Message-ID: <3710eli$9709041115@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: From: Celeste801@aol.com Subject: {ASS} Celestial Reviews 213 - Sept 3 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: X-Original-Message-ID: <970903233256_1093751305@emout18.mail.aol.com> X-Is-Review: yes Celestial Reviews 213 - September 3, 1997 Note: It's been back-to-school lately. Times like this make me grateful for the guest reviewers! Final note: Remember: even though someone else may be posting my reviews for me, my e-mail address is still Celeste801@aol.com. - Celeste "A Day in the Life of Suzy Jenkins" by Frank McCoy (incestuous humor) 9.5,6, 6 "All Alone" by Unknown Author (masturbation) 9, 8, 8 "Caught Between the Scylla and Charibdes..." by Absinthe (sexual cruelty) 6, 4, 2 "The Computer Flirt" by Taria (cyber-threesome) 10, 10, 10 "AOL Cybersex (with a Twist)" by FauxReal59 (humorous cybersex) 10, 10, 10 Guest Reviews: "Robin & the Catwoman" by Ann Douglas (superhero sex) 8, 8, 9 "A Night To Remember" by Saucy Wench (sex slavery) 9, 8, - "Presentation" by Solstice (hypnosis) 10, 10, 9 "Connie Gets Tutored" by Connie (college sex) 9.5, 7, 7 Reposted Reviews: * "A Matter Of Curiosity" by James Charles Lynn (threesome) 10, 9, 8 "A Day in the Life of Suzy Jenkins" by Frank McCoy (mccoyf@millcomm.com). This is a satirical script (complete with commercials) for a television show in which the young heroine is eager to get pregnant by her father and Mom is helping the process along. As the author himself admits, the humor is pretty heavy-handed. I assume the humor is intended to carry an incest story to the extreme in order to make the not-to-subtle point that people who act this way would be really flaky. A major problem is that the script doesn't really sound like a real television show, nor do the commercials sound like real commercials. Ratings for "A Day in the Life of Suzy Jenkins" Athena (technical quality): 9.5 Venus (plot & character): 6 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6 "All Alone" by Unknown Author (cottoncandy65@hotmail.com). The heroine of this story is home alone, ready to watch an x-rated movie her brother Luke has loaned her. Normally she enjoys watching guys fuck girls in the movies, but this time ole Luke has left her an ff fuck flick. The movie turns her on, and so she takes a sensuous bath, shaves her pussy, and just generally has a good ole time. The story is very short and has little character development, but the atmosphere is really pretty sexy. This is essentially a freebie that is part of an ad for other stories at the designated website. Ratings for "All Alone" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 "Caught Between the Scylla and Charibdes..." by Absinthe (vortex@mis.net). Last night I had a really interesting dream. It was intense. It had something to do with sex, needing to have my teeth fixed, riding a bus, and suddenly realizing that it was a dream but not being able to wake up from the dream. As I said, it was intense and interesting; but as I relate it to you right now, I'm sure there must have been more to it than this, because what I am telling you is boring and incoherent. So it is with this story. The story's title is really what caught my attention. However, after reading the story, I have no idea why this title goes with this story. As far as I can see, the author might have had five stories and five titles and matched them at random. The female narrator is either being raped or made love to. Whichever, she enjoys it - especially when the guy uses the knife, which draws blood, which (as far as I can see) evaporates mysteriously. The author quotes Faust; but I suspect this was a blind selection from Bartlett's - quotes, not pears, that is. At first I thought the author was changing verb tenses for a reason, but then I decided she just didn't care. In addition, many of the thoughts simply don't make sense: "He slides his erect cock into my pussy, which is bulging and really slick inside." The next line says "she's really tight." I guess it is possible that a pussy could be really bulging, but did the author really mean to say that the cock was bulging? And exactly what was really slick? And with all this bulging slickness, why was she so really tight, especially since she was enjoying it so much? I guess I can best summarize my reaction by saying that I'm pretty sure I believe the author hoped that I would understand what I thought she said, but I am not sure that she realizes that what I read might not be what she meant. And believe me - that sentence makes more sense than this story. Ratings for "Caught Between the Scylla and Charibdes..." Athena (technical quality): 6 Venus (plot & character): 4 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 2 "The Computer Flirt" by Taria (TariaT@aol.com). This is an extremely creative and sexy story. It's about two ladies who contact another lady online for cybersex. Kim gives Alicia and Diana the instructions, and they do what they are told. A good time is had by all - including the reader. I strongly recommend this story. Cybersex is an interesting topic. There are two reasons why I myself don't cyber: (1) I would never really know who the person is on the other end and (2) I don't like the idea of playing with relationships . Three reasons actually - I'm also extremely happy with what I've got. The upside of cybersex is that it can be extremely safe. You can engage in really exotic or kinky stuff without risk of STDs or physical harm. You don't even have to know about bad breath or middle-age bulges or any other physical features that might interfere with more direct relationships. In addition, you are limited only by your imagination; and as this story shows, you can combine cybersex with actual sex. But there can be some downsides. Please don't take this as a sermon. Maybe I am being excessively cautious. My suggestion is simply that you think before you pop your cybercherry. First, I wouldn't really know who the other person is. It could be a guy pretending to be a girl (or vice versa) or an eight-year-old pretending to be twenty-eight. It could be a person on the rebound from a shaky relationship who expects more from cybersex than I am willing to give. Real, in-person, direct relationships are risky; but online relationships are extremely open to deception. You may not care, but at least sometimes the possibility of deception would bother me. Second, I don't want to jeopardize my relationship with my husband by becoming really intimate with someone else. I know it's across cyberspace, but intimacy is intimacy. I may start out being frivolous and find things getting serious. Even more problematic is the fact that I wouldn't really know the personality or state of mind of the person I'm cybering with. For example, he may SAY he wants to just have fun, but he may actually be lonely and expect a lot more than I am willing to give. So how does cybersex differ from sex stories? Well, sex stories are clearly fiction and they are not interactive. No real personalities are directly involved. For example, I can get all hot and bothered about a story, but at least I know my relationship to the author. Quite likely lots and lots of you disagree with me, and I sincerely hope you have fun with your cybersex. I merely suggest that you think before you hump - er, jump. Meanwhile, be sure to read this story - as well as the next one. Ratings for "The Computer Flirt" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "AOL Cybersex (with a Twist)" by FauxReal59 (posted by modemac@tiac.net). I think I've seen this story before, but I still enjoyed it. The man and woman are engaged in cybersex, but the guy has trouble getting it up. Things keep going wrong - unbelievable and funny things! This is an excellent little story. Ratings "AOL Cybersex" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 "Robin & the Catwoman" by Ann Douglas (AnnDouglas@aol.com). Guest review by Tooshoes. When the Internet first boomed three or four years ago, erotic fan-fiction and parody was born. Free from censorship and protected by anonymity, writers feverishly told stories dying to be told -- stories that were once confined to underground magazines and jokes told in private. They told of what Gilligan did with Ginger behind the bushes. They told of what the Little Mermaid did with the mer-men. And they told of what happened between Batman and Catwoman during the commercial breaks. Comic book superheroes were among the more popular subjects for erotic fan fiction, especially the TV show Batman. Although this subject matter is ostensibly for children, the comic books and TV show dabble in erotic themes like bondage and sado-masochism. All superheroes, male and female, wear skin tight, highly revealing costumes, but the most erotic article of a hero's costume is their mask. Losing one's secret identity is tantamount to losing one's virginity. So it's little wonder that the sexually charged superhero stories spawned a genre of erotic literature. Ann Douglas's "Robin and the Catwoman" was among the first such stories widely read on the Internet. This story begins where the TV show would normally end: Robin is captured and in great peril at the hands of the Catwoman. The announcer would normally break in about now, saying: "WHAT GHASTLY FATE AWAITS THE BOY WONDER? CAN BATMAN STOP CATWOMAN IN TIME?" What made these cliff-hangers exciting wasn't just the possibility of death. It was the domination, and in the case of Catwoman, the possibility of sexual play. Of course, we were always disappointed when Batman & Robin escaped untouched. Finally, with Ann Douglas' story, we got some satisfaction -- as do our heroes. Over the past few years, other stories have taken on the same subject matter, making this story seem cliched in retrospect. Ann Douglas herself has done better with "Batgirl & Robin" and "Supergirl", creating totally original stories and adding depth to the characters. But "Robin and the Catwoman" has created a naughty little homage to the familiar stories and characters. It may not seem as fresh today as when she first wrote it, but it's still a must read for anyone turned on by men in tights or women who purr. Ratings for "Robin & the Catwoman" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 "A Night To Remember" by Saucy Wench (WenchSaucy@aol.com). Guest review by Anne747. Quick disclaimer before I start. I'm not fond of D/s stories, so the personal opinions of this reviewer may be swayed by this fact. How realistic should porn/erotica be? The way you feel about this question will likely affect your enjoyment of it. I've written some wildly unrealistic stories myself. The more I read and write, I have to say that totally unrealistic pieces don't appeal to me at all. I want to be able to see the possibility that someone might actually do what the story suggests. I just don't see that here. The basic premise of this story is that two young women agree to be "slaves for a night" to a dominant couple they barely know. The story ends with them being tied together and being "suck slaves" to ten or more people for over four hours. The binding of the two women is covered in detail, which is probably the appeal of this type of story. I don't know. The actual sex is only covered in brief detail. I'm guessing this is because the author knows that four hours of repetitive oral sex scenes just wouldn't be enjoyable for the reader. That's my problem with the piece. Even if a woman has submissive fantasies, would she find this a fun evening? I'm guessing no. I also have serious reservations about the line, "I trusted Mistress. and Master." There isn't enough plot development to support this statement. Some of the brief set-up and this other lines are thrown in to make it consensual. A noble thought, but maybe a more established relationship between dominant and submissive would help. The writing is fairly good. I'm just not sure it weaves a reliable fantasy. Probably a good consensual submissive fantasy for men. A quick spellcheck would have cleared up the very few errors, and a proofreader could have picked up a few more typos, but these were minor. Only one thing - the use of the word "cunny" seemed out of place. I suppose this has something do with the "Saucy Wench" theme. However the setting is modern, and this is the only reference. I'm going to cop out and not give this story an "appeal to reviewer" number. A low number wouldn't really be fair to the writer. And I've yet to find a submissive fantasy that I would give more than a 5. Maybe that should be a challenge... to find one that I would give a higher number (don't hold your breath though). Ratings for "A Night To Remember" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 8 Anne747 (appeal to reviewer): N/A "Presentation" by Solstice. Guest review by Mike Hunt. Beth is helping the gentleman prepare his presentation for her board meeting tomorrow. A couple of sentences into the story she asks "How'd you like to be hypnotized?" I knew right then that I wouldn't enjoy this story, because I gave up on mind-control shit when I was 14. It doesn't work. And it's silly. Who wants to fuck a corpse, or a live body that has as much will? You might as well go down to the dirty book store and buy a latex vagina. "Conquest" implies "contest". You don't make General in the army by taking unoccupied land. Oops. I enjoyed the story a lot, but more because the writer is a good writer than for the subject matter. The author walks slowly through the hypnotic entry and makes the process interesting. None of that "In a flash I was a zombie, unable to control a single thought..." In "Presentation" the denouement is tempered somewhat, and the entry of Beth's secretary extends the sex scene to a fine and fitting climax. The conclusion turns out not to be the end, and I always enjoy a story with a couple of surprises along the way. Far better than those "I came in buckets. THE END." things that litter the landscape in these parts. The author says it's his first effort. For an opener, it's a good one. Ratings for "Presentation" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Mikeus (appeal to reviewer): 9 "Connie Gets Tutored" by Connie (Posted as "The Student" by kristen78@aol.com). Guest review by Anne747. I have a serious question. Do women really write stories that give their age and measurements in the first paragraph? I've never thought so, but we'll ignore that for the basis of the review . The title is misleading, possibly on purpose. This is a twist on the classic D/s theme with teachers and students. Connie is a... well, let me use her own words: "I'm a junior in college. I'm 20, blond, and five feet six inches tall, quite pretty, and I have an athletic and very attractive figure: 35-23-34. I have very shapely legs, a tight rear, and my breasts, while not huge, are firm and ample for my body. Needless to say, I have no trouble attracting men." Her grades are above average, except for one class. Seems her English professor has it in for her. A conference is arranged for an evening meeting at the Professor's home. It turns out that not only is the Professor a lesbian, but, oh-my-god, a repressed "first time" lesbian. Who would have ever guessed? The story turns into a D/s piece at this point, with Connie controlling the professor. It's actually not a bad story, just incredibly predictable, even with the twist of Connie being the aggressor. This has to be a pitfall of some of the more common erotic plots. It can be downright impossible to come up with something fresh. There is actually very little sex in this story. Mostly it focuses on verbal domination with some physical contact at the end. I keep trying to think of a better "plot" for the piece, but I come up blank. Maybe a little more agonized conflict might help. I mean, we don't even know that Connie is bisexual or lesbian herself. Just that she comes up with a great way to get an A. Maybe even two scenes: the first ending with the professor throwing her out of the house, and perhaps a sex scene the next day in the office when she can't deny her own desires. In the end it's a fairly well written piece - probably better than the opening paragraph promises. I like lesbian pieces, but I just couldn't get into this one. Ratings for "Connie Gets Tutored" Athena (technical quality): 9.5 Venus (plot & character): 7 Anne747 (appeal to reviewer): 7 (only because it got me thinking about hot office scenes) * "A Matter Of Curiosity" by James Charles Lynn (THC Archives). The story labeled "Heat" by Unknown Author was actually by James Charles Lynn. Here is a review of another story by that author. Maybe he or someone else will repost it. Debi has been contemplating having sex with another woman, but she wants John to come along as a sort of security blanket. All goes well, but then Amy (the other woman) realizes that John may be feeling lonely; and so she finds a way to rectify that situation. They eventually become happy hedonists, much like the people in "The Trinity Trilogy" series. While recognizing the rough spots that are likely to occur in such a threesome, this story still manages to present some really hot sex in a plausible context. As I have said in the past, I can think of lots of reasons for not doing things like this, but the notion that it doesn't sound like fun is not one of my reasons. Ratings for "A Matter Of Curiosity" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 -- +--------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `------------+ | story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us | story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us | | Archive site +--------------------+------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | \ .../assm/faq.html> /