Message-ID: <985eli$9705282159@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: Path: qz!news.accessus.net!not-for-mail X-Path-Preload: news.accessus.net preloaded to thwart rogue canceller there Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: From: Celeste801@aol.com Subject: Celestial Reviews 185 - May 28 X-Is-Review: yes Celestial Reviews 185 - May 28, 1997 Note: It's been a busy week. Since there were two Supergirl stories in the postings recently, I have reposted my reviews of several similar stories. I hope these authors will repost those stories. Second Note: I noticed that Dafney DeWitt is reposting a large number of stories this week. I don't have time to dig up all the reviews, but these are invariably good stories that are worth downloading and reading. Third Note: Remember the Third Annual Celestial Writing Contest. {Several people have poinited out to me that this is actually my Fourth - not Third -Contest. No one has yet pointed out to me that I have only been writing these reviews for about two years; so how can I have had so many ANNUAL contests?} The rules are that the story must in some way be about sex and must be restricted to 500 words or less. In addition, the story should include some sort of unusual twist. If you wish, you can submit several super-short stories together (as Vickie Tern has now done on two occasions), or you can post them separately under separate titles. However, I'll give first prize to the best STORY, not to the best collection. The deadline for submissions will be June 3, which my calendar tells me is the date on which the Catholic Church will celebrate the feast of St. Charles Lwanga and his companions. Fourth Note: Remember: even though someone else may be posting my reviews for me, my e-mail address is still Celeste801@aol.com. - Celeste "HypnoTV: Baywatch" by MAW (mind control) 9, 8, 7 "The Big Bet" by Pec (fraternity orgy) 6, 6, 5 "A Summer with Amber" by Nigel (child molesting) 7, 6, 5 "Blood Prey" by Tooshoes (supergirl & vampire sex) 9, 10, 10 "Supergirl: Dark Half" by PJ (superhero sex & violence) 8, 6, 5 * "What Are Supergirls Made Of?" by Tooshoes (Superhero romance) 9, 8, 8 * "A Supergirl Arises From The Abyss" by Tooshoes (sci fi romance) 10, 9, 9.5 * "My Heart Of Steel Is Like Putty In Your Hands" by Tooshoes (action adventure) 10, 9, 9 * "Supergirl Breaks the Mold" by Tooshoes (action adventure) 10, 9, 9 * "Frisking The Cat" by Tooshoes (superhero sex) 10,10,10 * "Supergirl" by Ann Douglas (superhero sex) 9, 10, 10 * "Supergirl and X" by M D James (superhero rape & sex) 9, 9, 9 * = Repost of a previous review (because the story has recently been reposted) "HypnoTV: Baywatch" by MAW (MS4EVER321@aol.com). Baywatch is a show whose artistic and dramatic qualities elude me. My husband seems to enjoy the show, but he must see something in it that I fail to see. It's sort of like what somebody said to me at a party over the weekend: "I see," said the blind man who pissed against the wind. "It's all coming back to me." Which reminds me of a joke: Down in Florida, two widows were talking and one asked the other, "Do you ever get to feeling horny?" "Yes," her friend replied. "What do you do about it?" "I usually suck on a Lifesaver." After a moment of stunned silence her friend asked, "Well, what beach do you go to?" Which brings us back to this story. Frank wants to be admitted to Alpha Beta Thi, which is the hottest fraternity on campus. The initiation committee has decreed that he can get in only if he can bring proof that he has made love with the four hottest lifeguards (lifesavers, in the previous joke) on the beach, all on the same day. Fortunately, Frank has been taking a psych course; and the textbook has a chapter that describes how to hypnotize people. Equally fortunately, the female Baywatch lifeguards have not yet taken that course in their doctoral programs, or at least have not read that chapter, or at the very least have not understood it very well - or maybe they just like to fuck. Anyway, Frank nails all four of them, and I suppose he gains membership in I Felta Thi. This was a cute little story. It really needed a little more plot development, and the sex scenes were numerous but brief. In other words, if my husband likes this show so much, there MUST be more to a typical Baywatch story than this. I asked him, and he said the show depends very heavily on the T&A (technical and aesthetic, I suppose) abilities of the actresses, and he suggested that perhaps this is difficult to convey in the non-visual media. He may have a point there. Ratings for "HypnoTV: Baywatch" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7 "The Big Bet" by Pec (pec@richmond.infi.net). If you think it's easy to write a sexy story about a fraternity wager, you should look at this one. The narrator and his friend are put in charge of the fraternity's charity program for the fall. Well, these girl's from 38DD are likewise in charge of their sorority's charity program. I'll bet you can see where this is going! The guys challenge the girls to a Big Bet. If the guys raise more money, the girls will have to streak past the frat house; but if the girls win, then the guys will have to do whatever the girls want for a whole day. These guys weren't rocket scientists: they think this is an even bet. The guys lose and they have to sexually service all 22 girls. They take their loss well. The narrator is the last to cum, and so he is despondent, until he realizes that this is a religious sorority or something and the girls like the guy that comes last and make him the first on their list. Ratings for "The Big Bet" Athena (technical quality): 6 Venus (plot & character): 6 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5 "A Summer with Amber" by Nigel (bclinton@whitehouse.gov). The narrator's girlfriend has her 12-year-old niece come for a visit. The niece becomes interested in sex, and the narrator becomes interested in the niece. I guess if one seriously wants to avoid sex with pre-adolescents, one shouldn't let them sit on one's lap during a 45-minute drive or take a shower with them. Because if one does, soon one will be nibbling on their breasts, and then things are likely to get out of hand. The author requests that readers not offer any literary commentary, and so I won't mention the story's slow development, choppy plot, or fundamental lack of realism. I'll deal with the author's knowledge of psychology, since he introduces that topic in a sort of epilogue. He says the fact that Amber initiated their encounter "is comforting in regard to cognitive dissonance." I don't think the author knows squat about cognitive dissonance; I think he means he has a lax conscience that was mollified by the fact that he could transfer the guilt to the child. He says he makes no attempt to defend his actions with Amber, and he adds that both he and Amber "knew the consequences of their acts." This being said, he tells us to feel free to post any discussion as appropriate. Since he seems to want advice with regard to "real life," my suggestion is to seek counseling if he thinks there's a chance he might repeat this kind of dysfunctional behavior. The story may be mildly interesting, but I really don't think that guys who act like this are likely to help young girls grow up to be healthy and happy. Ratings for "A Summer with Amber" Athena (technical quality): 7 Venus (plot & character): 6 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5 "Blood Prey" by Tooshoes (tooshoes@cris.com). As we have learned in previous stories by this author, because of Supergirl's origins and super powers, she has trouble dealing with her femininity. She solves part of her problem by working under an assumed identity as a stripper at a sleazy bar, while she also works during her free time as a superhero to promote truth, justice, and the American Way. In this story she encounters a vampire. My knowledge of vampires is so weak that I had forgotten that they need fresh human blood in order to survive and that the people from whom vampires draw this blood immediately die, since they have no more blood of their own. However, now that I think about it, I suppose that makes sense. Naturally, when the first vampire shows up in Supergirl's city, there's bound to be a conflict. The vampire at first wants to suck blood from Supergirl, but the superhero's insatiable sexual urges make her extremely attractive to him, and it the vampire falls in love with Supergirl. Therefore, he has a conflict: should he be with her and run the risk of killing her or withdraw from the one he loves and let her live? You'll have to read the story to find the answer. This particular version of Supergirl has begun to grow on me. This is the sixth Supergirl story that the author has posted, and I find it enjoyable to watch the way the author handles authentic, hypothetical problems that might arise for a young woman who has super powers like these. Ratings for "Blood Prey" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Supergirl: Dark Half" by PJ (pjurado@aol.com). Apparently in a previous episode Dr. Doom created a Supergirl named Mirabelle who somehow escaped his control and fell in with Wonder Woman. Now his associate Dr. Fokler has created a new Superbeing named Vivienne, alias Dark Angel. Dr. Fokler seems to have two goals in creating his creatures: getting great sex from them and ruling the world. Since he is a demented arch-villain, he seems to give priority to the latter goal. In addition, as a Mad Scientist, he also seems driven by the simple desire to make really neat things. The Supergirls of this story are essentially creatures like Godzilla, who fight for dominance in the streets of major cities; only they are women, who can also have major orgasms. Anyway, Dark Angel uses her pheromone ability (which Fokler had given to her but not to the first Supergirl clone) to subdue Mirabelle. Will Supergirl be diverted to illicit purposes? Will Wonder Woman damage the integrity of Dr. Fokler's dimensional vessel? Will the world as we know it survive? If you really want to know, you're going to have to read the story. This story is not as good as the preceding one. This one has a disjointed plot: the author simply wants to let us see neat things (like explosive orgasms) happen. He is not really interested in pursuing the logical consequences of interesting ideas, which is what good science fiction does. I am not a super science fiction fan, and so the following criticism may be off track. The author says that Supergirl was "cloned" from Superman. My understanding is that cloning would result in a male Superman. In short, with this story I did not have the impression that I was reading either excellent science or excellent fiction. Some other Supergirl stories posted with this newsgroup have done a much better job, and I'll repost my reviews of those stories. Perhaps the authors of those stories will repost them. The Supergirl erotic literature is rapidly becoming fairly complex. As I have pointed out, Tooshoes has now posted six Supergirl stories. Her Supergirl is essentially the same as the one in Ann Douglas's story, although their earthly names are different and the two authors have made no attempt to make their story lines avoid contradictions. This Tooshoes/Douglas Supergirl appeared in the older DC Comics but was killed off in the comics several years ago and was replaced by a newer Supergirl with very different powers. This second Supergirl appears in "Supergirl and X" by MD James, which was written with the most up-to-date comic-book readers in mind and included numerous inside references. The Supergirl in the present story is somewhere in between. She has genes that originated on Krypton, but she has been created as an essentially distinct entity by Dr. Fokler. I honestly don't know whether she has a fictional existence outside this story. I have reviewed these stories as essentially an outsider with just a little bit of inside information that has been supplied to me by readers. It is possible that a Supergirl comic-book aficionado might get an entirely different impression. However, I find it interesting that an outsider like myself can enjoy these stories when they are carefully developed. Ratings for "Supergirl: Dark Half" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot & character): 6 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5 * "What Are Supergirls Made Of?" by Tooshoes (tooshoes@ix.netcom.com). Supergirl shows up just in time to stop a guy from raping an innocent young woman. The hero sends the young woman on her way with a proper word of warning and then turns to deal with the villain, who cons Supergirl out of punishing him. It turns out Supergirl has an identity crisis. Because of her origins and super powers, she has trouble with her femininity. She solves part of her problem by working under an assumed identity as a stripper at a sleazy bar. I don't want to tell you any more, since part of the fun of reading this story is seeing what happens. I was surprised at how good this story was. I had skipped past it several times in the postings until someone called it to my attention. It's a bit like a high-class comic book or cartoon. When I was in college I used to sneak off and watch "The Incredible Hulk" and wonder how David Banner would solve his dilemma of radioactive contamination that caused him to undergo metamorphosis - when all the kids in the country were watching the same show so that they could imitate him when they would "hulk out" and scare the shit out of their friends. Something similar happened with this story: I began to wonder about the sexual feelings of a comic book hero. The story wasn't exactly great; but I think that may be because all I could find was one out of four episodes. Taken in its full context, this might be an even better story. These stories usually begin with SG in the postings. You may want to look for them. Ratings for "What Are Supergirls Made Of?" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 * "A Supergirl Arises From The Abyss" by Tooshoes (tooshoes@ix.netcom.com). Kara was sent to earth as a survivor from her planet (actually an asteroid) at the moment her culture and all her friends disintegrated. She was greeted on earth and taken under wing by none other than Clark Kent, who had made a similar odyssey several years earlier. Enrolled as Linda Lee as a student at Metropolis University, she is having trouble getting along on earth. To mask the effect of her unfamiliarity with American culture, Clark advises Kara to pass herself off as Hungarian - an idea plagiarized, no doubt, from either George Bernard Shaw or Henry Higgins. The story is quite interesting; sort of like a high quality comic book with sexual activities as a natural part of the plot. This is the first of four connected stories - four that I know of; there may be others. The plot has obvious possibilities: what sort of things - both emotional and physical - will happen to a woman with super powers who approaches an American college campus as a foreign culture. This series has the potential to be really good, but I'm going to save a really high rating until I've seen more. Ratings for "A Supergirl Arises From The Abyss" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5 * "My Heart Of Steel Is Like Putty In Your Hands" by Tooshoes (tooshoes@ix.netcom.com). Linda Lee is a supergirl from the same planet and with similar powers as Clark Kent. In the opening scene of this episode she becomes caught up in a violent hostage scene and falls in love with one of the participants. She lives with the guy for a while and frequently has sex with him, but she realizes that sexual attraction affects her powers and that the guy is no good for her. This episode is an attempt to insert some really complex emotions into a simplistic story line, and it succeeds fairly well. Kara as Linda Lee comes across as one thoroughly confused young lady; and by the end of the chapter I was wondering how she might get her act together in future episodes. Ratings for "My Heart Of Steel Is Like Putty In Your Hands" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 * "Supergirl Breaks The Mold" by Tooshoes (tooshoes@ix.netcom.com). This episode of the Supergirl Saga begins with a focus on two pieces of information: (1) Supergirl has become interested in the plight of some downtrodden Cuban refugees, and (2) Supergirl has become involved in a slightly kinky lesbian relationship with a female reporter from the Daily Planet. The first piece of information is not surprising; the second is explained in terms of her need to be passive during sex, in order to avoid doing serious harm to her partner. In addition, we discover that Supergirl is under surveillance by agents of the American government and that her freedom and powers are limited. In short, this story is an interesting blend of somewhat kinky lesbian sex and political philosophy. Ratings for "Supergirl Breaks The Mold" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 * "Frisking The Cat" by Tooshoes (tooshoes@concentric.net). Our story begins with Supergirl feeling lonely and horny on a late-night subway train. She has group sex with some strangers on the train; but when they depart, she realizes that they have taken her purse, which contains her superhero uniform. After this introduction we learn that Supergirl is having trouble making ends meet in her dual identity persona. Since she majored in Liberal Arts, she can't get a good job; but her platonic acquaintance, Andrew, hires her as a sort of roving agent for the SSA (Superhero Surveillance Agency). He first assignment is to apprehend Catwoman, a cat burglar who doubles as a sort of Robin Hood vigilante. Oh, there are a few details I forgot to mention - Supergirl has a libido that won't quit. She also is a transmitter (but not a receiver) of ESP messages. And Catwoman has this problem of getting to the point of a huge orgasm and then just quitting. Somehow all this comes together into an interesting plot. Ratings for "Frisking The Cat" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Supergirl" by Ann Douglas (AnnD55@Pipeline.Com). This is a nice, romantic story about the budding relationship between the Woman of Steel and Susan Wienczorkowski, an officer on the Metropolis Special Crimes Unit. Through a flashback we learn that Kara (Supergirl) had been in love with a young man on her planet before it was destroyed and she alone escaped to earth. Kryptonians made no clear distinction between straight and gay sexual behavior; and it now seemed reasonable and extremely pleasant to fall in love with the police officer. At first I had a tendency to look for anomalies in the story. For example, when Susan took Kara out for dinner, nobody in the restaurant recognized Kara as Supergirl. These people, I said to myself, must have an amazing figure-ground problem. Maybe Kara wore glasses to the restaurant - the glasses always kept Lois Lane from figuring out that Clark Kent was Superman. However, as I got more involved in the story I found it to be a thoroughly enjoyable romantic story. I strongly recommend it. Ratings for "Supergirl Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 * "Supergirl and X" by M D James (dmatthew@ix.netcom.com). At the beginning of the story we learn that Supergirl has been infatuated with Lex Luthor. Can this be true? Isn't Lex Luthor an evil person? Holy Ambivalence.... Ooops! That's the wrong superhero. In the present episode Supergirl pursues Luthor, but he tortures her with his Orgasmatron. Then Lex Luthor fucks Supergirl - well, not really Lex Luthor - actually X Luthor, one of those X-Men, of comic book fame, who has taken on the appearance of Lex. In some weird sense, Supergirl is even X's mother. I have to admit that I am not up to date on my comic book literature. This story was full of allusions to people I knew not of. I felt like I was in a comic book version of one of T.S. Eliot's poems. Ratings for "Supergirl and X" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 -- +--------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `------------+ | story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us | story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us | | Archive site +--------------------+------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | \ .../assm/faq.html> /