Message-ID: <6195eli$9712081853@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: From: Lady Cyrrh Subject: The Annex Reviews 12/7/97 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Content-transfer-encoding: 7bit Content-type: text/plain; charset=US-ASCII Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: X-Original-Message-ID: <79a850a2.348a5866@aol.com> X-Is-Review: yes Spare the Rod, Jungle Kitty (M/M Star Trek, spanking) Kelly Gets a New Pair of Shoes, Tony Wang (F sluttification, mc, oral, mast) A Passing Thought, uxoclean (M/F tryst) Damage Control, MK (bizarre poetry) Table for Two, Solstice (mc short) La Kajira, Carol Parsons (M/F Gor slave) The Master's Castle, Parts 1 and 2, Endemoniada69 (M/F Gor slave) Hiya gang. Hope everyone had a nice Thanksgiving. A new newsgroup has come to my attention-- alt.startrek.creative.erotica.moderated. In case you haven't guessed, it features erotic fanfic (including slash) set in the Star Trek universe with NO SPAM, unlike the unreadable alt.sex.startrek.fetish. Since I am still on my Star Trek slash kick, I'll be reviewing stories from this newsgroup every now and then, beginning with the one below. Spare the Rod [A] When posted: 12/2/97 Where posted: ASCEM (alt.startrek.creative.erotica.moderated) Author: Jungle Kitty Poster Address: jkitty@accesscom.com Captain Kirk and Mr. Spock are spending a quiet evening playing chess when Kirk decides he wants to play footsie (!) Spock gets annoyed and threatens to spank him. Kirk thinks he's teasing and is very surprised when Spock carries out his threat: "Jesus, Spock! It's supposed to be *playful!*" They later fuck and make up. This was a fun story, slash and spank combined. As I just can't visualize Kirk and Spock physically having sex--the same way I can't picture Jane Jetson physically having sex--after a while I just thought of them as two actors playing the roles of Kirk and Spock, which in a way they are. The dynamics of the relationship were handled skillfully--Spock being alternately smartass, wistful, and logical--and there seemed to be sly references to the conventions of K/S stories as well. I far prefer reading Star Trek erotica to watching the show, as the fanfic characters are a lot less wooden. Kelly Gets a New Pair of Shoes [A-/B+] When posted: 12/2/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: Tony Wang Address: tonyw44@prodigy.net A blonde receives a mysterious pair of red "fuck-me" shoes from an anonymous admirer. She puts them on and becomes immediately entranced. At this point I thought the story would concern shoe or foot fetishes, but things took a different turn. The shoes soon begin to control Kelly, transforming her into a total slut. In the time-worn manner of total sluts, her pubic hair falls out, her tits and buttocks grow, her IQ falls, she wears gobs of makeup and provocative clothes, and blows and fucks every man she meets. Finally, a mysterious trench-coated man comes to collect her...he's the one who gave her the shoes, and now that her transformation to sluthood is complete, she's going to be auctioned off to the highest bidder. Ah, we should all be so lucky. It's always enjoyable to read about normal women (and men) being slowed turned into empty-headed fucksluts, and this story didn't disappoint, ending on a bit of an ominous note. I've got three quibbles though. 1.) The lead character was already a tanned, slim, leggy, well-toned blonde--which equals hot slutty chick in most contemporary porn--so why the hell does she need the shoes? 2.) It was annoying that we kept getting "Kelly this" "Kelly that" "The leggy blonde did..." "The slut sucked..." What is wrong with using "she" and "her?" 3.) Why do all sluts have to look like Penthouse Pets? A Passing Thought [C] When posted: 11/28/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: UXOclean Address: uxoclean@aol.com In this story, a man tells a woman he's met in cyberspace what will happen when he meets her for real-life sex in his natty silk boxer shorts. Their adventure wasn't bad in the sex department, but it was simply awful in style, sounding like the stacatto utterances of a robot: "Your wetness gushes onto me. We are hot and sweaty. You are just beginning. You eye my cock. We lay together for a while. You finally decide to move. It is time to abuse me. To exert control. You want to see me lick up my sperm. " Danger, Will Robinson! Red alert! Red alert! The author wanted advice on this, and I say, Get rid of that second person voice!!! It's stupid and annoying. A good edit wouldn't hurt, preferably by someone who knows how to write stories. Damage Control [unrated] When posted: 12/2/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: MK Address: martinkn@james.stud.ntnu.no I won't even try rating this, because it made no sense. A sort of long Allen Ginsburg/ William S. Burroughs freeform poem. Some interesting use of the English language. Otherwise, don't bother to read it, as there's no porn. There, I can throw it off my hard drive now. Table for Two [A] When posted: 12/7/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: Solstice Address: solstice@frontiernet.net Three Stooges-like slapstick meets mind control in this story, told entirely in the dialogue between a waiter and his customer. The young lady sees hypnotism occurring at another table and demands that the waiter do something about it...while he, in snobby-tux style, refuses to acknowledge anything alarming is going on. Very short (just a bit over 300 words) but funny. La Kajira [B+] When posted: 11/27/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: Carol Parsons Address: myescape@voyager.net The Master's Castle, Parts 1 and 2 [A] When posted: 11/29/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: endemoniada69 Address: endemoniada69@hotmail.com John Norman is science fiction and fantasy writer who's been pushing out books since the late 60s, all on the same theme-- beautiful slave girls in sexual thrall to the manly barbaric masters of the savage world of Gor. They've never won a Hugo (or good reviews from critics) but over the years have amassed a small but faithful cult following, mainly on the strength of the erotic scenarios they contain. The main one is this: all women, even the most intelligent, independent and powerful, secretly desire to be sexually submissive slaves who serve their master's every whim, and it's pounded into the reader again and again like the writer thinks it's the most natural order of things in the universe. If, as a woman, this attitude makes you see red, you're not alone. I felt the same the way until I realized the books were total trash suitable only for the titillating D/s thrills they contain...a sex toy made of pulp paper. Anyway, in the books (there are about 30) Earth women are kidnapped, branded on the thigh, tied by the wrists and ankles, dragged around by the hair, whipped, forced to dance erotically, and are thrown in bundles of furs so their masters can screw their heads off...and if they fail to be pleasing or submissive enough, they can be sliced into fish bait and used to catch sharks. They're also traded among their masters like baseball cards, and one of concepts Norman emphasizes most is how they are treated like consumer goods: caught, chained, branded, auctioned, distributed to god knows where, suffering such indignities along the way as being constantly renamed things like Butter-pan or Honeycake while remaining as interchangeable as McDonald's hamburger patties. Geez, all this is getting me wet. The strength of this scenario lies in its conception not in its execution, as Norman is a lousy writer. I'd give him a C-. You have to wade through pages of boring barbarian posturing, stale, repetitive dialogue, and windy prose before you get to the good stuff, i.e. the slave girls. In spite of the bad writing, the concept definitely strikes a primal chord in a lot of people's fantasies. Here they've inspired not one, but two imitators. "La Kajira" is written by a gal who does phone sex fantasies for a living, and if the story is any indication, she's competent if none too creative. The narrator decides to submit erotically to her lover, and he buys a shiny new collar so she can play the role of his slave girl. Unlike the Norman books (which avoided actual sex; we never even hear the word "breast") the master goes down on the slave girl first. Well, you know what I say about the Lion's Share Rule. Celeste really mocked this story, but to me it was an adequate execution of its type and better than the original, because you didn't have to put up with the boring We-Are-Barbarians-Hear- Us-Roar storyline. If you're wondering about the title, "Kajira" is Gor-ese for slave girl, but the "La" seems to have wandered in from south of the border. On the other hand, "The Master's Castle" was a cross between Anne Rice's Sleeping Beauty books and Gor...when a young slave girl welcomes her master back from the hunt and tries to please him with the fires of passion burning within her but not knowing how to quench them (or something like that.) It was better written than "La Kajira" but I didn't like it as much because the pacing dragged. In that way it was similar to, but more colorful than, Norman's leaden prose. Anyway, slave girl Miranda goes with Master to an inn, where she ogles another slave girl and is spanked. He sells her casually to another Master, who whips her when she fails to properly mop his castle floor, then has her suck his cock. The story was OK, if slow, but I couldn't believe the ending. After weeks of worshipful servitude and fiery passions, she still hasn't had an orgasm? Yet when the Master ejaculates down her throat, she feels completely fulfilled without having her own release? No way. Anyway, if you're really interested in Gor, there's a newsgroup for AOL subscribers dedicated to the books, where masters and slaves role-play their fantasies. They got so steamy the group was actually forced to close down briefly last year. This is a true story. honest! Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh -- +--------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `------------+ | story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us | story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us | | Archive site +--------------------+------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | \ .../assm/faq.html> /