Message-ID: <3491eli$9709011152@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com Subject: The Annex Reviews 8/31/97 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: X-Original-Message-ID: <970831134448_1056055432@emout19.mail.aol.com> X-Is-Review: yes I swore to myself I'd send these reviews five times a month, and as August has been a very busy time for me, that means I've got to make things this last weekend. So hence this Review, which is sneaking only a day after my last one. Stud Slaves in Training [D+] When posted: 8/29/97 Where posted: ASS Author: "M" Address: slvbycbt@aol.com This was represented as "Chapter 7" though no mention was made of a larger work. I wouldn't call it a story. It was more like a description of someone's fantasy, like they didn't take the time to order it into narrative--that is, a linear sequence of events that creates the illusion of an event happening in real-life time. (If you're going "Huh?" now, don't worry. This is just another way of saying it stinks.) Brendan and Cory are two "studs" who are serving a household of three mistresses. They are slaves, and they also come under the thumb of female slaves who torture them as they prepare dinner in the kitchen: "Joy took control of the banana, and fucked him hard with it." All I can say is it must've been very underipe, or else it would have dissolved into puree by the third stroke. These vicious females also "...slap the boys' balls with hot spoons or even poke their nut sac with sharp two prong forks piercing their nuts." Call the ambulance! I don't THINK the author meant someone's scrotum was actually pierced with a fork, leading to great pain, blood loss, and infection, but it's a prime example of the sloppy writing happening here. The whole was mixed with the femdom messages of the superiority of women to men because their sexual arousal is not as evident and is less easily controlled (I say HAH!) and the bondage and humiliation of the men, which comes out dull even for this sort of material. Tammi.zip [D-] When posted: August Where posted: ASSB Author: Anonymous Boy was this awful. It was SO bad it had a horrid fascination, like watching a car crash occur in slow motion. Tammi is a 4'6 teenage girl with 34C knockers. Yeah, right. She's also an airhead, demonstrated by how she blithely walks out of the house without her bra and panties, and also is mixed up as to whether she's "I" or "Tammi" as the story wavers between first person and third person narrative...such as this part where Tammi is gagged by a vengeful acquaintance (reproduced exactly as it appeared in the story): "Cindi stuff her t-shirt in her mouth so she can't make so much noise. "Cindi please stop I promise I won't", I was able to finish as she cramed my t-shirt in my mouth." The plot is a typical revenge one: the other girls are pissed at Tammi for cockteasing all the boys, so they tie her up in front of a video camera and strip her. The boys paid them $5000 to do this. (Where the hell did teenage boys get that kind of money?) The other girls then diddle Tammy, causing her nipples to pop out three inches, and amazingly, even though she's not a mother, milk spurts out as well. Gallons and gallons of it. Then her clit pops out and she gets a 8-inch boner, which they force her to suck (I guess, like Marilyn Manson, she's got no lower ribs.) Though the numerous fallacies, mistakes, and sheer implausibilities gave this one a certain sleazy charm, I'm not going to waste any more time on it, 'cept to say it's up there with "Plan 9 from Outer Space." Too Close [B/B-] When posted: 8/29/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: chucktie@aol.com Address: Chucktie Told in first person by a professional rapist, this stories details the modus operandi of how he stalks, then rapes, an upper middle class housewife. The writing wasn't bad, but events came off as horrifying rather than arousing. I've got nothing against rape scenarios as a sexual fantasy. I thoroughly enjoyed "The Boss" and "Options" for example. But when they cut too close to the newspaper stories of reality, as in this story, the writer comes off as a psycho I'd rather avoid...right up there with that guy who's always writing about rotting undead corpses raping elven princesses. Kelly & Brandon - Night One [B+] When posted: 8/30/97 Where posted: ASS Author: Robb 42 Address: robb_42@hotmail.com Kelly and Brandon are a young man and woman who fuck each other. End of story. The writing here was pretty good, with a mild sense of humor, and the sex realistically believable. However, as with "Stud Slaves" (sorry for the comparison, Robb) it wasn't really a story, as there wasn't any plot, conflict, tension, or character development. There wasn't anything about the couple that was unique or interesting, other than the fact the man works for the gas company and the girl shares a room with her older sister. Writing well is one part of telling a good story; the other part is making it interesting. This author has the basics in place, which is good; all that's left is making things three-dimensional. One line stuck out in my mind: "Eat me please," she whispered softly. "Lick my cooter." Cooter is what they call turtles in the American south...in reference to the delicious soup they make. I can see eat my pussy...but eat my turtle? Website Review: The Mouse That Roared Site Name: Mousette's Website Address: http://poboxes.com/mousette Owner: Mousette Mousette has recently opened up her website and invited us all to take a look, so I thought I'd drop by. This is a very small site, and it was pretty basic: no graphics, no frames, no links, so shocking RGB colors. Just the index page, an interesting introduction to the site by Mousette herself, and three stories...just the right thing for filling up an hour or two on a lonely morning. The three stories were "Abduction" "Beach" and "The Ritual." All were female-oriented, dealt with variations on abduction, mild bondage and oral and anal sex, and were sensorial--that is, using the senses--in the way the best erotica is. As fantasies, I thoroughly enjoyed them. (You could tell they were written by a woman because of all the pussy-lapping and nipple nibbling.) Well, there was some cocksucking and rimming going on too, but these were just side dishes to the main course. In fact, that's probably the surest way you can tell the difference between male and female writers--who's getting the lion's share of the oral sex. I mean, for a female, sucking cock is nice, but gets boring after a while because there aren't that many physical sensations in it for you...the main turn-on is the amount of pleasure you're giving the guy. Flame me if you think I'm wrong. Anyway, I give them all an A. Mousette explains that more additions to the site are forthcoming, so I'll be checking in from time to time. Interface: B (Bare-bones, but easy to use) Content: A Will I visit again: Yes. Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com Please note that previous Reviews from May 97 on are archived at my website: http://users.aol.com/ladycyrrh -- +--------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `------------+ | story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us | story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us | | Archive site +--------------------+------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | \ .../assm/faq.html> /