Message-ID: <14902eli$9809011442@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com Subject: The Annex Reviews, 8/30/98 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: X-Original-Message-ID: <9875acba.35e8d95b@aol.com>> X-Is-Review: yes Hi there. Here's another batch of reviews. As I said, I'm sticking to the thrice-monthly schedule, so if I haven't reviewed your story yet, please be patient. The stories: Bondage Slave Girls, 1, 2, 3, 4 by kilogram22 (title says it all) Kiko 1, 2, 3, by Shon Richards (M/F, M/M, anal, mast, humor) Dracokin Wanderers, by David Farr (fur, mast) Summoning, by Lizard (M/F, horror/fantasy) The Gift of the Balloon, by Rapture (M/F pain) The Deer Hunter, by Misty (M/F rape) Unmasked, by Jordan Shelbourne (M/F, con bondage, superhero) Grabbing the Brass Ring, by Frank McCoy (F/m, teen, SF) Movie Notes Bondage Slave Girls [D] Where posted: ASS When posted: 8/8/98 Author: Kilogram22 Address: Kilogram22@aol.com I received an email recently, in reference to my carpal tunnel syndrome, that suggested I not waste my precious reviewing time on truly bad stories. I have a reply to that. I review the bad stories because they're so much fun to make fun of. This multipart serial did not disappoint. It read like the author digested too many John Norman Gor books and then OD'd on lesbian bondage mags--or lesbian bondage websites--springing to life this fevered, sweaty-palmed creation from the addled halls of his or her brain. The story's premise is that in the far future civilization has gone into decline and humanity has mutated into a race of porn star look-alikes who are constantly enslaving each other. I think. It never was made clear. Anyway, men have virtually disappeared leaving Amazons to make the lucrative slave-girl runs, and most of the action consists of the slave girls being dressed in various skimpy outfits and spanked, and their chief occupation is giving other women head and kissing them with their tongues extended. Guess they've watched too many cheesy porn videos. This story was very bad. It was poorly written, poorly plotted, and poorly conceived. It made absolutely no sense. The author also had the annoying habit of interrupting the story with comments in parenthesis, like: (Okay, so the black did not match the rest of attire. It would match certain bondage accessories the woman intended to add. More important, it insured that anyone who saw shiny, black, knew they saw her panties. Andrea knew that too. She would assume that anyone looking at her was admiring her panties. Of course, there were other reasons for putting panties on a slave girl, but the blonde was too concerned about sucking the dildo clean to think of them.) I mean, what can I say about the above passage? To be fair, the story did have some naive, sleazy thrills--the same kind available from a retarded hooker--but it was only enough to boost it from a D- to a D. Kiko 1, 2, 3 [A+] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 7/30/98 Author: Lord Shon Address: lordshon@aol.com Website: http://members.aol.com/GntlShon/kikotemp.html Kiko is a silicon-enhanced ninja groomed as a high-kicking sex weapon by her scientist father. In this humorous story she helps an archaeologist regain the Emerald Rod of Might from the lost temple of the Sodomites...and yes, you can guess what bodily appendage the foot-long crystal resembles. Along the way there’s Indiana Jones style perils like marble statues that shoot their dicks off and a cave entrance that resembles a giant buttcrack. (I don’t think we’ll see this in Disneyland.) There’s also a gymnastic pole-dancing sequence that appears to have been inspired by a scene in the "Aeon Flux" cartoon series. This was a very funny story, just a tiny bit rough around the edges, but the sheer imagination and silliness involved pushes this one up to an A+. Will Kiko return for more adventures? Time will tell. Summoning [B+] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 8/15/98 Author: The Lizard Address: red.lizard@USA.net A sorceress summons a demon to serve her, discovering, too late, that she has carnal desires for it, and falls in love with the very thing she created. This could have been a very sexy tale if it was shorter. The author can write well, but most of the story consisted of the same thing said three or four different ways, and all the repetition doesn't exactly move the action forward. Still, I liked the interplay between witch and demon, which was erotic without being overly porny. Dracokin: Wanderers 1 [A] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 8/13/98 Author: David Farr Address: djfarr@ihug.co.nz Website: http://homepages.ihug.co.nz/~djfarr/ Fur gets a nice workout in this story, which takes place in a science fiction universe reminiscent of C.J. Cherryh's "Union and Alliance" space opera novels. All the characters are humanoids with genetically engineered animal features. Cherat, a wolf- woman, is the captain of a shuttle ferrying passengers to the far edges of the galaxy, and they include a skunk girl, a cute-as-a- button Siamese cat girl, a fox woman, and a tiger woman. Naturally, they run into trouble and wind up on a planet of real humans (Earth in the Middle Ages?) where they are alarmed to wind up as sex slaves. The science fiction in the this story got more emphasis than the sex, but it was otherwise very well written, in the style of paperback SF these days. More chapters are promised, and there's also a website. The Gift of the Balloon [A] Where posted: SSBB When posted: 8/10/98 Author: Rapture Address: Rapture@mailbag.com Note: This story was posted from an organization known as "Kubrick's Kink Emporium and Espresso Bar." Can anyone tell me about this establishment? Readers? In a run-down carnival a barker admires a pretty young balloon seller. She admires him, too, and they decide to get together. But the barker (not Bob Barker) has a kink: he likes knives. The sharper the better, especially when they're wielded by attractive females. The balloon dancer figures out a way to oblige him without hurting him. It has something to do with the balloons, but I won't give it away. This mild fetish story had no sex in it but it was very original, the sort that gets an "A" in college creative writing classes, and that's what I gave it, for the elegance of its conception. The writing could have used work--it suffered from beginning writer over- earnestness ("It was late morning on one of those hot days near the end of July when time stops and it feels like mid-afternoon on a dog day in early fall.") but it flowed well in spite of the wordiness. Look this one up if you're tired of the usual. The Deer Hunter [A] Where posted: ASS When posted: 8/7/98 Author: Misty Address: purfect9@aol.com Website: http://members.aol.com/purfect9 Here's another unusual story, which the author says was inspired by legendary motor city madman Ted Nugent, a long proponent of hunting (though with a bow the last I heard.) A hunter going after a prize buck builds himself a concrete bunker to camp out in, and furnishes the immediate area with cheap surveillance cameras from a pawn shop so he won't miss his big moment. One morning, those cameras record not the buck but the rape of a female jogger. Later it's hinted the rapist is the hunter who eventually bags the prize buck out from under the hero's nose. The characterization and hunting aspects of this story were done well, but I wonder if it was really meant to be porn or not. Porn glorifies and plays up the sexual element, but in this story the sex serves as an element of horror and suspense. The way in which it was used reminded me of Uther Pendragon's "Duty" which is probably the better story. It certainly straddled the porn/nonporn line with more confidence. But "The Deer Hunter" was entertaining too, just needing some more reflection of the part of the narrator to be something just as good. Unmasked [A+] When received: 8/13/98 Author: Misty Address: jordan@u36.com Website: http://www.u36.com/jordan/ Jordan Shelbourne gives the superhero subgenre a new spin with this story, which, without the sex, works as a Donald Barthelme-type satire. In a slightly skewed alternate world normal working people feel compelled to become home-grown superheroes, sewing their own costumes and making up their own utility belts. Apparently, like being a goth or a punk, it's a common stage all young people pass through. The story is about what happens when a man and woman who are about to marry share some secrets about their superhero pasts. The author stated that "Superheroes are essentially about power relationships...." but I didn't see power issues in the story; it was more about the trust involved with the revelation of one's true self. And also the revelation of ones' fantasies, which the story treats as allegory; very ironic and insightful considering all the superhero porn that's out there. Anyway, the cleverness and inventiveness of the story's premise overshadowed its sexual/emotional components, at least for me. But that's also why I gave it an A+. Grabbing the Brass Ring [A] When received: 8/1/98 Author: Frank McCoy Address: mccoyf@millcomm.com This story, which received a drubbing from Celeste in July, marks a sort of turning point for Frank McCoy. Incest is prominently featured, but there's a science fiction rationale for it. The narrator of the story, a middle-aged woman living in a small town, is empathic, which means she picks up on the strongly felt emotions of others and feels compelled to act on them. Unfortunately (or fortunately, depending on your point of view), this means having a sex with a lot of angst-ridden teenage boys. While the narrator enjoys the sex, she can't deal with the other emotions, which are painful for her. The tone is delicate and wistful, the plot taking a backseat to the feelings experienced. I found the story a well-written depiction of how someone with empathic abilities would deal with her life, but, I warn you, most of it was pretty sad, dealing with feelings of alienation, loss, and rejection. You may or may not want this level of depth in a sex story. It was pretty obvious to me that the narrator was empathic because I've read a lot of SF; but I'd recommend an explanation somewhere in the first few paragraphs of the story to spell out the situation for those in the dark, something like, "I've always known I was empathic, which means I pick up on the emotions of others." Otherwise, I think Celeste must have lost her dentures that day or something, because there was nothing in this story that called for the level of critical abuse she gave it. Movie Notes: "Heavenly Creatures," now available on video, contains a non-explicit yet steamy sexual encounter between two teenage girls. The rest of the movie is excellent too, though "Armageddon" and "Bridges of Madison County" lovers would find it on the bizarre and cerebral side, dealing as it does with the fantasy life (NON-sexual fantasy life, if you please) of two bored schoolgirls in 1950s New Zealand. They eventually murder their mum, and yes, it's pretty bloody. Anyway, five stars ***** and worth it if you also like Quentin Tarantino, Neil Jordan, and David Lynch. Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh -- +----------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `--------------+ | | | | Archive site +----------------------+--------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | ----