Message-ID: <16882eli$9811030538@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: From: David Wright Subject: {BlueWords} First Story (MF rom cons, yearite) Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: X-Original-Message-ID: <19981102210856.19577.rocketmail@send205.yahoomail.com> {BlueWords} First Story (MF rom cons, yearite) All of the names and e-mail addresses are made up completely. Honest. ‘Cept mine, of course. This text contains material of an explicit and adult nature. If you are not of legal age to view such text DO NOT READ ANY FURTHER. The following incidents and characters are fictional and in no way reflects any known persons, situations or places. Any similarity to real life is purely coincidental. Permission is granted to save this story to a private computer for personal viewing or to be re-posted within this newsgroup so long as both this disclaimer and copyright of the writer and owner remain intact. The story may be archived or linked to a web page, as long as there is no charge for access to it, it remains unchanged and I am given credit for the work. However, permission to print in book or magazine, or commercial archive this story, as well as selling this story as your own, is explicitly withheld. First Story By BlueWords I would like sum commens about this story. Please bee kind, this is my first post to sex. stories. "She's Good in Bed" by damnimgood87@aol.com She looked just grate. He couldn't believe his luck at finding her, or how greate she looked. She had said yes when he asks her to come with him to his hotel room. He kisses her hard, on the lips, and she said "Yes, Yes, kiss me." So he kissed her again. Steady fingers undid the buttons, and soon she was naked. He removed her bra and tossed it aside. It fell to a heap on the floor and laid there. They went to the hotel room. He was just amazed at the size of her breasts. They were big and round and full, at least 38 D, just like a model's. He kissed them, causing her to moan, almost as if in pain. It wasn't pain, it was pleasure. The pleasure of his tongue on her breasts. He sucked the ends and the middles and the nipples stood up. She had long blond hair, and wonderful tits, and her legs were long and tan and she was tan all over, even her ass, and he thought she probably worked out, to keep in such great shape. He kissed her some more on the neck, then on the breasts again. She moaned at his touch where he was touching her. Soon he would remove her dress, and look at all of her, and touch her where she wanted to be touched by him. He removed her dress. Her pussy was great. He liked how it looked. Her legs were wide open, an invitation for him to explore her nether regions. He kissed her pussy, and liked the taste, it tasted great. He tasted deeply of her pussy, and she moaned in pleasure. "Yes, yes," she said, cumming in pleasure loudly. He pulled off his clothes because he is so excited by her. His thick and long erect penis stood away from his body "Oh, god, let me suck that monster dick," she said. Her lips felt great around his dick. She took all of it in throat, even though he was 11 inches long and 4 inches round. He’s so good, she thought, thinking of how great he was. He came into her mouth and she swallowed all of his jism down her throat, not spilling a drop. "I'm going to fuck you now," he said, and she said "Yes, yes, fuck me now." He turned her around so that she was on her stomach and slide his monster dick easily into her wet and waiting cunt whole. She was cumming again. Oh yes, fuck my juicey cunt, yes, she said. He fucked her juicy cunt a long, tong time, slowly then fast. Finally he came again, his cum splashing inside her waiting cunt, and she came again too. He kiss her full on the lips, sliding his tongue into her mouth and she kissed him back. "You are so good in bed, Betty," he said to her. "Oh Jack, I love you," she said. The end Dear damnimgood87 - Just how old are you anyway? This story is like something someone who's only read Playboy might write. Take a few creative writing classes and have sex a few times, then write again. Kat-E-1 (who has to get back to her classes) Damnimgood87 - Do you need more exposure for your website? Well we can help people find your site and this will increase your business a hundred fold. Call or come by our site and see what we've done for others. Sites-R-Us (www.crappyass.com) Dear DamnImGood87 - I think this might be a good first start, but it really does need a little work. Maybe you should try and explain a bit about how they met. And make sure you explain all the action going on. I one point they couple is kissing, but they aren't facing each other, at least that's not explained. It was a bit confusing. Keep trying. Maybe you could have a friend read it first next time, they might be able to give you a few pointers. Good luck. BlueWords DamnImGood87 - ALRIGHT DOOD YOU DID IT!!! FUCKING GREAT STORY MAN, YOU SHOULD WRITE ANOTHER ONE WHERE HE FUCKS HER AGAIN, MAN! BigOneToo93 Dear damnimgood87 - We need erotic stories for our website. If you've written an erotic story, please send it to us for inclusion on our website, www.senselesssexstories.xxx.com. We plan on putting up hundreds and hundreds of stories, but right now we only have 3. Send your submission today. Alpha@senslesssexstories.xxx.com Damnimgood87 - You copied my store "She's In Bed". Thats not leagal and you should stop it before you get in trouble. I’m taking with a lawyer to see if you can stop it. Please do. DataQue@ssu.univ.ed.org.com <<<>>> Just for you, call NOW and talk with these wonderful babes!! They are waiting for you now and they are only a phone call away! Tell them your darkest fantasies! They are hot willing and ready! Hot hot hot! Call now 1-900-555-1234! Damnimgood87 - I must say, you need to learn how to use the English language before you post again. Several times you needed to use a semi-colon, but instead used a comma. You left quotes out in a few places, and often the sentence structure was horrible. Also, please purchase and use a spelling checker. Otherwise, I liked the story. Perhaps you could write a sequel wherein Jack fucks Betty again. Miss D. Point My boyfriend and I really liked your story! Will there be a sequel? Thanks. DarkMama You need to have a lot more detail in your story. You don't mention what the room or the bed look like, or they had anything from room service. And they didn't practice safe sex. I mean, is she on the pill? Not to mention venereal diseases. Anyway, I think they should have had anal sex, too. Mick Damnimgood87 - If you've received this e-mail by mistake, let me apologize. I won't be sending you any more, so if you do respond to this one, you won't get any more. You seemed like someone who might be interested in this kind of e-mail, but if not, then just delete this. Thanks. Webmiester@webmiester.web.www.com Damnimgood87 - I wanted to talk to you about your story "She’s Good In Bed". This story has a good premise, but I think you should have explored the characters dynamics a bit more. How did they meet? What attracted them to each other? And what happens next? Do they have sex again, or does something more sinister happen? I could see the vague undertones of a domination/submission type of relationship. I my stories, I like to explore what causes the characters to want to be submissive or dominant. Often it is something in their childhood’s that causes them to behave the way they do. Perhaps you could allude to this in sequel. We need to see more of what makes Betty react the way she does, and why Jack takes advantage of it. Anyway, I liked the story. You should write more. Just be careful of spelling. RockWoman@otherworld.complace Everyone likes sex, and you do to, I’ll bet. Come visit my website for all kinds of sex stories. Anal, oral, women, men, foot fetish, leather goods, feed and kennels, anal, sex. All types. Visit my site soon. www.moreshittystories.com Here is a revised edition of "She’s Good in Bed". Many people wrote me with good ideas, so I corrected it. "She's Good in Bed" (MF rom cons) by damnimgood87@aol.com She looked just great. He bought her a drink at the bar. He couldn't believe his luck at finding her, or how great she looked. He asked her if she would come to his hotel room, and she had said yes when he asked her. They went to the hotel room. "Do you want room service?" he asked. She said, "No." He kissed her hard, on the lips, and she said "Yes, Yes, kiss me," so he kissed her again. His steady fingers undid the buttons, and soon she was naked. He removed her bra and tossed it aside. It fell to a heap on the floor and laid there. He was just amazed at the size of her breasts. They were big and round and full, at least 38 DD, just like a model's. He kissed them, causing her to moan, almost as if in pain, but it was pleasure. The pleasure of his tongue on her breasts. He sucked the areolas and the nipples stood up. She had long blond hair, and wonderful breasts, and her legs were long and tan and she was tan all over, even her buttocks, and he thought she probably worked out, to keep in such great shape. He kissed her some more on the neck, then on the breasts again. She moaned at his touch where he was touching her. Soon he would remove her dress, and look at all of her, and touch her where he knew she wanted to be touched by him. He removed her dress. Her vagina was great, and he liked how it looked. Her legs were wide open, an invitation for him to explore her vagina. He kissed her vagina, and liked the taste, it tasted great. He tasted deeply of her vagina, and she moaned in pleasure. "Yes, yes," she said, coming loudly in pleasure. He quickly pulled off his clothes because he was so excited by her. His thick and long erect penis stood away from his body, displaying his pleasure for her to see. "Oh, god, let me suck that monster penis," she said. Her lips felt great around his penis. She took all of it in throat, even though he was 11 inches long and 5 inches round. "He’s so good," she thought, thinking of how great he was. He came into her mouth and she swallowed all of his orgasmic fluid down her throat, not spilling a drop. "I'm going to fuck you now," he said. She replied by moaning in pleasure. "Yes, yes, fuck me now." She was on the pill. He turned her around so that she was on her stomach and slide his monster penis easily into her wet and waiting vagina whole. Then he tied her to the bed. She was coming again. "Oh yes, fuck my juicy vagina, yes," she said. He fucked her juicy vagina a long, tong time, slowly then fast. Finally he came again, his come splashing inside her waiting vagina, and she came again too. He kiss her full on the lips, sliding his tongue into her mouth and she kissed him back. Then they had anal sex. "You are so good in bed, Betty," he said to her. "Oh Jack, I love you," she said. The end Coming soon, part two, where Jack fucks Betty again. And they have anal sex again. Copyright (c) 1998 by David Wright. All rights reserved. -- +----------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `--------------+ | | | | Archive site +----------------------+--------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | ----