Message-ID: <7983eli$9804171614@qz.little-neck.ny.us> From: Lady Cyrrh Subject: The Annex Reviews, 4/16/98 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-transfer-encoding: 7bit Content-type: text/plain; charset=US-ASCII Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: X-Original-Message-ID: Hi, I just have a couple of things I want to say today. Number one is that if any editors out there want to solicit stories for anthologies or websites, or any paid venue whatsoever, I would be happy to publicize that information in this column and on my website. The reason I'm saying this is that I found Maryanne Mohanraj was asking for submissions for an erotica anthology way after the fact, and had I known sooner, more writers could have been made aware of this fact. So, editors, take note! Number two is I'm still looking for unusual erotica newsgroups to compile on my site (http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh) with a brief review of the kind of fiction they contain and their spam-to-story ratio. If anyone can help me out, send me a line. Gracias! The stories: Cassandra- Vampiress, by JRParz (M/F, F/F, mc, vampire) The Command Performance, by SuthrnLrd (M/F, rock n'roll, dildo) Purple Tornado, by David Lawrence (M/F, personal) Trapped in Stone, Parts 1, 2, 3, by redheaded composer (M, F mast, femdom, dildo, magic) Girl Talk, by Assmaster McStuff (F/F cybersex) Website Review: Ravensword Cassandra - Vampiress [B-] When received: 4/1/98 Author: JRParz Address: JRParz@aol.com Vampires are a hot ticket these days. From Anne Rice to role- playing games, their pointy little fangs are cropping up everywhere. Surprisingly, they are not as popular as they could be in the ASS realm, given the fundamental eroticism of their nature. (The late, great Bela Lugosi was beseiged with female fan mail after making "Dracula"--while in his 40s yet.) This is only the second vampire story I've seen. A teenage girl named Cassandra is discovered by a modeling agent who tells her she's a natural for the biz. However, Cassandra's guardian Aunt Rhea isn't keen on the idea, so the agent drugs and bribes her to hand over Cassy's guardianship to him. Along the way Cassy fucks Nicole, her best friend, and meets a vampire named Damien Nightshade at a party, who makes such a big impression on her she has to run to the bathroom and finger herself to multiple orgasm. Later that night Damien takes over the mind of Tricia, another model, and turns her into his sex slave, and decides Cassandra will be his immortal bride. He generously gives Tricia to her to fuck as she sees fit until the (unholy) union. You'd think with a combination of vampires, lesbianism, and teen models the story would be pretty hot, but it wasn't. I found my attention wandering after the first 200 words, not a good sign. Part of it was due to the point of view. The writer wandered in and out everyone's heads at will: "As Cassandra strolled away, the agent couldn't help but gaze at the girl's lovely rounded ass" "Rhea didn't relish the idea of taking responsibility of a fifteen year old girl" "When Rhea told her niece about the conversation, Cassandra became angry and upset with her aunt." For the maximum effect, stick to one person, please. The passive sentences also gave the effect of a story lectured rather than a story seen, heard, smelled and tasted by the reader, and it got very tedious. Also, for a story about teen models, there was very little color or excitement. Where are all the photo shoots? The exotic locations? The coke-sniffing parties? Yachts? If you want models and the adventures of the beautiful people, Andrew Roller does them a lot better. There was also a lot of unbelievability in this story, such as aphrodisiacs being in such common usage one would think they're available off-the-counter in Walgreen's, and one female character who reassures Cassy (who thinks she's a lesbian after a roll in the hay with her) "Come on Cassy, I'm not either. But I do know how to take pleasure in a girl's body. You're very beautiful and I am too." Well, jeeze, if this isn't lesbian behavior what is? All this wouldn't be so bad if the author was playing it as camp; that is, "I know this is a ridiculous story whose only purpose is to get you horny, and you know it, so let's have fun." But the tone of it was straight, as if the author was hypothesizing how these imaginary events could logically happen; and unfortunately, it all came out as tepid. The Command Performance [B] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 4/6/98 Author: SuthrnLrd Address: suthrnlrd@hotmail.com Website: http://members.tripod.com/~SuthrnLrd/ This creative dildo story is of the dom/sub variety wherein a girl receives a package from her lover along with instructions on a cassette tape. The package contains a pair of hard plastic panties equipped with a lock and vibrating dildo. She dons the gizmo, then goes to meet the guy at his club, where he's a bass player in the band. He is also a whiz at audioelectronics, because he's gimmicked her dildo to respond to his fretting: "Whatever frequency of note I play on my bass will be transferred to the vibrator...if I play a low E, the vibrator will rumble slowly and deeply. If I play a high note, the vibrator will buzz quickly and sharply. What's more, how hard I pluck the strings will be reflected in the intensity of the vibrations. Quiet passages will make it buzz faintly. More vigorous playing will mean more vigorous vibrating." Despite the originality of the idea, the story was marred by the same faults that inhibited the story above, namely, lack of attention to realistic detail and overall tepidness. For example, would a wild rock n' roll guitarist really talk like the man in the above passage? He sounds more like David Byrne than Kurt Cobain. Hmmm, on second thought make that Marilyn Manson. He did a pretty mean debate with Florence Henderson on "Politically Incorrect." Purple Tornado [A+] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 4/4/98 Author: David Lawrence Address: dhl@elektra.sysun.com Website address: http://www.sysun.com/dhl This story was part fiction, part memoir, and details what happens when the narrator meets a beautiful golf-playing female oddball who's constantly pushing the societal envelope: "I find other women do not like her, despise her in fact, mostly. She has few true friends, though she is incredibly friendly. The price you pay, I suppose, when you make your own rules and flaunt the unspoken and unwritten rules of others, however innocently. True freedom is an ugly sight to the self-enslaved." The story then gives an overview of their capricious affair. I couldn't quite call this a sex story, as the sex acts weren't given the emphasis--the play of personalities was. Still, it was well-written and unusual, a little "purple" in places (prosewise that is) but making up for it in its exuberant prose and wry, sweet nostalgia. And I loved that title. If you want me to review your story, it helps to have an unusual title. "A Day at the Beach" or "Underage Babysitter" just doesn't cut it. Trapped in Stone, Parts 1, 2 3 [A-/B+] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 4/6/98 Author: redheaded composer Address: rhmusic@hotmail.com A young college student meets Surrey, a half-Spanish, half- Egyptian girl who decorates her apartment with ancient Egyptian artifacts. After making love one night he falls asleep with one such object, a three-inch obscene statuette, nestled in the bedcovers. Imagine his surprise, and hers, when he wakes up to find his consciousness has been transferred into the statue: "For the first time, John saw his new form...this time, they were John's features, a perfect likeness, except not exactly in proportion. In particular, the body was sculpted to be smooth and torpedo shaped, completely bald, about an inch and a half in diameter and 3 inches tall. John was squating on his knees on a pedestal. The pedestal had a pencil-sized hole bored through it. But worst of all, for John, was that he was carved completely naked. His penis was hard (and felt hard! Eternally hard) and was carved as this huge member pointing straight up towards his chin, alongside his stomach. Further, his nipples were large and extended, looking a bit ridiculous, almost as if he had slight breasts carved in, and his ass were exposed with a deep crack carved in. The statue, and John, had become pink ivory." As stories go, this was pretty silly but fun. It read like a lighter, fluffier version of one of Eli the Bearded's stranger tales. Although it was listed as femdom, the tone was so genial the events came off as cute rather than sexually threatening, such as this one (Surrey has tucked the boyfriend/statue in her leotard in aerobics class)" " "Oh!" Surrey exclaimed. During their left-right body twists, the statue had gradually worked it's way underneath the wasteband of her tights. She dreaded what was coming next. "OK! Running in place!" the instructor called out. The entire room started to jog energetically. John felt the head of the statue work it's way into the wasteband of the tights. When Surrey started to jog, each step seemed to drill the figurine deeper and deeper into the tights. "What's that?" John wondered, feeling a little tickling around his face. "Oh my god! It's her pubic hair!" John came almost instantly (it was his 2nd time since the aerobics started). " To his or her credit, all the scenes kept this same level of detail. The author also reveals a flair for humor as well. The story was flawed by the point of view and passive sentence problems that plagued (?) the vampire story-- namely, the writer constantly switches heads to tell us what each character is seeing and experiencing at the time. I'll say, stick with one--the guy's. Girl Talk [A] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 4/7/98 Author: Assmaster McStuff Address: assmastermcstuff@hotmail.com Here's another cybersex story, this one F/F. The narrator comes home to find his girlfriend, Hobbs, on a chatline with an exotic