the way Joshu sets a scene. However, especially with a "continued...", this story fails to satisfy. The story is too suggestive - the sex too short lived. Ratings for "Summer Help" Technical Merit: 7 Plot & Character: 6 Appeal to Reviewer: 5 "In the Backyards" by Frederick T. (an19164@anon.nymserver.com). Guest review by Dart. I found this to be a somewhat strange story. It certainly didn't develop in the direction I expected; and even after I read the story several times, its development, its plot, still leaves me both baffled and amused. Perhaps the proper way to view the story is simply as a series of events that occur to a twelve-year-old one summer - events that are connected because they happened to him. These events may describe reality, but they make for a disjointed story. Still, I did enjoy reading it - if that makes any sense. The story begins very pleasantly by describing the summer adventures of a healthy, and daring it turns out, twelve-year-old male. One morning he climbs a tree and discovers that he has an unobstructed view into Elsa's bedroom. And there she is, nude, combing her hair. He watches until she eventually sees him. For a moment they stare at each other, and then Elsa closes the drapes. Well, I suppose for a twelve-year-old that that's enough to create an obsession. It certainly does so for the story's young hero. He returns to his lookout tree on several other occasions, but the drapes are always closed. More drastic action is required, and the young man rises to the challenge. What should happen now? Well, for me, what happened was totally unexpected. It was also not well integrated into the plot. I won't say more, because everyone should be allowed to experience the story's surprise for him- or herself. Ratings for "In the Backyards" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot & character): 6 Dart (appeal to reviewer): 7 "Blossoms" by Lord Malinov (malinov@mindless.com). Guest review by Sven the Elder. As those who read both a.s.s and a.s.s.d at present can ably testify, a lot of the former has become a rather putrid swamp just at present. This fact is evoking rather a lot of vehement, if mildly entertaining, posts to the latter. All have good points; and yes, there is "freedom of speech" and yes, that includes all shades from the light of some really excellent stories to the dark of troll & shock merchants, who are rather like naughty schoolboys saying 'Bum' for effect. There are also the dark porn merchants that beggar belief. Sadly, in our imperfect world and anarchic Usenet they too have the 'right' to post. We also have the 'right' not to read. Soapbox ditched, mild rant mode 'orft'! Why this mention of the dross you ask? Well, every now and again a story comes to light which eclipses the rubbish to such an extent that it is worth trawling through the garbage to find it. Malinov, I know you don't like the thought of your work going through a critique process; so I shall not do so. Just be aware of one thing, gentle readers: Mal has recently started writing what he calls "Trashy improv(isation)" - his description of some of his short stories. They tend to use the English language in a neat and concise way which, coupled with short punchy story lines, is most entertaining. They are all worth searching out. Use Deja (adult) Malinov. This is *not* a "trashy improv," I hasten to add - just a rather nice story about gentle, hot love in the latter stages of pregnancy. Go find it and enjoy a superb read. Ratings for "Blossoms" Technical quality: 10 Plot & character: 10 Sven (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Romantic Interludes" by LM l (RNRH85C@prodigy.com). Guest review by Kim. Hey, my first review of 1998... So what have we got here? I was somewhat perturbed to see this in the introduction to the piece : "The following story contains extreme sexual content." Wow, I thought, what has Celeste dropped on me now? A snuff, pedo, scat, cannibal, bestial, love story or something? Well, no actually. A rather timid little story about a guy and his girlfriend who one evening decide to kiss, suck, lick and fuck. And that's it. I think LM needs to check out the usual day-to-day contents of ASS before he issues such heavy warnings in future . That really is the entire plot. The girl, Lisa, asks the narrator, Jeremy, to make love to her, and he does. You couldn't really ask for a more succinct story than that. Question is, of course, was it any good? Weeeellllllll... to put it bluntly, not really. The writing is pretty clumsy, and the character of the girl is vacuous to say the least. One more "squeal" out of her and I felt I wanted to slap her soundly round the face. I guess I shouldn't be so harsh on such a genteel, almost romantic, by ASS standards, piece. It's just a pleasant little story of two people being very nice to each other. It's just a shame it wasn't done better. I think LM needs to practice his story telling some more, but he should stick with it, his heart's in the right place. I'm assuming LM is in fact a male. Ratings for "Romantic Interludes" - by "LM l" Athena (technical quality): 7 (A stream of cliched descriptions) Venus (plot & character): 7 (They fucked...) Kim (appeal to reviewer): 7 (Give the girl some brains, for God's sake!) * "Citation" by Unknown Author. Guest review by Piper. I think the premise of this story falls under the heading of "don't try this at home". Any guy who flashes a female police officer in the expectation of receiving the same kind of treatment John gets from Officer Edwards deserves his just reward - booking, conviction, a police record as a sexual deviant, fine, probation, and possible jail time. Lucky for John, Kate Edwards isn't a normal cop, and she has a really well- developed sense of humor. She gives him a chance to get out of the "public exposure" charge (or whatever it's called in your neck of the woods). In her own words, "Until six tomorrow morning, you are going to be my slave. If you do everything, EVERYTHING I tell you to do, and don't complain about anything...I'll be happy and you'll be free. Fail to comply just once, or complain the slightest bit...and I book you as a pervert. Deal?" At this point, John is naked and secured both hand and foot to an empty bunk in an empty basement cell in an old, abandoned police building. He agrees. This story involves handcuffs, zap straps, whipped cream, a string of pleasure balls, a small vibrator, an abandoned but still functional police building, and a banana. Officer Edwards just happened to have all of the above (except the building) in a bag in her patrol car (I wonder just what kind of "emergency" these things could be used for). Being the curious deviant I am, and having no personal experience in this area, I asked my two friends about the practicality of using a peeled banana. After the laughter died down and they quit smirking at each other, I got the following advice: "Yeah, you can use a peeled banana. It's better if you leave the skin on, though," said one. "As long as you cut the rough bit off the end," said the other (they spoke in turns, frequently interrupting one another). "Peeled, they're kinda fragile, so you gotta be real careful. Bear down too much, and you got banana puree." "That's messy. But it's fun cleaning up." (More laughs and knowing glances passed between them.) So now I know that bananas, peeled or not, are usable phallic substitutes. The story gained a little credibility, although it still remained well out in the realm of fantasy. Technically, this story has some problems. Most of them, I believe, are due to the ravages of time. The story has been around for a long time. It's been through the mill, bouncing around from BBS to archive, from system to system, from editor to word processor, and has suffered the odd wound. While I did find one or two spelling errors, most of the problems come from small bits of missing prose. Something, somewhere, pruned a few words here, the end of a sentence there, and the odd descriptive in between. This is a pretty good story. It doesn't quite fit into the femdom category because Officer Edwards doesn't abuse, mistreat, or humiliate her captive. She merely teases him into having the best sex of his entire life. The descriptions are hot. The sex is hotter. The ending is a foregone conclusion about a quarter of the way through. An enjoyable fantasy for anyone who's had lustful thoughts about our women in blue. Ratings for "Citation" Technical merit 8 Plot & character 9.5 Appeal to reviewer 9 -- +--------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `------------+ | story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us | story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us | | Archive site +--------------------+------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ |