Message-ID: <16693eli$9810210534@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: From: bitbard@bitbard.pair.com (BitBard) Subject: {ASS/D} Celeste's Top 20 Stories - September, 1998 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Reply-To: Celeste801@aol.com Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: X-Original-Message-ID: <362d254d.6935865@enews.newsguy.com> Celeste's Top 20 Stories - September, 1998 Note: Even though guest reviewers write the posted reviews of some of these stories, I read any story that I think may be likely to win a monthly or annual award. I personally take responsibility {and blame} for these lists. If someone else wants to publish an alternate list of awards, that's fine with me. Second Note: Since many readers would like to read the top stories for each month, I have suggested that authors might like to repost as many of these stories as possible. In addition, I am posting STORY LINKS with each story in the Top 20 List. By pasting these into the appropriate line of your web browser, you should be able to go straight to that story. Please give me your feedback regarding the effectiveness of this procedure. Third Note: I have also had great success finding these stories on the World Wide Web by using the DejaNews Server (www.dejanews.com). In addition, most of these stories have been posted and archived through alt.sex.stories.moderated. You can even find past issues of my reviews through these services. Final Note: Ordinarily, to be eligible for my Top 20 List for any month, I have to have read the story for the first time that month and reviewed it in CR. Therefore, reposted stories whose old reviews I repost are not eligible (unless they are substantially revised), but an "old" story that comes to my attention and is reviewed for the first time would be eligible. If anyone else wants to post a "rival" Top 20 list, feel free to do so. You can even include my reviews, if you don't want to write your own. - Celeste ===================== This month's Number One Story: "Sunset on Roses" by MichaelD, It's a story about a 32-year-old divorced lawyer falling passionately in love with a 17-year-old intern. Their sex is hot, but there's a lot more than sex to this story. What's best about this story is that they don't just meet and fuck: they meet, they get to know each other (while we get to know them ourselves), they have problems with the age difference and have to deal with them - THEN they make love. THEN it gets serious. The age difference isn't brought up in the bedroom; it's brought up by nosey co- workers, friends, and Michael and Tracey themselves. This story deals very realistically with that dilemma. The gradual increase in intensity, the feelings that grow so silently that they are surprised to find them, the intimacy, the play, the humor, the doubts, the uncertainties, the introspection, the need to bring existing friends into their lover's lives Ð the elements are all there. This is an exceptional story. ============================ Here's this month's Top 20 List: ============================ 1. "Sunset on Roses" by MichaelD (forbidden love/romance) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=377541490&fmt=raw http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=377541496&fmt=raw http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=377541502&fmt=raw http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=377541505&fmt=raw http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=377541509&fmt=raw http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=377541515&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13748.txt http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13749.txt http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13750.txt http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13752.txt http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13753.txt http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13751.txt 2. "Scandalous" by BitBard (cheating and romance) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=388115037&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15029.txt 3. "Katie & Lyn series" by Gina Marie (ff emerging sexuality) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=394675280 4. "Man or Beast" By Diana (beauty and beast). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=385735502&fmt=raw http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=385735510&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14757.txt http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14758.txt 5. "Summer Rain" by Sven the Elder (quickie in the rain) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=390043097&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15244.txt 6. "The Unicorn Prayers" by T. M. Carvett (sexual displacement). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=385875075&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14826.txt 7. "Perfect Lover" by Friar Dave (hot science fiction) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=397772238 http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=397772242 http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=397772246 http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=397772250 8. "Leyla & Majnuna" by Sista Shakespeare (ff passion) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=391861723 9. "On Wilder Shores" by Adhara (deja vu sex) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=394318195 10. "Vicarious" by Anne Arbor (voyeurism). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=375504014&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13449.txt 11. "Precious" by Crimson Dragon (really bad day) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=393587728 12. "Lunch Date" by JB (pussy shaving) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=383797562 13. "Layers" by Stroker Ace (mental sex games) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=386880184&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14925.txt 14. "Island" by Janey Urquhart (really friendly bondage) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=397751246 15. "Tommy Fucks Meg's Brains Out" by Lostgirl (humor) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=386846259&fmt=raw 16. "A Rare Gem" by bernadette (romance) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=386873567&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14911.txt 17. "Best Friends" by Mikeybear (first time) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=385759765&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14813.txt 18. "The Lens as Mirror" by Adhara Rawcalyn (photography and sex). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=390000650 19. "Illusion" by Miss Behavin' (sex with boss's wife). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=397751671 20. "Her Damned Office Party" by Sean Devon (wife watching) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=388115056&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15031.txt ============================================= Here are the original reviews in alphabetical order: ============================================= "Best Friends" by Mikeybear (mkaber@mindspring.com). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=385759765&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14813.txt The plot is a familiar one: the boy and girl grow up as best friends, but with no sexual interest in each other. Then at age 14 they discover each other. The tale of how these two best friends share their reciprocal "first times" is very well told. This is an excellent story. "Her Damned Office Party" by Sean Devon (sean9696@aol.com). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=388115056&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15031.txt This is the kind of story to which I usually give very low ratings. A guy catches his wife being fucked by another man, and he gets horny while he watches. The experience deepens their marital love for each other. Yeah, rightÉ. The reason I hate this kind of story is that the plots are so simplistic and the characters so shallow. They leave me with either a "Yeah, right!" or "What a weirdo!" reaction. This one is different. It's a poem that tells a story. Sort of like "Paradise Lost," only intelligible and not interminable. The poetic format gives the author the freedom to leave things unsaid and to still make sense. I found this story to be quite arousing, largely because the emotions expressed in it made sense to me. "Illusion" by Miss Behavin' (missbehavin@sprint.ca). Guest review by Watchful Owl. http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=397751671 I'm annoyed with myself that I didn't see the ending coming. It's pretty predictable, in hindsight. But I didn't, and I enjoyed every second of this read. It was well written (not a single grammatical or structural error in the whole thing!) and the characters were quite believable. The plot features an aspiring young lawyer being asked by her boss to sleep with his wife for a large sum of money. She decides to do it, and we're off into a well-done (if somewhat formulaic) plot. However, the ending was a bit of a turnoff, so it doesn't get full points. Give "Illusion" a read. You won't be sorry. "Island" by Janey Urquhart (Janey98@hotmail.com). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=397751246 Jim and Josh are just humble scientists, but they save Angela's life after she has been drifting about in a life raft. I see a TV series in this.... Josh wants to send for help - maybe even send her to a hospital - but the more experienced Jim gently reminds him that neither of them have had sex with a woman in six months. And as near as I can figure there are no sheep or camels on their island. So Angela recovers her health and feels grateful to the guys, even though she longs for her beau George, who is somewhere else. She figures she'll just make the best of things until Jim gets the radio fixed. But Jim is pulling a Penelope with the radio. To understand that reference, you'll have to check out the Odyssey, where the wife of the Wiley Odysseus pursues a more honorable goal by undoing each day's needlework before the following dawn. The guys are studying El Nina or La Muchacha or something of that ilk. As the plot thickens, they tell Angela that a tsunami is coming. This shows that the author is scientifically literate, since she knows the difference between a tidal wave and a tsunami. However, that's about where my knowledge ends. I don't know for sure that you can predict these things really accurately or that the best way to deal with one would be to shack up in a basement with two sexy guys until the Big One comes and goes. But I suppose it would be worth a try. I mean, it beats sacrificing a virgin.... But I digress. The story has lots of non-sexual details - maybe too many. But as I continued to read, I just KNEW that these three fine people were going to do the wild thing together. But alas! Angela has a conscience, one that puts her between the horns of a dilemma, which is itself a pun-filled metaphor in this case. To put it succinctly, the Guys know perfectly well that Angela wants to practice horizontal folk dancing with them, but her inhibitions stand in her way - she doesn't want to be deliberately unfaithful to what's his name wherever he is. What can they do? Well, remove her inhibitions, of course. How? Well, by tying her up before they fuck her brains out. And so a good time is had by all. A real good time. To put it mildly. "Katie & Lyn series" by Gina Marie (an242967@anon.penet.fi). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=394675280 A long time ago I posted a review of the first six chapters of this series. This is a repost with the seventh chapter. As I reread the series, I was more annoyed this time than previously by the occasional faulty grammar and phraseology. However, as before, I simply forgave the author, because she does such a good job of building anticipation and telling a sexy story. The additional chapter focuses on the introduction of a third female into their small circle of friends. It's really sexy stuff, and the rest of this review is still valid. In response to huge popular demand the author is reposting these stories about two teenage girls (a high school freshman and a sophomore) who become disenchanted with their boyfriends' immaturity and enchanted with one another. This is the hottest girl/girl teen sex I can remember reading. It is hot not because the descriptions are explicit (which is also true) but because the author does such a good job of building anticipation. Just knowing what's going on in Katie's mind makes the actual consummation more interesting and enjoyable. You don't have to be a lesbian to enjoy these stories. Too many young women (and, I would assume, young men too) get the irrational feeling that stories like this are dangerous because they might "become homosexuals" if they happen to enjoy the action. Baloney. Any person with hormones who does not have preset biases against these stories will enjoy them - just as any woman with hormones would enjoy Lyn's hot lips caressing her pussy. The latter mode of experimentation would certainly be ill advised for many young girls, but I hardly think the same can be said for the former. Fantasy can be fun - and understanding how *other* people react to sex can be informative. This advice is probably extremely obvious to a large number of readers, but I think it bears repeating. Neither enjoying the idea of homosexual stimulation nor engaging in and enjoying real-life homosexual activities on specific occasions "makes" you a homosexual. Don't label yourself so easily; life is more complicated than that. I myself have no intention of engaging in lesbian sexual activities, because I am already devoted to a monogamous relationship. However, I found these vivid descriptions of two people growing in love and affection for each other to be intensely enjoyable. "Layers" by Stroker Ace (John Dark Repost). Guest Review by Mary Jorsay Gandmar (maryjg@finebody.com). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=386880184&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14925.txt No ambivalence about my reactions to this one. It's gripping writing, smooth, clean and effortless, literate and very au courant. It is a riveting, mesmerizing story of the most terrible and invidious form of torture - the warping and twisting of a mind, a personality, the very essence of a human being. High sophistication, a singularly appropriate title, fluent prose, vividly realized narrative are all superbly held together by the metaphor that anchors the tale - the loving, persistent, tedious, yet ultimately gratifying business of scraping a classic car down to its bare metal (read mettle) and then re- building its colour and texture and form by hand, layer by layer, till it is, finally, exactly what you want, an object of abiding pleasure. And this is just what is done to the lady in the story, the author's lover. She is destroyed, stripped, literally, figuratively, emotionally, psychologically, and then rebuilt, reconditioned for only one purpose Ð to give pleasure. Perhaps the only weakness in this metaphor is the opening paragraph itself, the Introduction, which tells us about the car-scraping and the lady and immediately draws the metaphor. That robs the story of much subtlety. Take away the first paragraph, leave the metaphor understated and you have a really powerful narrative. Powerful is an injustice. Savage might be more appropriate. What can be more terrible than the conscious, deliberate destruction of a mind only to remold it into a form more sexually compliant and pleasurable to oneself? But the metaphor goes far, far beyond the mirroring of car and woman. It works at a number of levels (again ... layers ...) - one sees the difference in the relationship between author and lover at the start of the story (she is tough, aggressive, knows her mind), and its metamorphosis at the end. How this happens and who does it is another set of layers ... another couple, another woman, another man, the man similarly tearing down and rebuilding his own creature, his own creation, a woman he has bought in a country that is itself being torn down and rebuilt (more layers ...) into something someone else finds acceptable. This man, not quite evil, but almost, himself complex, deeply layered, capable of molding relationships and people but, imperceptibly, though he claims to the contrary, changing with every change he makes to another. Above all, this is a vicious attack on our society today - a society that is so befuddled at its heart and core that it allows humans to be bought and sold, compels this in fact by forcing inhumanity on humans; a society so demented and depraved that it allows enormous wealth to co-exist with abject poverty; sophistication with perversion, beauty with ugliness; a society that views fundamental inequities with tragic indifference and reduces human beings to numbers and playthings. This is fin-de-siecle Frankensteinism, an awful, brutal and telling comment on the horrors of our time. And yet it is deeply caring, at yet another layer. There is a real sadness here, I think, as the author tells us this tale and seems to say - see, see what we were and what we have become, what we have made ourselves become, what we have let ourselves become. 'Layers' is that rarity - a truly intelligent, creative work that could, possibly, change the way you look at things, people, sex, sexuality, sensuality. It's not porn. It's not even really erotica. It deserves the widest of audiences. "The Lens as Mirror" by Adhara Rawcalyn (eros_dreams@hotmail.com). Guest review by MichaelD. http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=390000650 The narrator, who goes unnamed, is a married 43-year-old woman; her husband is a professional photographer who specializes in artistic nudes. The spark seems to have long since gone out of their marriage, until the day she has him take a formal shot for her company brochure. Putting his wife, for once, in place of the "nineteen-year-old nymphs I'd grown to hate," he discovers a side of her he hasn't seen before. Enraptured with the images, he decides to exhibit them, and does so to general acclaim. After the gallery opening, they return home and make love like they haven't since they were newlyweds. The idea for this story is certainly interesting and fresh, but the execution is lacking in some spots. Too much is told rather than shown, especially the elements of their marriage. During the photo shoot, as the husband makes surprised comments, the narrator gives us a running explanation of what they mean to her. I think the story would have been more effective with an opening scene (before the photo shoot) to help us appreciate the state of their relationship. I also found the photo shoot scene abbreviated, especially since it forms the basis for the entire story. Just as we're beginning to understand the emotions of the situation, it ends. Another problem I had was that the author blithely jumps over the several- month gap between the photo shoot and the galley opening. What happens during this time, after the husband has unexpectedly rediscovered his wife? We aren't told, and the effect is somewhat jarring. As a married man myself, I find it difficult to believe that having suddenly realized that his wife is just as beautiful as his models, the husband would wait months before acting on it. The author certainly exerted herself in this story, but at times it seemed to me like she was working too hard. Some of the diction is more ornate and extravagant than it needs to be, sometimes leaving the emotions of the scenes overloaded. And, in trying so hard to write elegantly, the author misses a few glaring grammatical errors (run-ons and dangling participles) that detract from the story's effect. I do like this story. It's nice to see something interesting and erotic that doesn't involve hardbodied teenagers, and the theme (that older woman can be as beautiful as younger ones) is a healthy one. I think, however, that this could have been much better. With a little extra work in revision, it could be a memorable piece. "Leyla & Majnuna" by Sista Shakespeare (sista_shakespeare@my-dejanews.com). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=391861723 This story is told from the perspective of a bored nurse who is supervising even more bored patients at some kind of a hospital. Well, that should throw off the porn cops, who will assume this cannot possibly be hot stuff. They would be wrong. The nurse is rerunning in her mind's eye her recent activities with her lover, another woman with whom she shares a number of lustful urges. The author tells the tale vividly and passionately. I know I haven't told you much. It's hard to summarize without ruining the story for you, but I strongly recommend this story. "Lunch Date" by JB (jms5b@virginia.edu). Guest review by Watchful Owl. http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=383797562 As I came to the end of "Lunch Date", I felt a silly grin half-slipping across my features. This is a good read, entirely focused on a woman who decides to shave her vagina for her husband's sake. The author does an excellent job of what he's trying to do. The plot is not deep, and it doesn't have to be. No names are given; they don't have to be. This is a "charcoal sketch" of a story: no detail is given except to the focus, yet beautiful in its simplicity. "On Wilder Shores" by Adhara (eros_dreams@hotmail.com). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=394318195 When I was growing up, "The Twilight Zone" was a big show. OK, so when I was growing up reruns of "The Twilight Zone" were a big thing. The basic theme of that TV series was that things happened to be people that just couldn't be real - could they? This story is essentially an adult - or promiscuous adolescent - version of "The Twilight Zone." All the erotic dreams that the protagonist has seem to come true at the coffee shop the next day. That can't happen, can it? Not only does this story have deja vu experiences; it also has crashing waves, a rising tide, snaking hips, and a rising crescendo with fingernails digging deep into the into the poor guy's shoulders moments before his release. What more can you ask for? "Perfect Lover" by Friar Dave (friar_dave@mhbbs.com). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=397772238 http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=397772242 http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=397772246 http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=397772250 The man is taking a train home to New York in a blizzard, when he is essentially picked up by a beautiful young Swiss woman whom he invites to come home with him. She is intelligent and charming and a veritable sex machine. Literally. Friar Dave has written numerous excellent stories, and it's always interesting to see where he will go with the next one. This story did not let me down. I'd ruin the story for you if I told you more about where this one goes. All I'll say is that it goes someplace interesting. And the sex is - as usual - hot and nicely described. "Precious" by Crimson Dragon (dcrimson@yahoo.com). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=393587728 This story could be described as the morose self-ruminations of a rejected woman at the end of a bad day. Molested, fired, her ankle nearly broken, her liquor gone, she now finds that her savings have been stolen by her live-in boyfriend who has just dumped her. This story will not win the Good-Humor Stroke Story of the Month Award. Although it sucks as stroke material, this story is excellent as literature. You know - the sort of stuff you read to achieve a more complete insight into life - the stuff that lets you vicariously experience feelings and emotions that, if you're lucky, will probably never happen to you. This is one of those stories where I dislike the abbreviated labels that try to classify it. My advice is to ignore them; just call this one (good story). The author calls it depressing, but I wouldn't. Of course, you'll have to read the story to decide whether "depressing" is an overstatement or an understatement. "A Rare Gem" by Bernadette (by_bernadette@yahoo.com). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=386873567&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14911.txt This story doesn't belong in a.s.s. It belongs in the popular press where anyone who wants to do so can find it and read it. Jewel has fallen in love with a man who is emotionally attached to someone else. They have made tender love, and now they have to decide what course their relationship will take. Jewel is an artist who has been heavily influenced by her loving grandmother, who was a deeply religious person. These factors weigh heavily in the way the story turns out. The sex is sensual and erotic, but not pornographic. If people's religious or philosophical values proscribe reading stories like this, they should get a more sensible set of values. I'm not going to tell you how the story turns out. I'll just say that it is extremely well written and sensitive Ð an excellent story. "Man or Beast" By Diana (diana_svensson@yahoo.com). Guest review by BitBard (bitbard@newsguy.com) http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=385735502&fmt=raw http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=385735510&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14757.txt http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14758.txt Sci-Fi and Fantasy have a very unique role in literature and erotica. No other format allows for such an exploration of humanity. Spock on Star Trek wasn't a green blooded, pointy-eared alien, he was a contrast that allowed us to see and understand what it was to be human. These forums allow authors to reflect the human condition from the outsider looking in vantage, as well as allowing authors to reflect on what we may become. In erotica this outsider looking in forum usually explores the very boundaries of sexuality itself. Can a human really love a bug-eyed-monster? Is it really bestiality if the bug-eyed-monster has a heart and soul and an IQ of 512? If one falls in love with a shape-shifter such as Odo on Star Trek: Deep Space 9, would that person be gay, bisexual, heterosexual, or a zoo depending on what Odo decided to be that evening? Celeste's VR contest produced many entries that explored exactly what those labels mean when form is malleable. In "Man or Beast", Emily Sanders is a young woman who is vacationing alone in a rustic, remote setting. As a city girl she has enormous fun exploring nifty things like skinny dipping and masturbating in the great out doors. Later she gets lost in the woods, is almost rescued by a would-be rapist but is saved by a noble werewolf who has been keeping an eye on our damsel in distress. The werewolf is actually a really decent guy living as a hermit. He's lonely, she's lonely and so an erotica story is born. In a way this is borderline bestiality, but it also serves as a comparison and contrast. Daniel, the werewolf, is an outcast, alone and reclusive. Emily, though she lives in the heart of a great metropolis and has friends and co- workers is just as alone as Daniel. There's also a great deal of romantic fantasy wrapped up in this story and the werewolf allows for a duality. On the one hand, Daniel in his human form is sensitive, caring, kind, and intelligent. On the other hand, Daniel in his animal form is dangerous, strong, and a pretty damned good lover. This duality of course is present in all men to greater or lesser extents. The use of a werewolf however serves to magnify the differences between man and the beast within. It's usually pretty difficult to write in the fantasy realm and keep the dialog believable. This story did a fairly good job of holding the dialog together, though it was strained in places. The only real problem I had with the story was learning werewolves travel in flocks. Every time I saw this word I kept imagining Emily conversing with Chicken Boo. "Pack" or "Clan" would have, for me, been a much better word selection. But this is a quibble. This may not be the best story published to ASS/M, but it a very strong and solid addition to a genre which few authors exploit to it's fullest potential. This story did exactly what a good Fantasy story should do: allow us to explore our own sexuality by seeing sexuality in a different and unusual light. Furthermore, this exploration of sexuality is done from a *WOMAN'S* perspective in a field dominated almost exclusively by men. That uniqueness, quite apart from this being an interesting story, puts "Man or Beast" on my recommended reading list. "Scandalous" by BitBard (bitbard@newsguy.com). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=388115037&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15029.txt "Well known author seeks model for sitting. No prior modeling experience necessary." Why would a writer need a model, and how would the model pose? Considering the salacious nature of his books, what woman would dare allow herself to even consider the idea? But Faith is suffering from angst or ennui of a married woman who is taken for granted by her husband and by the students in her English classes, and she needs adventure; and so she becomes a model. Actually, Alan just enjoys drawing, though he's not good enough to sell what he draws. Drawing also grounds him; puts him in touch with real people with real needs and desires. He tells Faith that if he decides to use her as a model, and she decides to sit for him, then he'd like her to talk while he draws. When he sits down to write again, he will use much of her in what he writes. She models. He draws. She talks. He listens. They fall in love. That sort of thing could shake up Harper Valley. This is not a simplistic story. It is a well-developed plot with fully developed characters. It is both a sexy and a complete story. "Summer Rain" by Sven the Elder (sven@brass-neck.demon.co.uk). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=390043097&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15244.txt A man is out in a boat fishing, while the woman who is with him reads a book. It starts raining, and so they stop fishing and reading and fuck. That's about it, except that the author adds some supplementary words, phrases, and ideas. Suddenly pendulous, pirouettes, bobbing breasts, shivering, confluences, sweet roundness, rain-diluted juices, straddling, gasping, savage proportions, and more bobbing and shivering and rain-slicked foreheads. And the idea that these two people have had a long history together. I guess if you add those words and ideas, this becomes a most interesting little story. "Sunset on Roses" by MichaelD (michaeld38@aol.com). Guest Review by BitBard (BitBard@newsguy.com). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=377541490&fmt=raw http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=377541496&fmt=raw http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=377541502&fmt=raw http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=377541505&fmt=raw http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=377541509&fmt=raw http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=377541515&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13748.txt http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13749.txt http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13750.txt http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13752.txt http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13753.txt http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13751.txt A 32-year-old divorced lawyer, Michael, meets a 17-year-old intern, Tracey. He sucks her young, hot twat, she gives him a blow job, and then they fuck -- his hot, throbbing cock buried deeply inside her tight, seventeen-year-old cunt. That's a typical older man meets jail-bait-teen scenario on ASS, isn't it? Well guess what? This isn't a typical story, at least not a typical ASS story anyway. The earlier description was a basic summary of Michael and Tracey's first time in bed, though I seriously changed the tone to take a small jab at the typical fucking the teenybopper story. Before this scenario actually happens the reader is treated to a wonderful character buildup of both Michael and Tracey. In this story they don't meet and fuck, they meet, they get to know each other (as we get to know them), they have problems with the age difference and have to deal with them, then they make love. Then it gets serious. Surprisingly, something that always annoys me so much in adult/teen stories is present in this story, but here it is not at all annoying. Tracey is seventeen. In a typical ASS story her age would be dwelt on over and over and over again usually while they are making love. In Roses, the age is also dwelled on but it's dwelled on as a very real point of conflict and drama. The age difference isn't brought up in the bedroom, it's brought up by nosey co- workers, friends, and Michael and Tracey themselves. This story deals realistically, very realistically with that dilemma. Anyone who has ever fallen in love will immediately connect with this story. The gradual increase in intensity, the feelings that grow so silently that it's a surprise to find them, the intimacy, the play, the humor, the doubts, the uncertainties, the introspection, the need to bring existing friends into their lover's lives -- they are all there. Also there are all the things necessary to make a relationship work, honesty, communication, and sharing common interests and pleasures. This may very well be the most realistic, accurate portrayal of two people falling in love that I've ever read and is all the more remarkable for the age issues which take this into the forbidden love realm. The love-making, when it happens, is all the more special not only because it is as well-written and well described as the rest of this story, but because we know these people so well; because we know they belong together and we can be happy for them, with them when it finally happens. This is the type of story I aspire to write, this is the type of story I long to find and treasure when I do. Obviously, this story carries my highest possible recommendation. Read it, enjoy it, live it, and know for a brief while the thrill and intensity of newfound love. Note the + on the appeal. There are many stories I give an appeal of 10 to -- it simply means I enjoyed the story and I think you might as well. The + is my way of noting a story that I not only enjoyed, but a story that I consider to be among the very best that I have ever read. "Tommy Fucks Meg's Brains Out" by Lostgirl (lostgirl33@hotmail.com). http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=386846259&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14853.txt This story deals with the problem of what might happen when we take our metaphors literally. {The related problem of misusing the word "literally" is discussed in the CELESTIAL VOCABULARY DEVELOPMENT section at the end of this issue.} Tommy has fucked Meg's brains out. That might sound like fun, but Tommy has LITERALLY fucked Meg's brains out. She used to be an intelligent, renowned doctor; but now she's as stupid and horny as a seventh grade detention hall. Actually, Tommy hasn't fucked ALL of Meg's brains out; she still has she her cerebellum and probably her hippocampus, and a few adjacent parts that control more basic functions. The erstwhile Dr. Kruger still can experience anger, fear, and sexual urges; it's just that she can no longer execute more involved cognitive tasks. And she's actually quite affectionate and sexy in that little backless hospital gown. And I finally got to use "erstwhile" correctly in one of my reviews. The following may be one of the best Ð or possibly worst Ð similes ever written in a.s.s.: "Defeat mocked him like those forty-five minutes in the Small World ride watching three Peruvian dolls going up and down, singing that damn song in Spanish over and over." This is an excellent story. Somehow this review calls for a cherry popsicle. "The Unicorn Prayers" by T. M. Carvett (tcarvett@earthlink.net). Review by Fiddler. http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=385875075&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14826.txt The unnamed girl who is the protagonist of this story had a fond father and a strict mother. Then the mother died. The girl "acts out" as the psychologists say. She tries to be perfect and to _be_ her mother. When that doesn't work, she turns her emerging sexual feelings into art and into sluttishness. This isn't a very explicit story, but it is a very erotic one. It is also a _story_. It adds another name the line of Michael K. Smith, Tom Bombadil, and few others who write stories which deal with issues. "Vicarious" by Anne Arbor (AnneArbor@hotmail.com). Guest review by Crimson Dragon. http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=375504014&fmt=raw --- http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/13449.txt I've never read anything by Anne Arbor before, but I have to admit that I quite enjoyed this short story. The story is basically a voyeuristic/ exhibitionistic competition of two university friends told from the perspective of Anne, a current girlfriend to one of the friends. Despite the short venue, Anne managed to get a reasonable level of plot as well as character into all the people in the story. There is a small twist that I should have seen coming, but I didn't, so I won't reveal too much more than that. The characters were fully described, and the small details made the story for me. The story is fast paced and hooks you pretty quick. The erotic aspects were also strong and well described for this type of story. At least, I thought they were. I didn't notice any glaring English errors, though I stumbled over the word 'commingled'. I looked it up, and Anne was right again. This story is well written from a technical standpoint. Remember that I'm still new to this reviewing stuff, but I'd recommend reading this story. -- +----------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `--------------+ | | | | Archive site +----------------------+--------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | ----