Message-ID: <923eli$9705261923@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: Path: qz!news.accessus.net!not-for-mail X-Path-Preload: news.accessus.net preloaded to thwart rogue canceller there Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com Subject: The Annex Reviews 5/21/97 X-Is-Review: yes This is a midweek edition of "The Annex Reviews." For this installment we will look at fanfic, firsts, and fantasy. "100% Woman, 200% Bitch...." A story for females to read, if you DARE [B-/B+] "Devine Submission" A story for females to read, if you DARE [B- /B+] When posted: 5/15/97 Where posted: ASSB Author: sillygoose@earthling.net I DARED. Both these stories were written by the same author; "Devine Submission" (sic) is a tighter, shorter rework of "100% Woman." Written in second person ("There's a hand stroking your ass...") both detail what a nameless man--and his named German Shepard--would do to a woman he has tied face-down to a four- poster bed as they enact his fantasies. Taking the two stories together, there's bestiality, licking, humiliation, an enema, a three-way, and a doggy-style gangbang as the woman is treated just like a bitch in heat, with collar and everything. As literature this gets a B- for all the misspellings ("kneal" for kneel, "Devine" for "Divine" etc.) and the lack of attention paid to plot, character and detail, making it unentertaining for the average reader. But taking it as the personal jack-off it is, I found it hot, hence the B+. This brings up a discussion of the differences between the personal jack-off, porn, and erotica on ASS. All three are sexual fantasy, which to my mind is no different than other forms of fantasy such as science fiction, epic myths, or sword and sorcery. Which is precisely what makes them so interesting, as they connect to something deep within the human psyche. To put it as simply as I can, erotica has a plot, characters and/or literary style, while porn gets you hot as bluntly and quickly as possible. The personal jack-off is an open expression of someone's sexual desires, often addressed to a lover or potential lover. I'm not too fond of these, as the style often requires you to follow the writer's instructions ("As you rub your hot, wet pussy...") in a game of make-believe that is ultimately pretty pathetic for normal, intelligent adults sitting in front of a computer screen. It's like those dumb little paragraphs describing the models in Penthouse and Playboy. Does anyone really read those things and take them seriously? Anyway, these stories were a form of personal jack-off in that, at the end, the author wants to know if they turned any women on and if they did, to please strike up a correspondence with him. Which brings up the same point Celeste would make: Why would any sane woman want to be treated the way the woman is in this guy's fantasies? The answer is, IT'S A FANTASY. It exists in a murky realm totally unrelated to real life. Could a dog ever be well-trained enough to get erect on command and hump a human female for more than a few seconds? Would a man really give a woman an enema on his expensive four-poster bed without rubber sheets? Of course not. I would not want to experience any of this in real life, nor is it one of my fantasies, but it sure is fun to read about it, putting yourself in the position of a voyeur of these activities. It's the IDEA that is the turn-on in the fantasy, not the identification with the characters in it, which is what people often forget when they judge these fantasies. So, there's no way in hell I would take the German Shepard owner up on his rather graphic come-on, but it was enjoyable reading about it. These stories bring up another point. Are there any women out there who sincerely like being called "bitch" "slut" and "whore" in a demeaning way in the course of sexual activities? That is, really dig it, as opposed to just pretending they do to make their partner happy. The next three stories come from our friends in the United Kingdom. "DiscoSlut" Story by Suzie SleaZe [A] When posted: 5/17/97 Where posted: ASS Author: Suzie SleaZe Address: 101445.2670@compuserve.com Suzy Sleaze likes being called a slut. Hot, extremely raunchy porn as Suzie Sleaze and her sleazy husband Mick dress up in white lycra and white leather and go to a disco, where they participate in exhibitionistic dancing, then have a gangbang in the men's room which includes pissing on each other. If this author is indeed a female, and the story reflective of her own fantasies, she truly glories in being happily depraved. After every act you think no, she can't possibly can't get any sluttier, then she does...like a female Terminator coming back for more. At times all the cum, saliva, and piss reminded me of preschoolers smearing fingerpaints all over each other. This is surprising to me as most of the female fantasies/stories I've read don't go into enthusiastic descriptions of body fluids that much--it's more of a male thing. It may be that "Suzie Sleaze" is really a man writing about a fantasy woman. But maybe not, as it's also clear Suzie is in control of her own behavior and is acting out of her own desires. She's not a victim; she's an aggressor. She makes being a filthy slut empowering, in a way. Stick that in your pipe and smoke it, femdom! Sylistically, there was something out of date about this story--I can't decide if it's meant to be retro-hip or that the author is still enmired in a 1970s world of Jackie Susann novels, Cosmopolitan magazines, discotheques, and tight exercise clothes. After all, these days the hip go to raves or ambient clubs with house music. In baggy jeans that hang off their asses. But when something is this hot and slutty, who cares? Kathy [B] When posted: 5/16/97 Where posted: ASS Author: Lisa Cohn Poster: mrdouble@ix.netcom.com Thirteen-year-old Kathy takes a train ride alone to visit her father. She meets a boy her own age and has her first sexual experience. Not rushed, not brutal, not exploitive, but inquisitive, innocent and sweet. Although I personally liked the story enough to give it a higher grade, what knocked points off was that it took so long to get to the sex, and the author was not a skilled enough writer to create reader interest with the buildup. There are also inconsistencies: for example, it's mentioned Kathy's seen her brother's cock before, but when she sees the boy's she states that it's her first. The Spa [C] When posted: 5/15/97 Where posted: ASS Author: Steve One bland couple goes to the house of another. In the course of drinking wine in the hot tub, they share their fantasies, and wind up having a foursome. You wouldn't think a four-way would be boring, but it came off that way. Michael did this. Jenny did that. Then Mary joined in. Put slot A in slot B, fold flap over. This was supposed to be someone's actual experience...but, like most real-life experiences, sex acts need embellishment and a good storytelling technique to make them something interesting to hear about. Disney erotic fanfic [A] When posted: 5/17/97 Where posted: ASS Author: Various Poster: "Col. Kink" A batch of Disney-related erotic fanfic has appeared lately where the familiar cartoon characters do things old Walt, or even Michael Eisner, would be shocked at. You might wonder what kind of adult would pervert a child's movie like this, but the truth is all of these were playful in spirit and lots of fun. Of course, the nice thing about writing fanfic is you only have to work on the plot--the characters, settings, and the descriptions of them already being familiar to the reader and writer from the film, comic or TV show. There were more of these than the ones I've reviewed here, so if you want to find the rest, I suggest a search using the keyword Disney. Although all posted by the same person, these stories appear to have been written by different authors, some of whom are credited, some not. Note to reposters: In the future please include the name and email address, if known, of the original poster. It makes it easier to facilitate correspondence with them and result in the generation of more great stories. Disney: Ariel's First Masturbation Author: ? One of the things that always bothered me about Disney's "The Little Mermaid" was her name. "Ariel" is the name of an air sprite (in Shakespeare) and the Little Mermaid lives in the sea. Wouldn't Undina be more appropriate? Anyway, a sweet little story detailing Ariel's examination of her new human body. Not excitingly sexy, but a logical development from the movie. Disney: Little Mermaid in Bondage - Part 1 Disney: Little Mermaid in Bondage - Part 2 Author: ?? The author's titles for these two are "Prince Eric's Amusement" and "Ariel's Continuing Education." After her wedding Ariel discovers her new husband is into BDSM. He introduces her to the delights of his dungeon. The scenario follows the standard newcomer-to-the-scene plotline with some unique twists from the movie: instead of nipple clamps, Sebastien the crab uses his claws, and for another torture Ariel is double- plugged and forced to swim in a skintight mermaid sheathe fin. This was the best-written of the stories that I read and the most true to the characters--Sebastien, Flounder and Ariel really WOULD act this way in this situation. There's also a plea for sexual tolerance (Prince Eric says, "Anything that takes place in private between consenting adults is legal and exempt from royal censure. It's only when it involves real abuse or children that the Kingdom takes an interest.") with an interesting side plot about gay mermaids and mermen coming out from "under the shell." Disney: Jasmine's Rape Author: Pencildragon (address unknown) Jafar escapes from his lamp in the Cave of Wonders and conspires with his parrot Iago for sexual revenge on Aladdin and Jasmine. Cute, not brutal, despite the title. There's B&D between the enspelled couple, then Raja the tiger pleasures Jasmine with his tongue, then Aladdin is changed into a woman for some lesbian sex. There were two more Jasmine stories I didn't read: "Jasmine's Monkey Business" and "Jasmine's Wedding Night." On author Elf Sternberg's homepage (www.halcyon.com/elf/journals) there's some more Jasmine stories listed under "Other fiction." Disney: Tickling (Cinderella, Ariel, Belle, Jasmine) Author: hlprice@prairienet.org The title the author gave is "The Wonderful World of Tickling." The framing device between these four vignettes is that the protag has a magical video camera that lets him travel into cartoon-land (as in Ralph Bakshi's "Cool World") to film well- tickled Disney heroines at their most helpless. This one was hilarious. No sex, unless you consider tickling a form of sex. My favorite was when the talking mice have a go at licking Cinderella's clit. Hmmm. Let me repeat the question I mentioned first. What kind of adult would pervert children's movies like this? Lady Cyrrh@ aol.com -- +--------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `------------+ | story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us | story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us | | Archive site +--------------------+------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | \ .../assm/faq.html> /