Message-ID: <4898eli$9710161140@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com Subject: The Annex Reviews, 10/13/97 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: X-Original-Message-ID: <971016002114_-25281661@emout04.mail.aol.com> X-Is-Review: yes News from the continuing war on spam: Eli (moderator of alt.sex.stories.moderated) has written a Statement of Policy for alt.sex.stories.moderated that everyone should read, echoing some of Ole Joe's comments and mine, too. I will try to get his permission to post it on my website. Sadly, even some of the moderated newsgroups are being inundated with spam. Soc.sexuality.bondage-bdsm has been recently flooded with tripe like CUNTS, CLITS AND SLITS and SEX SEX SEX SEX. Are spammers getting more sneaky, or is someone asleep on the job? On a happier note, a new newsgroup has joined us: alt.sex.stories.gay.moderated. The moderater is Mykkhal (moderated.stories@bigfoot.com). In one of his first posts to this newsgroup, Mykkhal had this to say about the Nifty Stories archive, which archives gay, lesbian and TG stories. I thought it worthwhile to repeat here as I know many ASS and ASSM writers use it. " 2. The Nifty Archives - (not technically ASSGM business, but important nonetheless) Guys, it is time to take a little action here. I received a lot of offers regarding some limited financial support before I set up this group, and other than a software purchase, there hasn't been any real cost for it. Instead, I'd like those of you who offered, and preferably everyone possible to make a small (or large) donation to the Nifty Archives. The Nifty Archivist provides his archival site as a service to the gay and lesbian community. However, he relies upon reader support to be able to maintain it. I was just told that he is averaging over 20,000 hits a day. For those who don't know, the more hits you have on your server, the more you have to pay to have your site. "OUR" readership of his site is increasing his costs, creating higher server demands, additional hardware demands, etc. It is time we gave a little something back. He makes a very modest request for donations at his site, but I'm going to make a less modest one: If we don't support him, we are going to lose this service. How long it will take, I don't know, but unless he receives some financial support it isn't going to last forever. A small core of authors (mind you I said authors, not readers) have been making some contributions, but this is not enough to keep the site going with the increasing storage space required. If you enjoy reading the stories in those archives, it is time to cough up a couple bucks. Just think that if the Nifty Archivist received only $1 for each of the hits he received in just one day, he'd have enough money to keep his site going for quite some time. I encourage all of you to visit his site and follow the links for donating to the archives. I think a small donation is the least we can do, considering the large amount of time, effort, and personal financial support the Nifty Archivist has put in to provide a service for "US". By the way, these opinions expressed are strictly my own, and the information I relayed was forwarded to me by an author, not the Nifty Archivist. Okay, I'll get down off that soap box now =) " Sorry, but I don't know the Nifty Archivist's address. Readers? Erotic BDSM Story: Linda's Epic Adventures in Life, Part 1 [B-/C+] When posted: 10/12/97 Where posted: ASSB Author: Master Paul Posted by: Monica Chu Address: ntendo@hotmail.com In this story, a hardbitten stripper reflects on her first BDSM experience: it begins when she makes the mistake of bashing a drunk male customer with a beer bottle when he jams his fingers in her pussy and asshole. A perfectly understandable reaction, but Hilda, the strip club owner's girlfriend, doesn't see it that way. She pulls the stripper downstairs to the "special room" the staff uses to discipline its "whores" (no self-respecting exotic dancer would stand for such insults these days--many of them are unionized, no kidding) and straps her into a chair-like frame that rotates. Hilda then inserts dildoes in the stripper's ass and pussy and flogs her there. The B/D gear was nicely described, but outside of that, the story didn't have a lot of appeal. Part of it was due to the language: " 'You goddamn dumb whore!' screamed Hilda, 'How many fucking times do I have to tell you I handle the assholes and you don't ever, ever hit em with anything unless they ask you to, UPSTAIRS! " I wanted to wash the characters' mouths out with a bar of soap. This sort of language occured in every other paragraph and brought to mind bikers, drug dealers, and other lowlifes. While some people may find them sexy, this strata of society doesn't do anything for me by notoriety of their substance abuse, unkempt appearance, and body odor. There were many smaller sins, from grammatical errors to misspellings: for example, the writer had the annoying habit of enclosing each sentence of dialogue in quotation marks even though the sentences were all in the same paragraph. The story also lost effectiveness because it was narrated in flashback rather than present tense, which made it lose what little momentum it had. Finally, it's far more fun in a BDSM story to have the slave victim be a newbie, wannabe, or experienced player who juggles their sub tendencies with the responsibilities of real life. Strippers, in the public imagination anway, are supposed to be total sluts who eagerly enjoy any sort of sex act...which meant the kinky bite of the acts in this story were diluted by having them happen to one. New Spam Story: 1997 Teen Blow Job Tournament [A+] When posted: 10/12/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: Daphne Xu Address: daphne@nym.alias.net Malinov is running a spam short story contest in which entrants write a short (1,000 word or less) story with a title taken from the title of a SPAM post. (There is no deadline.) This story was one of the entries. I'm very glad I read it. The story was reminiscent of those Twilight Zone pieces like Dierdre's or Seurat's in that an everyday situation suddenly becomes sexualized. In this case, it's an intercollegiate athletic competition. But the teams of young women aren't competing in field hockey or volleyball. Nude and blindfolded, they're giving blowjobs to a team of lucky males. The narrator of this adventure is a Chinese exchange student unfamiliar with American customs, which gives the story a nice touch: a double dose of strangeness worthy of the best literary fantasy out there. The blowjob competition is thoroughly detailed, and the narrator's reactions were believable for a Chinese student in the US. The only part I went "huh?" at is the fact the participants were required to cough up a $500 entrance fee, which seemed rather steep; some of them were also written as being reluctant, which belies the fact that they're supposed to be there voluntarily. But this was an excellent story anyway, probably the best multiple-partner-teen-sex-in-school story I've seen (there've been quite a few of them.) The story ends on a nice note too, with the revelation a "Teen Cunnilingus" contest is soon to be held. We can only hope. The Virgin Mary Maguire [A-] When posted: 10/11/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: Deirdre Ng Address: DeidreNg@aol.com This was a bizarre little story concerning the manipulations of a junior- high slut among the Catholic clergy and in a corporate law office. Like the story above, it takes place in a strange world that's slightly off-kilter from the one modern teenagers inhabit. Mary McGuire lives in a time-warp world before Vatican II where corporeal punishment still reigns in Catholic school. She's determined to stay a virgin, but she's hardly chaste--she gets into trouble when she displays her genitals as she's giving a report on female sexuality. Sent to Father McMartin's office, she shows him the same marks of Eve, makes him wear her sopping panties over his face, then ties him to a chair with his shoelaces while giving him a hand job. Merrily leaving him to be discovered by the parochial school's board of directors, she accompanies her dad to career day at his office. On the way she exposes herself in the back of his sedan to truck drivers, then gives his boss a handjob and wrangles a promotion for dad and a summer internship for herself. The story was cleverly written and a real page-turner, with some truly depraved touches like the creative use of rosary beads. (Hint: it's the same thing they were used for in the butter story I reviewed two weeks ago.) However, as a reader I just didn't buy it. There's several reasons for this. Number one is I went to parochial school in my formative years, and from firsthand experience I can tell you that priests and nuns are incorrigibly dull, narrow-minded souls rather than sexually intriguing ones. Yes, Lady Cyrrh was a Catholic. *Was.* Second, the teen in the story talked and connived way too maturely for a young girl--she was more Suzie Sleaze than Lolita. She also had a mysterious mind control power that was never explained. I half-expected she'd reveal herself as the actual Virgin Mary or something, but no luck. I also wondered why she was exposing herself before decrepit old men instead of sexy peachy-cheeked lads her own age. In sum, the entertainment value of this story depends on how much you enjoy fetishistic Catholic school rituals and smartass teen exhibitionists. I'm not a fan of either, but I did like the quality of writing in this piece, and that's why I gave it the rating I did. Gee, I just noticed the first, second and third stories of this review were all posted by Asian females. Wrestler's Rhapsody [A+] When Received: 10/3/97 Author: Cathy Payne Address: cpayne@sympatico.ca The author sent me this, and I believe it's the first story I've seen from a Canadian woman. Note to the author: You may want to post this now that it's been reviewed. This story crossed several genres: spanking, first time, and wrestler. Uh- huh. Wrestler. Anyway, the narrator is a homeless teen who is adopted by a professional wrestler named Killer and his family. He's big. Very big, and he takes his role as guardian quite seriously: he tells her no lying, swearing, or brushes with the law. She shapes up under his wing, but finds, as she nears her seventeenth birthday, that she is attracted to him as well and plans for him to be "the one" who takes her virginity. Her plotting includes catching him in a lie and punishing him for it by parading around in seven different lingerie outfits, each of which he has to unlace (no touching!) before ravishing her at the end of the last modeling session. But things don't go quite as planned, and the smug, plotting spanker soon becomes the spankee over Killer's burly knee. This story was very enjoyable and very female-oriented; like Joe Parson's "When Morning Comes" it might serve as a good introduction to erotica for someone who's always been hesitant about reading it before. The story had just the right balance of sex, sexual tension, and background; nothing was left inadequately described. There was a also a tiny bit of a romance-novel feel to it--not strong, but it was there-- particularly in the banter between the girl and her deflowerer. The only suggestion I would make is to give a paragraph or two of background on the girl (where are her parents?) but all in all, women who dig wrestler's bodies will like this tale, and even those who don't will. Mint Green Dodge Dart, Part I [A-] When posted: 10/11/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: Mouth Breather Address: mouthbrthr@aol.com The author says of this story, "The sexual fantasy soon to pour out of my head borders on the sophistication of the pre-pubescent." I wouldn't call it pubescent so much as the kind of light, fun romp that authors like DG, Mike Hunt, and Tom Bombadil have done so well. Two beautiful, statuesque lesbians hire a stupendously hung guy ("With my full payment, I knew, I could get that reduction surgery I had always wanted.") to participate in a sexual encounter with them. He arrives at their isolated estate in a mint-green Dodge Dart...which I can picture exactly...and soon finds out the 10 grand he's getting includes some kink when one of the ladies carries a strange leather harness into the bedroom with her. No sex occurs, but we're primed. I enjoyed the descriptions in here, which were slightly reminiscent of tough-guy detective fiction. There were a few strange misspellings, such as "She lost her composer for a second" but outside of that, things were very clean for a first draft. I am looking forward to part two. Letter to Sarah [A] When posted: 10/4/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: Bear Address: thebear@io.com This is one of the first stories I've seen from The Bear. He's also written two entries for Lord Malinov's contest. This story has one of those classic erotica setups that you just HAVE to read through. College coed Sarah receives a package in the mail containing some sexy Victoria Secret's underthings and a list of instructions. She's to go to a certain motel room on a certain date and time, let the occupant of the room blindfold her, then dance like a wanton slut and present herself on the bed for some serious fucking. Naturally, the letter gets her very excited. But the problem is, she doesn't know which of her two boyfriends wrote it, Brian or Tom...because they're roommates and share each others' computer and belongings. Dangerous game you're playing there, Sarah! The story ends as she knocks on the motel room door, and Bear says more is to come. I'm guessing she gets a double surprise. The only thing I didn't like about the story was the come-on-my-tits- and-face-scene. Even though it was prettily described as a "liquid pearl necklace" I can't see a young woman being too happy with goo squirted into her hair, especially as the lover has neglected her climax in favor of his own. Nonetheless, this was a very nice story, and I'd like to see it continued. Objections [A] When posted: 9/13/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: Tigger Address: tigger@alices.com A new story by Tigger, always a pleasure. It's one of the most effective treatments of femdom I've seen. The story is science fiction and takes place in a world where Bill and Al and the rest of their cabinet perish in a plane crash. Newt Gingrich becomes President and foments a Vietnam-like war in Philippines, necessitating a new draft. Jerry and Mark are two young men who try to worm out, Mark by his "sole male in the family" status, and Jerry as a consciencous objector. As a CO, Jerry is sent to a camp high in the Rockies where he's transformed into a woman...and a prime baby- making machine whose duty it is to pop out male cannon fodder for the conservative state. Although this concept is quite horrendous (it's like a TG version of Margaret Atwood's "The Handmaid's Tale") the story benefited from Tigger's light, amused style, and was richly and authentically detailed as well. That's the great thing about Tigger; the stories are so *real.* They are also very different from one another; this writer keeps moving on to new challenges. I'd like to point out, too, that though the story made me laugh, it also has a sobering side as a cautionary tale. 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