Message-ID: <1431eli$9706121209@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: Path: qz!not-for-mail Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded X-Story-Submission: From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com Subject: The Annex Reviews 6/10/97 X-Is-Review: yes Explanation about the rating system: My rating system is different than Celeste's. I use a straight grade, A+ to D-, sometimes splitting it. What I give high marks to are, in no particular order of importance: originality, creativity, skillful use of the English language, and technical things like grammar and spelling. A poorly written dog may get a A+ because of its originality of conception, while a well-written chestnut like wife swapping can get a C simply because it's been done before. (Of course, my personal tastes figure in also, though I try to be fair.) Below the rating is when the story appeared. I realize that stories may appear on different servers at different times, but hopefully the date will give a rough idea of where to look. Below the date is where the story appeared (ASS = alt.sex.stories; ASSM = alt.sex.stories.moderated; ASSG = alt.sex.stories.gay; ASSB = alt.sex.stories.bondage.) After that is the name of the author, poster, or reposter, the address if different, and the homepage, if they have one. The Perils of Batgirl II [A] A Bondage Adventure Serial When posted: 6/8/97 Where posted: ASS Author: The Weatherman Reposted by: ccirillo@capital.net Batgirl vs. the Crime School for Girls [A+] When posted: 6/8/97 Where posted: ASS Author: S. Sneakly (sneakly@geocities.com) Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/SoHo/5268/ More superhero stories have been posted lately, including five by Ann Douglas about Supergirl, and these two about the adventures of Batgirl. Why is this variant of erotic fanfic so popular? Well, superheroes are larger than life, emotionally and physically; so it stands to reason they would have super sex as well. I've found that each hero or heroine occupies a distinct niche on the sexual spectrum. Superman and Supergirl deal with the effects of sexual isolation; the Incredible Hulk with sheer animalism; Spiderman with the issues of youth (as Peter Parker was originally a college student when bitten.) But, as EVERYONE knows, Batman and Batgirl are about fetish. Their rubber and latex body-molding unitards, leather boots and gloves, various Bat-gizmos, life-threatening B&D predicaments, and dungeon-like hideouts make them pure, unadulterated kink. We can happily blame this image on the late 1960s TV show with Adam West, Burt Ward, and Yvonne Craig (with Julie Newmar as Catwoman--meow!) as the comics weren't quite so campy. The recent series of Batman movies is upholding the tradition, with Val Kilmer sporting a thonged butt and codpiece in the last one, as well as molded rubber Bat-nipples on the sculpted pectorals of his Batsuit...a far cry from Adam Wests' dull nylon unitard. (Didja know his stunt double had to wear a girdle because of his beer belly? Didja know Burt Ward's cock had to be taped down sometimes under his batshorts because he kept getting unwanted erections?) Anyway, these stories have been inspired by the TV show and not the movie. "Perils" is a series of cliffhangers, each installment ending with a breathless recap: "WILL CATWOMAN DROWN BATGIRL IN THE HIDEOUS BONDAGE ADHESIVE? WHAT A STICKY SITUATION!" The story line too is very similar to the show, with the visit to Commisoner Gordon, the finding of a clue, the ambush by the villain, the first bondage peril, the finding of another clue, the second ambush and peril, etc. It's loads of fun. This Batgirl is more sensual than Yvonne Craig's, and Catwoman and her henchgirls are sexier too, tying each other up to keep in practice for their main job of being a foe to Our Heroes. They do the same to Batgirl, but also inflict very yummy tortures on her, all of which have to do with being tightly wrapped, immersed, or suspended in substances that give incredible orgasms as they electrocute or slowly strangle you. The file I had ends without the last sticky predicament being solved, so I guess there's a Part 3 out there somewhere. "Batgirl vs. the Crime School for Girls" is more sarcastic; it opens by saying Batman and Robin have been emasculated by King Tut to become eunuchs, Batman escaping in time to reattach his member, but abandoning Robin to be a castrati. It's hilarious for this reason alone. The rest of the story follows the general outline of the "Londinium" TV episodes where Batgirl attempts to foil Lady Penelope Peasop and her coeds of crime, save there's lesbian sex. It was broader than the other and rounded out the heroine more, and had a sly, satirical sense of humor I really liked. And it gives the perfect explanation for why none of the kinky villains ever ripped off Batman's or Batgirl's mask as they were tied up to see who they really were. Mr. or Ms. Sneakly (Yes I get this Hanna Barbera pop-cult reference) you're writing very finely tuned humor pieces. Have you thought of publishing professionally? Story Chronicles of {a CS Lewis series that the estate of CS Lewis does not want mentioned here}land [D-] When posted: 6/8/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: Travis Hubin The Wizard of Oz has been done, so has Disney. It was only a matter of time before someone got around to {a CS Lewis series that the estate of CS Lewis does not want mentioned here}. As the {a CS Lewis series that the estate of CS Lewis does not want mentioned here} titles were, and are, some of my favorite all time books, I was very eager to read this and see how they'd been perverted. I shouldn't have bothered. Now, I don't like to be mean and discouraging, especially as the author politely requested "Tell me how i can improve them or tell me how i'm doing" but I found this poorly written, choppy, laughable, and worst of all, not the least bit erotic or sexy. Suggestions? A. Pay attention to creative writing and English composition classes in school. B. Buy a book on how to write. C. Take a look at some of the other authors' work on the sex newsgroups and learn from the efforts of your betters. You were onto something original here; you just have to cultivate the skill to do it justice. As for specific suggestions, here's a good rule to start out with: When writing about sexual organs/functions/discharges, it's always wise to stick to no more than three or different apellations. More than that becomes an inadvertant laugh-fest. For example, I found "virgin hole" "pussy petals" "tiny quim" "massacred cunt " "spasming cunny" "iron- like cervix" "womb band " "straining uterine wall" in just two paragraphs. Just "cunt" or "pussy" would have been enough. Oh, and it's {a trademark of the estate of CS Lewis}, not Asland. The Spice Girls Get Horny [C] When posted: 6/9/97 Where posted: ASSM Author: S. J. Beddon (no address) Yes, this is the infamous Spice Girls story everyone's been asking a repost on. All three episodes. The Spice Girls are a female vocal group in the manner of Vanity Six, but without the wise (?) tutelage of Prince, or rather The Artist, as he's known now. Like Prince's proteges, they usually pose in bikinis or underwear, displaying their boobs, buns and nay-nays for male or lesbian delight, touting a feminist party line that is at odds with their nature. This would tolerable if only they had some of Madonna's up- yours insouciance, Jarboe's cool, or even PJ Harvey's knowing knockoff of sex-symbol stereotypes, but they don't. They're the creamiest and blandest of cheesecake. The stories are written as first-person memoirs by each Spice Girl (though they come across as interchangeable) detailing the orgies, gang-bangs, fucking and sucking that happens when a famous pop group goes on tour. These stories are very slutty in a manner similar to Suzy Sleaze's (whom I reviewed The Annex Reviews 5/21/97) where cunt juice and sperm flies everywhere in Waring blender style. (Sample of dialogue: "Oh shit....I'm gonna tank up your cunt full of cum!.....let me take it out, please! I wanna see it cum on you!") However, these stories have none of Suzie Sleaze's wit, humor or dumb-blonde trashiness. So the C, for lack of flair, taste, restraint, and style, which is really saying a lot for sex fiction of this nature. To be fair, those who do like mindless, fluid-oriented sex narrated by dumb pin-up cunts should like this, but I didn't, and in fact felt insulted by it. I believe one of the earmarks of good porn is that it should arouse whoever reads it regardless of their gender or sexual preference. But this was so aligned towards a male viewpoint--and I'll guess was written by a male in an attempt to get inside the head of a "hot" female--I can't see how any female, straight or gay, could like it or be turned on by it, even though it's narrated by a "she." If I'm wrong, you can feed my Spice Girls CDs to an angry pit bull. Two stories: "Taken" and "The Orgy" by kollontai [B/A+] When posted: 6/7/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: "La Amadora" or kollontai@hotmail.com These two shorts were bundled together in a single post. The first read a bit like over-embellished, out-breath "arty" erotica, competently written, but not much more than a snippet. The second was very different, musings in the mind of an unnamed man as he drives home from an orgy in a cloud of disgust and self-hatred. Not exactly a story to turn you on sexually, but as a story about sex and sexual reactions it was very. very good, and with some more work and polish, could be published professionally. Suggestion to the author: The first didn't entirely work, the second did; I'd like to see more. 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