Message-ID: <12815eli$9807071542@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: From: Lee Vine Subject: Rogue Reviews Digest No. 6 - July 6, 1998 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: X-Original-Message-ID: <35A0E9D3.2864735C@switchboardmail.com> Rogue Reviews Digest No. 6 - July 6, 1998 NOTICE If you are easily offended or under the age of eighteen then please do not read what follows. CONTENTS Mailing List Information Rating System Reviews Rogue Review No. 80 [Sally Learns Her Lesson by Kristen] Rogue Review No. 81 [The Massage by Sue D. Nyym] Rogue Review No. 82 [Stormy by Emily] Rogue Review No. 83 [The Restaurant by Mel] Rogue Review No. 84 [Private Dancer by Steven A. Black] Rogue Review No. 85 [Collection by LeAnna] Rogue Review No. 86 [The Shed (Chapters 1 & 2) by Big T] Rogue Review No. 87 [Amy Visits for the Summer (Parts I, II & III) by Sundance] Rogue Review No. 88 [The Punishment Fits The Crime by E. Z. Riter] Rogue Review No. 89 [Scratches by Lord Malinov] MAILING LIST INFORMATION I send my reviews individually, when I finish them, to the Sex Stories Discussion List. If you are interested in joining there is a form for doing so on my home page. * Home Page - http://www.geocities.com/Paris/Cafe/3112/ * E-Mail - santiago@switchboardmail.com RATING SYSTEM * Outstanding - You must read this story * Excellent - You should read this story * Good - Read this story if you have the time * Not Good - Do not bother reading this story * Grudgingly Good - Technichally this story is well written, but there are elements in this story which disturb me. REVIEWS Rogue Review No. 80 - June 30, 1998 Sally Learns Her Lesson by Kristen F-solo, M/F Length: 1,800 words SUMMARY The Third Rock From The Sun Episode that we are all dying to see on TV. COMMENTARY I liked this story, but it was more funny than arousing. Maybe that is what the author had in mind? It would have been nice to have seen a little more. The characters did get a very quick treatment, and there was not much to the plot. I do think the author did a good job of recreating the characters from 3rd Rock. JUDGMENT This is a good story, but it would have been nice if there had more to the plot. LINK(S) http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12367.txt ----- Rogue Review No. 81 - June 30, 1998 The Massage by Sue D. Nyym F/F Length: 3,000 words SUMMARY Penny goes to the spa and gets some special attention from Lynn, a beautiful masseuse. COMMENTARY The story centers around Penny and is more about her life than it is about her relationship with another woman. The narration is beautifully done. Lynn is not as much a fleshed out character as she is a convenient one. I like the build-up in this story. The author does a lovely job of showing how badly Penny needed to be HANDled the way Lynn HANDles her. [Cough, cough.] I am not completely satisfied with the ending. It seems to be an attempt to wrap things up, neatly. I do not think the story needs it. I do not care for the ending, but at the same time I do not feel that it takes too much away from the story. JUDGMENT This is an excellent story. LINK(S) http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12368.txt ----- Rogue Review No. 82 - July 1, 1998 Stormy by Emily F/M Length: 1,600 words SUMMARY Josie is out for a jog when she meets a handsome stranger, or does she? COMMENTARY This story was nice, but it was nothing great. It read like the beginning of a longer work. The handsome stranger seems to be a bit of a stereotype. I just felt a bit cheated. Just as things started to get interesting the story ended. JUDGMENT This is a good story, I just wish there had been a little more to it. LINK(S) http://www.artandlove.org/pr/stormy.htm ----- Rogue Review No. 83 - July 1, 1998 The Restaurant by Mel F/F, Teen Length: 2,100 words SUMMARY A woman experiences lesbian love for the first time. COMMENTARY This is a stroke story. The descriptions are well handled, but the story is short on both characterization and plot. It would have been nice to have seen a little more dialogue. The author did do a good job of building up to the inevitable sex scene. JUDGMENT This is a good story, but a little more dialogue would have helped. LINK(S) http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12385.txt ----- Rogue Review No. 84 - July 2, 1998 Private Dancer by Steven A. Black M/F Length: 9,300 words SUMMARY Andy hooks up with Sasha, a stripper. COMMENTARY This is a well paced story. The author teases the