dancer. Like all exotic dancers everywhere, she's stacked, pussy-shaved, and bisexual. The two swap deep, earnest confessions of burning passion, like these: "Hobbs: I'm going to lean forward and bring my tits close to your face Bi 4u: sitting in the chair still Hobbs: my nipple is really hard now... I'm going to rub my nipple on your temple... that feels soooooo good Bi 4u: mmmmmmmmmmmmm.... i want to touch u" In between these exchanges, the narrator grumps: ["Jesus baby, you're killing me here! When are you going to fuck her?" I say, cock in hand.] Then, [That's it for me. I shoot a load right onto Hobbs's arm. She looks at me, a little disgusted, and says, "Jeez, aim next time..." Sure I'll aim next time, straight up your ass, I'm thinking.] What a fun guy! Though the story was amusing, with the tone of a pissed off Harley-riding, beer-drinkin' Mike Hunt protege ("Here ya are, scumbags! Enjoy it!") I couldn't decide if the writer intended the story to be a serious turn-on for adult men and women or was showing us just how trite and banal the very concept of cybersex is. (Remember what I said about it February's review of "Raven Hair.") You could take it either way, I guess. Now for *another* Raven... Website Review: Ravensword Address: http://www.ravensword.com Owner: Ravensword Anyone remember those great Russ Meyer B-movies of the late 60s? For those not in the know, or those who need a brass knuckle on the side of the head to remember, they were about half-undressed, monumentally stacked heroines in unintelligible plots that always involved them doing things that made their breasts bounce...frugging in go-go clubs, wrestling, kickboxing, running from the law. They had titles like "Vixen" and "Mudhoney" and the incomparable "Faster Pussycat! Kill! Kill!" (which featured half-Japanese half- Apache karate expert Tura Satana.) They were to the 60s what film noir was to the 40s. They were total trash, and total fun. What Ravensword has done is turned Meyer's personal vision into some great erotic fiction. The heroines of these stories are women who enjoy beating the crap out of other women, but there's also an erotic component: it makes them horny as hell. The two opposite drives thus give a strong D/s flavor to the proceedings, with more of a payoff than Meyer ever gave us. The newest serial is "Hollywood Cat Pack." It concerns a sort of alternate-world version of the studio system where starlets fight other starlets in sandpits and wrestling rings for shots at choice movie roles. Real-life stars (Marilyn Monroe, Hugh Hefner) are amusingly mixed with fake ones (Stella Stellar) and star sound-alikes (Jane Blonda, Margaret-Ann Magnuson) in a world of drugs, booze, cigarettes, double-dealings, orgies, and ancient rituals. Rocky, a naive young actress, is seduced into the Hollywood Cat Pack by her manager, who tells her membership is the only way to become a big-name star. Female members are required to fight each other for the mens' amusement, so first Rocky fights capitol bitch Angie Prickerson, then battles Stella Stellar in the Playboy Club (the latter with both combatants dressed as bunnies.) To her horror and amazement, Rocky finds herself enjoying her battles, and enjoying the sex that follows even more, as the winner gets to fuck the loser. In between these bouts she has dreams of a Greco-Roman alternate universe called Catalan where she was once a high-ranking noblewoman who fought her countrywomen to rise higher in the royal court. As it turns out, the male leader of the Hollywood Cat Pack is the reincarnation of a slave Rocky once wronged in that other life, and now he's out for revenge. The story was fast-moving and entertaining without an excess word easing the pace, and the fight sequences were truly breathtaking. The sex was of the D/s variety and on the violent side; there was no love or tenderness in these stories. However, I didn't miss it, as it's a given that the appeal of fiction like this is to read about avaricious bitches fighting and clawing their way to the top. The same principle exists in TV soap operas like Melrose Place in a much-muted form. But Ravensword takes them to their most extreme point, and there's no turning back. If you haven't guessed, I enjoyed these stories a lot. The five other stories deal with catfighting with an Oriental slant, taking place among corporate boards and the clandestine arenas of Asia. The site also features pics of Korean-American wrestler Fuchsia, links to action-adventure stars like Catherine Bach (the former Daisy Duke) and GLOW (Gorgeous Ladies Of Wrestling). The layout of the site was neat and well-organized, easy to find your way around, and the server was fast. In short, it's kitty heaven. Content: A+ Layout: A Will I visit again: Yes. Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh -- +--------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `------------+ | story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us | story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us |