reader, but does not get down to business too fast. Neither of the main characters has to make any tough choices. The purpose of the plot seems to be to get them into bed. The story ends with them living happily ever after. The descriptions are good, but there are some instances where the author tells the reader how Andy feels, rather than show the reader how Andy feels. JUDGMENT This is a good story, but the characters could have had a little more depth. LINK(S) http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12417.txt ----- Rogue Review No. 85 - July 2, 1998 Collection by LeAnna M/F Length: 1,800 words SUMMARY A man steals from the collection plate and gets caught. COMMENTARY I found this story very arousing. There is a sudden shift in the tone and direction of the story. It works. I liked the twist at the end. The narrator's descriptions convey both how the narrator feels and what he sees. JUDGMENT This is an excellent story. LINK(S) http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12031.txt ----- Rogue Review No. 86 - July 2, 1998 The Shed (Chapters 1 & 2) by Big T Voy, F-solo, M-solo Length: 4,500 words SUMMARY A twelve-year-old boy spies on an older girl. COMMENTARY This story is jagged around the edges, but it shows potential. The author does an excellent job of writing a story from a twelve-year- old boy's point of view. He captures the boy's apprehension and his excitement. The story could stand to be edited. There are quite a few sentences and paragraphs that I feel could be broken up into shorter ones. There are a few misspelled words. These are only the first two chapters of a longer work. JUDGMENT This is a good story, but it needs to be edited. LINK(S) http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12423.txt ----- Rogue Review No. 87 - July 3, 1998 Amy Visits for the Summer (Parts I, II, & III) by Sundance M/F, Teen Length: 12,600 words NOTE This is only the beginning of a longer story. SUMMARY Married-with-three-kids-Mike, age 38, boinks beautiful-used-to-be-a- tomboy-Amy, age 17. COMMENTARY I found this story very arousing. The author does not spend too much time on the sex itself, but does spend a considerable amount of time building up to it. The main character does admit to being a bit estranged from his wife, Sarah. He is ripe when Amy comes along. This bothered me some. I am curious to see how the author will bring the wife into the story. The author does a good job of showing the confusion in Mike's head. He is not entirely reluctant, but he does have his doubts. JUDGMENT This is an excellent story. LINK(S) http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12446.txt [1/3] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12447.txt [2/3] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12573.txt [3/3] ----- Rogue Review No. 88 - July 4, 1998 The Punishment Fits The Crime by E. Z. Riter M/F, D&S Length: 4,000 words SUMMARY Charlie punishes his wife, Becky, for cheating on him with her tennis instructor, Harry. COMMENTARY This story did not flow for me. It seemed rather episodic. It felt like something was missing. Aside from that it was a good story. The descriptions are great. The story seems to be well paced. I liked the plot. There is tension in this story, and I liked it. I guess what bothers me is the fact that in the end it seems like Charlie forgives Becky simply because she is a sexpot and he cannot get enough of that thang. In retrospect, Charlie's dilemma does not seem to be either, whether or not to forgive Becky, or why he should forgive her, but how long to wait before forgiving her. JUDGMENT This is a good story, but Charlie's dilemma did not seem compelling enough. LINK(S) http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12514.txt ----- Rogue Review No. 89 - July 4, 1998 Scratches by Lord Malinov M/F Length: 500 words SUMMARY Malinov reminisces about his relationship with Diana, his wife. COMMENTARY This is not really a story. I liked the descriptions. It seems to have two themes, the endurance of their love life and his fascination with her beauty. JUDGMENT This is good. LINK(S) http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12449.txt ----- 7/6/98 -- Lee Vine * E-Mail - santiago@switchboardmail.com * Home Page - http://www.geocities.com/Paris/Cafe/3112/ -- +----------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `--------------+ | | | | Archive site +----------------------+--------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | ----